Is Faith the Wave?
rhyming quatrains120 total reviews
Comment from Angel Debbie
With Faith all things are possible as the Good Book says!
Without Faith you never know what will happen.
Great contest entry, Best wishes to you and yours.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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With Faith all things are possible as the Good Book says!
Without Faith you never know what will happen.
Great contest entry, Best wishes to you and yours.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Angel,t hank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from James Dooney
Nice quatrain entry you have given us here brooke. Faith is something is the basis for everything really. When we believe in it, we can achieve it !
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Nice quatrain entry you have given us here brooke. Faith is something is the basis for everything really. When we believe in it, we can achieve it !
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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James, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Yes, faith is all that you have carefully questioned about. Faith is going for the plunge like a blind man but believing without an iota of doubt with hope that all will be alright at the end. I love the muse.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Yes, faith is all that you have carefully questioned about. Faith is going for the plunge like a blind man but believing without an iota of doubt with hope that all will be alright at the end. I love the muse.
ola thomas
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Ola, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from dmt1967
This is another really good poem love the picture and I like the thought on life poems you write good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
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This is another really good poem love the picture and I like the thought on life poems you write good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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thank you, dmt, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hey. I send you lots of luck inthe contest.
I like the different spin onthis about faith.
Who really knows where it rides in on...padumachitta
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Hey. I send you lots of luck inthe contest.
I like the different spin onthis about faith.
Who really knows where it rides in on...padumachitta
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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padumachitta, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
This is truly lovely. I continue to find it amazing that you always make this seem so easy. this has excellent rhyme and I especially like:
is it when I give my heart,
the greatest of all treasure?
Wonderful entry for this contest and I wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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This is truly lovely. I continue to find it amazing that you always make this seem so easy. this has excellent rhyme and I especially like:
is it when I give my heart,
the greatest of all treasure?
Wonderful entry for this contest and I wish you all the best.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Valerie :-) Brooke
Comment from catch22
Hi Brooke, I like this short but sweet little set of quatrains with excellent use of iambic meter and a clever use of metaphor to describe a leap of faith.
I did find the first 2 lines of the first stanza a bit awkward grammatically though. What do you think of the following suggestion:
Is faith the wave that leaves the shore
for distant destination(s),
Although this does make more sense to me when I read it, you do lose the pureness of the destination/hesitation rhyme pair. It's just a thought. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke, I like this short but sweet little set of quatrains with excellent use of iambic meter and a clever use of metaphor to describe a leap of faith.
I did find the first 2 lines of the first stanza a bit awkward grammatically though. What do you think of the following suggestion:
Is faith the wave that leaves the shore
for distant destination(s),
Although this does make more sense to me when I read it, you do lose the pureness of the destination/hesitation rhyme pair. It's just a thought. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Gail, I debated the destination/destinations choice - I still am not sure which one I will go with in the end. Thank you for your thoughtful feedback and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. I guess you could claim poetic license. It's a fair call.
Comment from humpwhistle
This could just as well have gone into the Faith
competition, Brooke. You break the concept down
to its essence. We are all people of faith.
We surrender to it with every breath--as you deftly
point out.
But surrendering our precious hearts
to faith in our peers might be the most hard won
faith of all.
You caught me waxing philosophical. Shhhhhh. I'll be waning philosophical soon enough.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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This could just as well have gone into the Faith
competition, Brooke. You break the concept down
to its essence. We are all people of faith.
We surrender to it with every breath--as you deftly
point out.
But surrendering our precious hearts
to faith in our peers might be the most hard won
faith of all.
You caught me waxing philosophical. Shhhhhh. I'll be waning philosophical soon enough.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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And there you go making me laugh again, Lee :-) I had already entered a poem in the faith contest or I would have used it for that :-) Thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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Yes, I remember your Faith poem.
An embarrassment of richs. An admirable thing.
I have an embarrassment of rices. They all end with A-Roni. Maybe they taste better in San Francisco. You think?
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Oh, I have a class to teach in a few minutes and now you've put me in a silly mood. I need to get serious, my friend. People pay me to be serious! LOL
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I promise not to make funny faces from the back of the class. Okay, maybe a moon.
Comment from RYME4U
Excellent. Perfectly smooth and free flowing. The rhymes are excellent, too. I like how you question what faith is and then say wha it means to you. Great job!
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Excellent. Perfectly smooth and free flowing. The rhymes are excellent, too. I like how you question what faith is and then say wha it means to you. Great job!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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RYME4U - thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Nice piece of poetry about 'Faith ?'
Impressive wording.
Smooth flow with, as usual, lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"....or is it when I give my heart,
the greatest of all treasure?"
Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Nice piece of poetry about 'Faith ?'
Impressive wording.
Smooth flow with, as usual, lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"....or is it when I give my heart,
the greatest of all treasure?"
Best of Luck!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, RP :-) Brooke
