Visions Left On A Rock II
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Comment from honeytree
The art work is very interesting
the words detailing perhaps many visions
of many who have suffered and fallen within our world.
Perhaps needing comfort and love, not received.
Perhaps suffering being a very vivid memory
lonely feelings and memory strong.
honey tree
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The art work is very interesting
the words detailing perhaps many visions
of many who have suffered and fallen within our world.
Perhaps needing comfort and love, not received.
Perhaps suffering being a very vivid memory
lonely feelings and memory strong.
honey tree
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
Comment from LadyFair
Enjoyed the reading of this interesting, well written
poetic work in emotional depth of word choices, title,
theme and word imagery that pictures this work.
I would give you six stars but ran out Walter L.Jones.
It was kind of Hetty to help you with the form, but like
your style of writing Walter.
Found no need of correction.
*** LadyFair
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Enjoyed the reading of this interesting, well written
poetic work in emotional depth of word choices, title,
theme and word imagery that pictures this work.
I would give you six stars but ran out Walter L.Jones.
It was kind of Hetty to help you with the form, but like
your style of writing Walter.
Found no need of correction.
*** LadyFair
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from Cin
Bravo for putting everything up on the screen as you ended up answering my question. I loved the way you structured the beginning of your poem and wondered why you changed it - but you provided me with my answer - I do love the structure of the second version - but in your first you've definitely got the guts of it there which means you can have a play with the structure - as hard as it is don't be afraid to chop out bits or rearrange it - always keep a draft and if you really don't like the change go back. I hope this makes sense - I like what you attempted to do in both. Keep writing.
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Bravo for putting everything up on the screen as you ended up answering my question. I loved the way you structured the beginning of your poem and wondered why you changed it - but you provided me with my answer - I do love the structure of the second version - but in your first you've definitely got the guts of it there which means you can have a play with the structure - as hard as it is don't be afraid to chop out bits or rearrange it - always keep a draft and if you really don't like the change go back. I hope this makes sense - I like what you attempted to do in both. Keep writing.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
