Clarity
contemplative quatrains152 total reviews
Comment from Kingsland
This seems like a person that is up in the air. Not knowing which is the right way to turn. When things are no longer black and white, buy gray. It has a tendency for confusion along their way. This was an excellent poem. I enjoyed partaking in its poetic voice... John
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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This seems like a person that is up in the air. Not knowing which is the right way to turn. When things are no longer black and white, buy gray. It has a tendency for confusion along their way. This was an excellent poem. I enjoyed partaking in its poetic voice... John
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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John, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking lovely piece of poetry beautifully presenting a challenging situation for its fitting solution!
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth and captivating flow from the beginning to the end.
Nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
".....but still my house stands empty
for clarity won't call."
The solution lies in 'Meditation backed by strong Will Power.'
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking lovely piece of poetry beautifully presenting a challenging situation for its fitting solution!
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth and captivating flow from the beginning to the end.
Nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
".....but still my house stands empty
for clarity won't call."
The solution lies in 'Meditation backed by strong Will Power.'
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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RP, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
Not only small boys have this sort of outlook of lots greys, also older boys! Nicely written, I sometimes wonder if you really need us to review your stuff because you know full well if is good or not, well it is! Nice even rhythmic meter, nice abcb rhyming, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Not only small boys have this sort of outlook of lots greys, also older boys! Nicely written, I sometimes wonder if you really need us to review your stuff because you know full well if is good or not, well it is! Nice even rhythmic meter, nice abcb rhyming, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
Makes you wonder what they could be thinking when they're quiet. I think kids know things we have forgotten. They're worth listening to, before they learn to be anything but original and unique.
Such a sweet picture. Nice rhyming, Brooke.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Makes you wonder what they could be thinking when they're quiet. I think kids know things we have forgotten. They're worth listening to, before they learn to be anything but original and unique.
Such a sweet picture. Nice rhyming, Brooke.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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thank you so much, Adrienne :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
Not only this is an excellent poem , but is deep philosophical
truth in it for all of us. Clarity is elusive sometimes.
Love The picture of our thinker. Pili
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Not only this is an excellent poem , but is deep philosophical
truth in it for all of us. Clarity is elusive sometimes.
Love The picture of our thinker. Pili
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome. Pili
Comment from c_lucas
This is an excellent poem, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive read. The way Sawyer is looking, he will be solving all the problems of the universe. (LOL)
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This is an excellent poem, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive read. The way Sawyer is looking, he will be solving all the problems of the universe. (LOL)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Charlie, for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from humpwhistle
Another six. And well deserved, Brooke.
I like this self-examination.
Maybe it's because I'm having an ongoing discussion with
a friend who holds onto a polar position.
Black and white never get anything done.
The world needs to be shot in grays.
Then we can splash the colors on.
Blacks and whites are extremes.
Answers are always found in between.
Perhaps my circumstances caused me to read your poem in a way other than intended, Brooke.
But there is value in that, too.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Another six. And well deserved, Brooke.
I like this self-examination.
Maybe it's because I'm having an ongoing discussion with
a friend who holds onto a polar position.
Black and white never get anything done.
The world needs to be shot in grays.
Then we can splash the colors on.
Blacks and whites are extremes.
Answers are always found in between.
Perhaps my circumstances caused me to read your poem in a way other than intended, Brooke.
But there is value in that, too.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Lee, thank you so much for your generous sixth star and your thoughtful response to what I have to say. No, you have not read it other than intended :-) Brooke
Comment from ElegantButler
Oh, yes. I remember this stage of life. It's when you first learn that sometimes things are fair and sometimes they aren't. It usually happens when you see how much more soda mom or dad has in their cup than yours.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Oh, yes. I remember this stage of life. It's when you first learn that sometimes things are fair and sometimes they aren't. It usually happens when you see how much more soda mom or dad has in their cup than yours.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Elegant Butler, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Brooke.
Maybe, for more regular meter:
'so my questions aren't addressed', though I don't know why I try to 'help' you, Brookers. :-)
On the same point, maybe:
'I've issued invitations to
most everyone and all'
AND...
'stands empty HERE'
'Revnom' and grateful 'bonus pumps' always welcome. Haha!
Anyway, a lovely read, as always.
Cheers, Ray.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Hi, Brooke.
Maybe, for more regular meter:
'so my questions aren't addressed', though I don't know why I try to 'help' you, Brookers. :-)
On the same point, maybe:
'I've issued invitations to
most everyone and all'
AND...
'stands empty HERE'
'Revnom' and grateful 'bonus pumps' always welcome. Haha!
Anyway, a lovely read, as always.
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Thirty two cents???
Thank you, Ray, for your feedback, but you got cheated if you were paid 32 cents. LOL Brooke
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You're so quick, Brooke, you missed my edited review.
Anyway, what do you think of my 'brilliant' observations? LOL.
I'm signing off for now, but I'll check later to ensure you've edited accordingly. :-) xx
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I have reread the poem, which I actually do when you make suggestions, and when I read it, it works. I don't stumble over my meter, and I like the way it sounds. So sorry to disappoint, Ray, but I have not edited. :-)
Comment from billscott
Hmmm, and I thought the greyness of life was an illusion at best.
Seems you echo a rampant concern among the many.
Terrific poem, great pic!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Hmmm, and I thought the greyness of life was an illusion at best.
Seems you echo a rampant concern among the many.
Terrific poem, great pic!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
