A Violet Tucked Snugly in the Grass
an English sonnet123 total reviews
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Brooke, this is yet another marvelous way of saying, 'stop and smell the roses.'
Such tiny gems reveal themselves each day,
but only to those souls who slow their pace.
For those inclined to hurry on their way,
the beauty of our world is put to waste.
Nicely done,
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Brooke, this is yet another marvelous way of saying, 'stop and smell the roses.'
Such tiny gems reveal themselves each day,
but only to those souls who slow their pace.
For those inclined to hurry on their way,
the beauty of our world is put to waste.
Nicely done,
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Carolyn, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Lastamen
Brilliant. The need to simply slow our pace and truly appreciate all that is around us. Our world is a wonder of blessing - just as surely as we are fearfully and wonderfully made. Well done.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Brilliant. The need to simply slow our pace and truly appreciate all that is around us. Our world is a wonder of blessing - just as surely as we are fearfully and wonderfully made. Well done.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Lastamen, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from skye
It is truly in the small, delicate details that we see how intricate and beautiful this life is.
Take life slowly and enjoy the journey.
Your poem is exquisite.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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It is truly in the small, delicate details that we see how intricate and beautiful this life is.
Take life slowly and enjoy the journey.
Your poem is exquisite.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Skye, how good to hear from you :-) Thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Max Edon
I thought that this was a very beautiful poem. You had a lot of nice rhymes in this. The message was just lovely. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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I thought that this was a very beautiful poem. You had a lot of nice rhymes in this. The message was just lovely. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Max, thank you for your thoughtful comments and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
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You are welcome
Comment from Joan E.
Sawyer and I have a special connection--I recently hung a decorative butterfly kite to hide the Direct TV guy's placement of a new satellite dish and can see it flutter as I type! I admired your sonnet with alternating rhymes about much more exciting "gems" in our everyday world. I won't miss the "rainbow in a shard of broken glass" ever again!! Many hugs and best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Sawyer and I have a special connection--I recently hung a decorative butterfly kite to hide the Direct TV guy's placement of a new satellite dish and can see it flutter as I type! I admired your sonnet with alternating rhymes about much more exciting "gems" in our everyday world. I won't miss the "rainbow in a shard of broken glass" ever again!! Many hugs and best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Sawyer would be all over your butterfly. He hadn't been to Evan and Rose's house since Valentine's Day and he'd only been there twice in his life - they are Nora's friends, so Miranda thought she'd have to remind him who they are, but when she mentioned their names, he immediately said - the butterfly! And then he added, the green butterfly, and of course, the butterfly he remembered all that time was indeed green :-) What a memory this kid has on top of his powers of observation :-) Brooke
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How exciting that you all recognize Sawyer exceptional abilities, because they will be cultivated and used to their greatest potential. So far, my velcro fasteners are holding and the colorful butterfly is still flapping in the ocean breezes. More cheers- Joan
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Brooke:-)
"Violet Tucked Snugly in the Grass" contains a noble aspiration to be awakened to the simple beauties of the world in the concluding couplet. The verses seems to celebrate that the author is awake to these glories and beauties though not everyone is aware of them. As I understand the concluding couplet of a Shakespearian sonnet should be a twist, a counter to the main poem. I would suggest that this couplet ask for awakenment to what we judge to be negative features of the world. Other wise It appears to me that the meter, rhyme, number of quatrains and concluding couplet are met excellently. Good luck in the contest.
Preston
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Hi, Brooke:-)
"Violet Tucked Snugly in the Grass" contains a noble aspiration to be awakened to the simple beauties of the world in the concluding couplet. The verses seems to celebrate that the author is awake to these glories and beauties though not everyone is aware of them. As I understand the concluding couplet of a Shakespearian sonnet should be a twist, a counter to the main poem. I would suggest that this couplet ask for awakenment to what we judge to be negative features of the world. Other wise It appears to me that the meter, rhyme, number of quatrains and concluding couplet are met excellently. Good luck in the contest.
Preston
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Preston, thank you for your kind contest wishes and extremely thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Brooke,
A wonderful poem full of English country life.
When I was a boy I lived for a time on a small farm in Suffolk. Your words brought those days back.
Good luck in the contest!
Ron x
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke,
A wonderful poem full of English country life.
When I was a boy I lived for a time on a small farm in Suffolk. Your words brought those days back.
Good luck in the contest!
Ron x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Ron, for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a beautiful sonnet, Brooke. It bares some of God's "small" miracles of the natural world and bids us keep our eyes open to them. The sonnet is perfectly executed, with flawless iambic pentameter and rhyme scheme, logical development, a turn at the proper place, and a miniature blockbuster of a closing couplet. You make it seem easy (which it is not). Love, Jeanie
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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This is a beautiful sonnet, Brooke. It bares some of God's "small" miracles of the natural world and bids us keep our eyes open to them. The sonnet is perfectly executed, with flawless iambic pentameter and rhyme scheme, logical development, a turn at the proper place, and a miniature blockbuster of a closing couplet. You make it seem easy (which it is not). Love, Jeanie
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Jeanie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Eternal Muse
This sonnet sings joy de vivre in every line. It exudes life, and is very optimistic in nature. It lifted my spirits. And darling Sawyer is there to brighten my day too.
A grain of sand that sparkles by the sea,
a hermit crab emerging from its shell,
a seed before it grows into a tree --
miraculous, the world in which we dwell
Excellent imagery and versatility. Great word choices, Brooke. A most enjoyable and original sonnet.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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This sonnet sings joy de vivre in every line. It exudes life, and is very optimistic in nature. It lifted my spirits. And darling Sawyer is there to brighten my day too.
A grain of sand that sparkles by the sea,
a hermit crab emerging from its shell,
a seed before it grows into a tree --
miraculous, the world in which we dwell
Excellent imagery and versatility. Great word choices, Brooke. A most enjoyable and original sonnet.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Yelena, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Delahay
I like what this poem is saying, or at least what I am getting from it. It seems to be saying that we should always be aware of the seemingly small but still miraculous things around us every day. A tiny acorn can become a huge oak tree. A single grain of sand can be part of something so much bigger.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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I like what this poem is saying, or at least what I am getting from it. It seems to be saying that we should always be aware of the seemingly small but still miraculous things around us every day. A tiny acorn can become a huge oak tree. A single grain of sand can be part of something so much bigger.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Ward, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
