Clarity
contemplative quatrains152 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Beautiful poem, Brooke and just perfect for this poem. It certainly is food for thought. Black and white thinking is never good. We need the whole spectrum of colors. Have a great day, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Beautiful poem, Brooke and just perfect for this poem. It certainly is food for thought. Black and white thinking is never good. We need the whole spectrum of colors. Have a great day, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This poem says a lot, Brooke, take away our young man there, and we have questions that cannot possibly be answered. But they are still there, more a muddy grey than pure black and white. I hope Sawyer will find his answers easily when he is a lot older to the questions he is bound to ask. An excellent poem, sorry I didn't have a six left to give you. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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This poem says a lot, Brooke, take away our young man there, and we have questions that cannot possibly be answered. But they are still there, more a muddy grey than pure black and white. I hope Sawyer will find his answers easily when he is a lot older to the questions he is bound to ask. An excellent poem, sorry I didn't have a six left to give you. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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thank you, Sandra, for your thoughtful response to this poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from jmdg1954
With young ones limited vocabulary, it makes you wonder what goes through there minds. They are so intelligent at that age because everything to them is a new discovery.
Well done Brooke. John
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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With young ones limited vocabulary, it makes you wonder what goes through there minds. They are so intelligent at that age because everything to them is a new discovery.
Well done Brooke. John
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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thanks so much, John :-) Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
I don't think the Cute Little One will worry about such deep stuff at his age. He was probably thinking about the next wonderful adventure he could get himself into, because at that age, everything is an adventure. Great writing though.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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I don't think the Cute Little One will worry about such deep stuff at his age. He was probably thinking about the next wonderful adventure he could get himself into, because at that age, everything is an adventure. Great writing though.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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CR, thank you so much :-) I don't think Sawyer worries about such stuff too and did not intend the poem to be his words/thoughts. His photo often inspires poems that are not at all about him. Brooke :-)
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Brooke - I really loved this poem, its message profound in its layers. Solid writing skill as always a treat to read and ponder.
Loved Cutie Pie's pose, wonderful presentation my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Dear Brooke - I really loved this poem, its message profound in its layers. Solid writing skill as always a treat to read and ponder.
Loved Cutie Pie's pose, wonderful presentation my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Maureen, thank you so much :-) I love all this poses and expressions - there are thousands of them :-) Brooke
Comment from rjuselius
I love this piece of poetic art! Life has so many questions and the curiosity of a humanoid is never-ending. But if you see only black and white, the world will never open to you.
thank you for sharing
rebekka xx
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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I love this piece of poetic art! Life has so many questions and the curiosity of a humanoid is never-ending. But if you see only black and white, the world will never open to you.
thank you for sharing
rebekka xx
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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rebekka, thank you so much for your thoughtful comments and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from The Death
Hi, Brooke.
You've nicely captured how a growing kid sometimes gets confused as the world around seems to be good as well as unfair.
Very compelling opening:
The ifs and whens and whys of life
have stopped me in my tracks -
the way the grays keep popping up
to blur the whites and blacks.
I like the philosophy you have conveyed here, and it applies even to the adults. Good use of soft and hard I consonance.
Solid rhyming and consistent meter make it sound musical. I enjoyed reading it. :)
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Hi, Brooke.
You've nicely captured how a growing kid sometimes gets confused as the world around seems to be good as well as unfair.
Very compelling opening:
The ifs and whens and whys of life
have stopped me in my tracks -
the way the grays keep popping up
to blur the whites and blacks.
I like the philosophy you have conveyed here, and it applies even to the adults. Good use of soft and hard I consonance.
Solid rhyming and consistent meter make it sound musical. I enjoyed reading it. :)
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Anupam, thanks so much - yes, it is intended to apply to adults :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
Are there any blacks and whites in the world today? Now with the barrage of news feeds, all perspectives on any given issue are available instantaneously. It does not mean that blacks and whites have ceased to exist, just that you have to have the character to see them.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Are there any blacks and whites in the world today? Now with the barrage of news feeds, all perspectives on any given issue are available instantaneously. It does not mean that blacks and whites have ceased to exist, just that you have to have the character to see them.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Thank you, ravenblack, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming with tracks/blacks...best/unaddressed...all/call. Good alliteration with whens/whys...blur/blacks...I've/issued/invitations...still/stands...clarity/call. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming with tracks/blacks...best/unaddressed...all/call. Good alliteration with whens/whys...blur/blacks...I've/issued/invitations...still/stands...clarity/call. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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thanks so much, Righteous Riter :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
Great poem! Everything seems to be in the grey zone now-a-days
You message is the only thing with clarity! You did a super job this was a fun read.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Great poem! Everything seems to be in the grey zone now-a-days
You message is the only thing with clarity! You did a super job this was a fun read.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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RYME4U, thank you so much :-) Brooke
