The Pride of My Mantle
Free Verse-Contest Entry-21 total reviews
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Creepy, creepy, creepy! Congratulations on your contest win.
Great passage:
" . . . but her skull I will not part with
I seek its counsel
though it yet lies
no eyes to stare
a candle
enlightens me
I love her so."
Reminds me something Hitchcock would come up with! Great job.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Creepy, creepy, creepy! Congratulations on your contest win.
Great passage:
" . . . but her skull I will not part with
I seek its counsel
though it yet lies
no eyes to stare
a candle
enlightens me
I love her so."
Reminds me something Hitchcock would come up with! Great job.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Wow. I don't mind being mentioned in the same breath with Hitchcock at all. What a great compliment. So pleased you liked this one. I knew all the entries would be nice and uplifting. Hahaha. Something different. mikey
Comment from ann marie mazz
michael michael michael
I bow to your talent and imagination
your word play is marvelous
truly
you are the extraordinaire
and of course
you do free verse proud
all is well within this entry starting with the title
I can see how this entry won the contest
congratulations on that by the way
in this entry alone you deliver the total package
thank you for sharing
it was a pleasure to visit your page
congratulations again
ann marie
truly excellent play with words
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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michael michael michael
I bow to your talent and imagination
your word play is marvelous
truly
you are the extraordinaire
and of course
you do free verse proud
all is well within this entry starting with the title
I can see how this entry won the contest
congratulations on that by the way
in this entry alone you deliver the total package
thank you for sharing
it was a pleasure to visit your page
congratulations again
ann marie
truly excellent play with words
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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What a wonderful review to receive! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. I think that learning all of the other forms here has helped my free verse quite a bit. I can't stop smiling after reading this. Thank you so much!! mikey
Comment from Treischel
An impressive free verse write within the horror genre. A diabolical pretext of love for dear mother. So very much can be read into this creative monologue. Very entrancing.. Hardens to Hamlet and Poe.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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An impressive free verse write within the horror genre. A diabolical pretext of love for dear mother. So very much can be read into this creative monologue. Very entrancing.. Hardens to Hamlet and Poe.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Those are some wonderful names to hear. Wow. I am so pleased you enjoyed this. What a great encouraging review. Thank you very much, mikey
Comment from Dawn Munro
OMG, I see how this won, dear Michael - what a free verse! Marvelous! So Poe-ish and eloquent - I LOVED this!!! In fact, I may have a new favorite poem! (LOL) (hag that might well be...MUUuu-ha-ha...)
Truly OUTSTANDING in every way!!! (I'm SO glad I didn't miss this - THIS is writing I ADORE!)
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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OMG, I see how this won, dear Michael - what a free verse! Marvelous! So Poe-ish and eloquent - I LOVED this!!! In fact, I may have a new favorite poem! (LOL) (hag that might well be...MUUuu-ha-ha...)
Truly OUTSTANDING in every way!!! (I'm SO glad I didn't miss this - THIS is writing I ADORE!)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Wow. That is one of the best reviews I've ever received. Thank you so very much. I may never stop smiling. This will keep me writing for years!!! Thank you so much!! mikey
Comment from JudyS
I like this a lot. It's so very different and unusual, in a psycho kind of way. Great job on this. You showed a lot of creativity and the ending was a bit of a surprise. Nice touch. Best of luck with it. Judy
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I like this a lot. It's so very different and unusual, in a psycho kind of way. Great job on this. You showed a lot of creativity and the ending was a bit of a surprise. Nice touch. Best of luck with it. Judy
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from mjac777
Do I need to call the police? lol
Very realistic ... creepy. You sure scared the hell outta me! lol
By the time I got to:
"but her skull I will not part with
I seek its counsel"
I was ready to call 911
Well done.
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Do I need to call the police? lol
Very realistic ... creepy. You sure scared the hell outta me! lol
By the time I got to:
"but her skull I will not part with
I seek its counsel"
I was ready to call 911
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from SLHarper
This is fantastic tongue-in-cheek free verse that is both understated and vivid. I love the description of the femur being used for a mast, which the "evidence eliminator extraordinaire" uses to sail off into the bloody sunset. The narrator is definitely disturbed, but a mixture of guilt and habituation won't let him part with his prized skull! This is a great take on the prompts, which I hope is not autobiographical! Well done! :)
Steph
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This is fantastic tongue-in-cheek free verse that is both understated and vivid. I love the description of the femur being used for a mast, which the "evidence eliminator extraordinaire" uses to sail off into the bloody sunset. The narrator is definitely disturbed, but a mixture of guilt and habituation won't let him part with his prized skull! This is a great take on the prompts, which I hope is not autobiographical! Well done! :)
Steph
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from livelylinda
Author: Gee, I wonder who wrote this one??? Perfection in free verse poetry. None of those irritating punctuation and capitalization, that reviewers have been nagging me about today needing today. Your theme is "extraordinaire" and somewhere between chilling and hysterically funny and I think of whom might have their skull on my mantle. . .Great and certainly a contest contender. Linda
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Author: Gee, I wonder who wrote this one??? Perfection in free verse poetry. None of those irritating punctuation and capitalization, that reviewers have been nagging me about today needing today. Your theme is "extraordinaire" and somewhere between chilling and hysterically funny and I think of whom might have their skull on my mantle. . .Great and certainly a contest contender. Linda
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from James Dooney
oh this is quite a nice little work you have given us here indeed ! Yes its true - she never leaves huh !!! good job anf good luck !
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oh this is quite a nice little work you have given us here indeed ! Yes its true - she never leaves huh !!! good job anf good luck !
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. It sounds like a Shakespeare kind of work. He killed his mother. He chopped her body up and put I it in a dumpster. He keeps her skull and claims he loves her. I would run from his kind of love. Great Work. Good luck in the contest.
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I love the picture. I love the poem. It sounds like a Shakespeare kind of work. He killed his mother. He chopped her body up and put I it in a dumpster. He keeps her skull and claims he loves her. I would run from his kind of love. Great Work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
