Clarity
contemplative quatrains152 total reviews
Comment from strandregs
Lovely and lively
And my primRy litterature teacher
Would say your leaves are falling :-)
I never understood
Black is black I want my baby back
Untill I read this
And saw two black parallel linez on a white ackground
Going going going
But they never meet.Z.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Lovely and lively
And my primRy litterature teacher
Would say your leaves are falling :-)
I never understood
Black is black I want my baby back
Untill I read this
And saw two black parallel linez on a white ackground
Going going going
But they never meet.Z.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Z, for your thoughtful review :-)Brooke
Comment from MisinformedPoet
Once again, you have written a poem that flows beautifully and has a lovely rhyme and meter, you are very skilled at this and it makes your poems so delightful to read.
This poem has a wistful and disappointed quality to it and I really love the lines: "The greys keep popping up to blur the whites and blacks."
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Once again, you have written a poem that flows beautifully and has a lovely rhyme and meter, you are very skilled at this and it makes your poems so delightful to read.
This poem has a wistful and disappointed quality to it and I really love the lines: "The greys keep popping up to blur the whites and blacks."
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
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MisinformedPoet, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Zue65
The picture of Sawyer in pensive mood amplified the message of your poem and made it easy for the readers to appreciate more, the poem. Your Sawyer poems are literary pieces that I enjoy reading and reviewing. God bless.
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The picture of Sawyer in pensive mood amplified the message of your poem and made it easy for the readers to appreciate more, the poem. Your Sawyer poems are literary pieces that I enjoy reading and reviewing. God bless.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
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thank you, nassus, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I like to think about life like a rainbow. Life has so many questions and our curiosity is never-ending. But if you see only black and white, the world will never open to you. Love this poem Brooke!
:)
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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I like to think about life like a rainbow. Life has so many questions and our curiosity is never-ending. But if you see only black and white, the world will never open to you. Love this poem Brooke!
:)
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Aurora, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Cin
I love the insight - the impermanent nature of our existence - contained within the poem. There is no real exactness, it often comes down to a forever changing perspective on things. The structure is very fluid in its delivery. Lovely.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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I love the insight - the impermanent nature of our existence - contained within the poem. There is no real exactness, it often comes down to a forever changing perspective on things. The structure is very fluid in its delivery. Lovely.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Cin, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
I can really see why you are partial to ABCB rhyme Brooke..it creates a natural beat and canter. I really like this rhyme format but hardly use it what it does it takes the pressure off having to rhyme and it still reads very well. interesting how American English has its little quirky spelling and this being an American site it is continually wanting to correct me Grays for example is spelt greys in my part of the English speaking world. You guys also tend to drop the "u" in those words ending in "our" eg colour becomes color etc.
Must be interesting as a grammarian of the Queen's English
to the ambiguities and idiosyncrasies, the fickleness and the double innuendo of many words. I am NOT a grammarian in any stretch of the imagination..although I am not as bad a speller as it may seem as I am a one finger typist whose mind is faster than his finger! lol
I like the poem..I like the interpretations you can put on it. Not sure if the grandson image suits the theme of the ditty but on saying that, my interpretation might be completely different to yours and that my friend as I have said many times over is the beauty of poetry and diversity of style.
with respect
dip
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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I can really see why you are partial to ABCB rhyme Brooke..it creates a natural beat and canter. I really like this rhyme format but hardly use it what it does it takes the pressure off having to rhyme and it still reads very well. interesting how American English has its little quirky spelling and this being an American site it is continually wanting to correct me Grays for example is spelt greys in my part of the English speaking world. You guys also tend to drop the "u" in those words ending in "our" eg colour becomes color etc.
Must be interesting as a grammarian of the Queen's English
to the ambiguities and idiosyncrasies, the fickleness and the double innuendo of many words. I am NOT a grammarian in any stretch of the imagination..although I am not as bad a speller as it may seem as I am a one finger typist whose mind is faster than his finger! lol
I like the poem..I like the interpretations you can put on it. Not sure if the grandson image suits the theme of the ditty but on saying that, my interpretation might be completely different to yours and that my friend as I have said many times over is the beauty of poetry and diversity of style.
with respect
dip
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you, dip, for your thoughtful feedback. Yes, spelling and pronunciation often vary in a global writing community, something some reviewers are more aware of and flexible about than others. I had an Australian reviewer who once acknowledged that in the U.S. people pronounce premier like preMEER but still docked me a point for using that pronunciation as the basis of a rhyme that didn't rhyme to her ear :-) I agree that a toddler would not be thinking these thoughts. Quite often I use a picture of his because it inspired what I wrote though I never intended the poem to be about him. The connection between photo and poem is often far more figurative than literal. Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
There is a touch of whimsy in the way the intangibles such as ifs and whys and clarity are personified here, but the underlying message seems deadly serious - how do we achieve certainty on issues when there is always an argument for either side.
'everyone and all' made me pause. I know the phrase 'one and all' but I'm not sure if I've ever encountered this version.
Certainly a little more sombre than your usual, despite the strong meter and rhyme.
Steve
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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There is a touch of whimsy in the way the intangibles such as ifs and whys and clarity are personified here, but the underlying message seems deadly serious - how do we achieve certainty on issues when there is always an argument for either side.
'everyone and all' made me pause. I know the phrase 'one and all' but I'm not sure if I've ever encountered this version.
Certainly a little more sombre than your usual, despite the strong meter and rhyme.
Steve
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Steve, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
My boss told me once I was always looking for black and white in a pooh brown world. Nice to see others share the
quest. Writing here is excellent.
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My boss told me once I was always looking for black and white in a pooh brown world. Nice to see others share the
quest. Writing here is excellent.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you, LIJ, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from ScarletAfflictions
Oh I so love this little write! It reminds me just a tad of my very favorite Millay. Playful in a way but also deeply probing into the human existence. Well done!
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Oh I so love this little write! It reminds me just a tad of my very favorite Millay. Playful in a way but also deeply probing into the human existence. Well done!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you, ScarletAfflictions, for your thoughtful response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
What a dramatic photograph and accompanying reflections! I relished the contrast between the blurred "gray" and the "clarity of black and white". I enjoyed the bonus of the rhymed quatrains. Most importantly, I am certain that Sawyer, like his grandmother, will keep striving for clarity! Many cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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What a dramatic photograph and accompanying reflections! I relished the contrast between the blurred "gray" and the "clarity of black and white". I enjoyed the bonus of the rhymed quatrains. Most importantly, I am certain that Sawyer, like his grandmother, will keep striving for clarity! Many cheers- Joan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Joan, thanks so much :-) Brooke
