Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi jackie, I am sorry to have to tell you but this is not a 5-7-5, it is actually a 7-11-6, you have misread the criteria I'm afraid, when it states 5-7-5 it means syllables, for example Fingers is two syllables as in fin-gers, you still have time to put it right I think Good luck.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014

I Tryed, well it was change.

reply by Eric1 on 08-Jul-2014

That is great Jackie, have upgraded to a five star, well done!

Comment from Christopher Lones

Good

Is the bear a man, or are you talking about an actual bear? Either way it's a pretty good poem. Hope you did good in your contest.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014

Thanks

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This is a fun poem that may well be based on one's own dog, sprawled out on the porch like a bear. I had one like that once. Never tried to wake him.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014

This is a Dog, a Alkita white as snow.