In a Time before the Waters
rhyming quatrains141 total reviews
Comment from OLA THOMAS
That was 'in the beginning, 'The Genesis'. A deep inner mind at work re-analyzing the mysteries that was in the past. HE change all the void and confusion to the present beauty. Well God has given warnings to world about HIS days of Anger... A very insghftul and thoughtful work
ola thomas
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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That was 'in the beginning, 'The Genesis'. A deep inner mind at work re-analyzing the mysteries that was in the past. HE change all the void and confusion to the present beauty. Well God has given warnings to world about HIS days of Anger... A very insghftul and thoughtful work
ola thomas
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Ola, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Idamarty
Hello Brooke,
What a beautiful poem about faith in God and how we sometimes question in those dark moments. I loved the way you allow the reader to see that all we have to do is look around to know that our Creator is ever present. Thanks so much for sharing this...blessings.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Hello Brooke,
What a beautiful poem about faith in God and how we sometimes question in those dark moments. I loved the way you allow the reader to see that all we have to do is look around to know that our Creator is ever present. Thanks so much for sharing this...blessings.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Idamarty, thank you so much for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Nice piece of poetry beautifully displaying the power of faith in God and various colors of His creation!
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Its last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Good Luck!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Nice piece of poetry beautifully displaying the power of faith in God and various colors of His creation!
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Its last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Good Luck!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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RP, thank you so much for your good luck wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
An appreciative poem of Faith with rhyme & reason for why you are inspired, & are thankful for the wonders of how so much was given to you. And, in turn, I think helps us all to reflect on this message of faithful reassurance & belief of how our Creator has accomplished such impressive events from the get go.
Caressa
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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An appreciative poem of Faith with rhyme & reason for why you are inspired, & are thankful for the wonders of how so much was given to you. And, in turn, I think helps us all to reflect on this message of faithful reassurance & belief of how our Creator has accomplished such impressive events from the get go.
Caressa
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Caressa, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Zue65
I really have nothing to say about the form and the rhythm of the poem for it is obviously excellent. The message also framed the importance of believing the ALL SEEING GOD AND CREATOR of the universe which was emphasized in your poem. Truly excellent.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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I really have nothing to say about the form and the rhythm of the poem for it is obviously excellent. The message also framed the importance of believing the ALL SEEING GOD AND CREATOR of the universe which was emphasized in your poem. Truly excellent.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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nassus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I love this powerful and deep message. This poem give us a different outlook on faith. Very well written with a lovely art work. Best wishes for the contest.
Great job Brooke!
:)
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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I love this powerful and deep message. This poem give us a different outlook on faith. Very well written with a lovely art work. Best wishes for the contest.
Great job Brooke!
:)
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Aurora, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I enjoyed the verse Brooke, and the personification of our creator. Excellent meter, rhyme, and syntax, deliver your personal message to us. Good luck. Kenny
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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I enjoyed the verse Brooke, and the personification of our creator. Excellent meter, rhyme, and syntax, deliver your personal message to us. Good luck. Kenny
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Kenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Cin
A stunning painting to go with a stunning poem. I'm almost at a loss for words. Your abcb rhyme scheme has been executed to perfection but your backward imagery of creation, from a full canvas to the void, is cleverly etched using emotive phraseology. Ending in humbleness and appreciation. Beautiful.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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A stunning painting to go with a stunning poem. I'm almost at a loss for words. Your abcb rhyme scheme has been executed to perfection but your backward imagery of creation, from a full canvas to the void, is cleverly etched using emotive phraseology. Ending in humbleness and appreciation. Beautiful.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Cin, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
Nice!
I would have added 'the" in the last verse
and it would read better and stuff syllabic count because it means diddly shit if one knows how to read poetry just another unnecessary parameter and silly law that someone has decided to invoke.
If there's one thing that shits me more in poetry is stuffing rules!!.....because there are none!
I remember all Creation,
from the firmament to the sea,
and then I stop to thank the Lord
for all He's given me.
da dum di da da dum di ah
da dum di ah di di
da dum di ah dah dum di ah
da dum di dum di di
with respect dip
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Nice!
I would have added 'the" in the last verse
and it would read better and stuff syllabic count because it means diddly shit if one knows how to read poetry just another unnecessary parameter and silly law that someone has decided to invoke.
If there's one thing that shits me more in poetry is stuffing rules!!.....because there are none!
I remember all Creation,
from the firmament to the sea,
and then I stop to thank the Lord
for all He's given me.
da dum di da da dum di ah
da dum di ah di di
da dum di ah dah dum di ah
da dum di dum di di
with respect dip
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Dip, for your review. "If one knows how to read poetry..." With all respect, Dip, I actually do believe I know how to read poetry and would not write anything to the detriment of the sound of my writing in order to follow a silly law. I have read the poem to myself, aloud, several times and am quite happy with the result of my many edits, all written for the purpose of improving the sound, none made for the purpose of following unnecessary rules. Brooke
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it was a pisstake brooke I was saying this tongue in cheek you silly girl of course you know how to read poetry!! lol
that dada dum shit was just a little thing I have caught you doing to show syllabic rhythm or whatever you call it you have to learn to distinguish dip TIC and serious suggestion.how could I possibly tell a poet as your self that something sounds wrong.
in actually fact omitting "the' from your verse works as well because its all about the governing beat and I too have read it many times and lets just say I'll agree to disagree ok
xxdip
Comment from rjuselius
this is a delicate piece of poetic art! with an honest account of your own faith. nice one!
thank you for sharing! and amazing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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this is a delicate piece of poetic art! with an honest account of your own faith. nice one!
thank you for sharing! and amazing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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rebekka, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
