Comment from Lena Borghi

Excellent

This is adorable, Brooke. A bit of poetic whimsy indeed. A well crafted tale with a very familiar theme. If we had a dime for every time our plans were interrupted...although sometimes those interruptions are the best thing ever!

Great rhymes and the alternating lines of 8 and 6 syllables give it a wonderful childlike rhythm. Enjoyed it!

Best,
Lena

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014

Thank you, Lena, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Brilliant! Love the way you told this story about a day off disrupted by the sashaying 'pretty little miss'. LOL!

I adore the image of him with his slippers and his books.


The photo is priceless. Sawyer's expression is perfect for the poem.

Thanks for the smile, Brooke.

Av

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014

Av, thank you for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from abbasjoy

Excellent

A cute little poem about life's unexpected moments, that are not necessarily unpleasant.
Man's well laid plans are often interrupted by those who care nothing for your plans, as they have a plan of their own.
Love the picture of Sawyer and Chloe, it expresses perfectly the young man's horror at being interrupted, and the delight of the little miss at being the source of such interruption.
Great job!

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014

abbasjoy, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello adewpearl, Brooke, Such a splendid poem. I don't know who I envy more, Horatio or the pretty little miss. Of special note:

When at the door he heard a knock,
an unexpected guest,
whose mission really had no room
for reading or for rest.

(And you wonder why I'm envious ... So, let the knocking begin 'cause I'll just say, "come on in." LOL.)

A fun poem that made me smile at the end of a long day and wacky week. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014

LateBloomer, thank you so much :-) I envy them both - such a great time they have with each other. Brooke

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Yep, another "adewpearler" Great flow!
You are the queen of ABCB rhyme

Don't really think a comma is required in the second verse between 'they' and 'my' I think the comma after friend is adequate and still maintains the appropriate pause

for often we will find ourselves
in other people's hands,
and they my friend, might just have made
a different set of plans.

I think that flows better

just my thought

xxdip

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014

thanks for the thoughtful feedback, Dip :-) I like using a comma with direct address, but I also understand your point of view :-) Brooke

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

The bard immediately came to mind -- 'There are more things in Heaven and Earth, Horatio, than are dreamt of in your philosophy.'

The look on his face says it all - the photos you use are almost as good as your poems. You've captured his essence in so very many of them.

Whimsy yes, enchanting definitely.

Jean

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014

Jean, thank you so much :-) I do love the photos! Brooke

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

Hehe, I adore your closing quatrain which summarises beautifully and could almost be a standalone poem. The picture is cute as a button and you've written a great piece to accompany it.

Mike

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014

Mike, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from poetbear

Excellent

What a pic and amoment. The write works in tandem with that greeat photo.
It is a gem of a write.
Reads well and make sense.
Talk about a Kodak moment!!
He is a doll!!

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Maddy - yep, the second I saw this photo I just had to share it :-) Brooke

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

This is so cute, Brooke, and I loved the picture! Are they going to get married when they grow up? (lol). They are such a nice couple.

Great rhymes, flow and whimsy here. Excellent imagery and creativity.

She sashayed toward Horatio,
this pretty little miss,
and found a spot upon his cheek
to plant a little kiss.

These children are so much fun! Thank you for the read.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014

Thank you, Yelena. I've teased Miranda about that. It would make for the best slide show ever at the wedding reception if they had photos dating back to before the bride and groom were 2 :-) Brooke

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

A great picture of Sawyer!
Charming story about
Horatio with a cute ending.
Excellent rhyme and meter and good use of alliteration.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014

Thank you so much, Nancy :-) Brooke