Comment from nor84

Good

Even the missing "G" that implied that milk filled cows might be inside >>>Lost me here. Missing G from what

That was the night he found the old Jack Daniels bottle, in the alley on the way home.>>> short enough that you don't need a comma.


I'll take you on any time(anytime,) any place (anyplace,)any year, any color, (and) any flavor.

I assume you meant to use 'turbine'

instead of 'turbin'.

He noticed a couple minutes later that woman (women) surrounded him.

Very humorous, and you might just win with it. Needs an edit for the reasons given.













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 Comment Written 05-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

The G missing from "Gutter" leaving "utter"... I know, a looong stretch. Yes, turbine. I didn't get to enter because I already entered two. They lucked out. Hahaha. I'll fix it! mikey

reply by nor84 on 05-Jul-2014

When you don't get to enter, don't post. Just file the thing. The contest will come back, and as long as you don't post, you can enter in a later one. Too bad. This was good.

reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

Thank you. I'll just come up with another one! I sometimes am reluctant to enter anyway since my regular readers don't usually see the contest entries.

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the story. The rules did not say anything about women. A Just that there had to be just one man left on earth. He should have known when he got a wish from a Jack Daniels bottle full of piss. Maybe he can find another bottle and wish most of the girls would turn to be lesbian Great work. Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 05-Jul-2014