A Tiger Roused Me from My Sleep
rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7143 total reviews
Comment from Alan K Pease
You capture the delight of a carousel in the form of a fearful beast, the child nurtured by being able to ride it but left with his dreams of its fearfulness. A little caution is a good thing even for a dragon slayer.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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You capture the delight of a carousel in the form of a fearful beast, the child nurtured by being able to ride it but left with his dreams of its fearfulness. A little caution is a good thing even for a dragon slayer.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Alan, thanks so much for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Amsterdam
And that's not too Grimm for kids...
Lol.
Ah... mysteries of history
Going round , and round.
You trying to scare the kids....
No, just have them hear a growl.
Love it.
Am.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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And that's not too Grimm for kids...
Lol.
Ah... mysteries of history
Going round , and round.
You trying to scare the kids....
No, just have them hear a growl.
Love it.
Am.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Am, thanks so much for your generous sixth star. Yep, hoping to scare them silly as many kids of elementary school age love the dark stuff. Of course, it's not for the toddler crowd. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A good poem Brooke - tells a good story about a nightmare. Perfect rhyme and meter and an all round clever write. Seven good stanzas and I think the tiger comes from the theme park where you have shown animals in previous poems. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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A good poem Brooke - tells a good story about a nightmare. Perfect rhyme and meter and an all round clever write. Seven good stanzas and I think the tiger comes from the theme park where you have shown animals in previous poems. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Dorothy :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
Good abcb srhymes
Perfect 8/7 8/7 meter your quatrains
Good use of alliteration.
Well paired picture and poem and another good children's poem
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Good abcb srhymes
Perfect 8/7 8/7 meter your quatrains
Good use of alliteration.
Well paired picture and poem and another good children's poem
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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emrpoems, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from starkat
Hi Brooke
A frightful story, indeed. That's good it was only a dream. The picture makes me think that tiger was on a carousel, and you could ride on it - fun for older kids, too scary for tiny tykes. (now I see from your notes it is a carousel tiger)
This is a beautifully written story poem filled with drama and fantasy. That tiger could create bad dreams and be very scary. The story line catches the reader's attention at the beginning and holds their hand to a satisfying conclusion. We're glad you survived to tell the frightful story. I could see this story would work well in a collection of stories for children - older children.
The 8/7/8/7 syllable counts seems to work great in quatrains to tell a story. It flows smooth;y with a dynamic feel.
Outstanding story poem done in quatrains. Enjoyed how you handled it. Well done ... ;o) Art
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke
A frightful story, indeed. That's good it was only a dream. The picture makes me think that tiger was on a carousel, and you could ride on it - fun for older kids, too scary for tiny tykes. (now I see from your notes it is a carousel tiger)
This is a beautifully written story poem filled with drama and fantasy. That tiger could create bad dreams and be very scary. The story line catches the reader's attention at the beginning and holds their hand to a satisfying conclusion. We're glad you survived to tell the frightful story. I could see this story would work well in a collection of stories for children - older children.
The 8/7/8/7 syllable counts seems to work great in quatrains to tell a story. It flows smooth;y with a dynamic feel.
Outstanding story poem done in quatrains. Enjoyed how you handled it. Well done ... ;o) Art
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Art, thanks so much for your generous response to this poem. I guess the scary quality of the tiger is the reason Sawyer selects the white rabbit instead every time they go to the mall. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from babylonia
Brooke,
ROFLMAO This is totally hilarious. I love it. Yeah, they always disappear when the lights come on. This is a good reason to sleep with the lights on. LOL JUST kidding. Imagery is excellent. Hope you're having a good one.
Love,
Barbara
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Brooke,
ROFLMAO This is totally hilarious. I love it. Yeah, they always disappear when the lights come on. This is a good reason to sleep with the lights on. LOL JUST kidding. Imagery is excellent. Hope you're having a good one.
Love,
Barbara
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Barbara, thank you so much, my friend :-) So glad it made you laugh :-) Brooke
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Brooke,
It definitely did. At first I thought it was one of those about a "man" eating tiger and you being a woman but the story you wrote was even better.
Love,
Barbara
Comment from Matthew M.
The old it's all a dream is a classic ending. I kind of suspected it when the part of dragons and swords came up, but I also thought it might just be a daydream of a little boy. I liked it and thought it was a lot of fun.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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The old it's all a dream is a classic ending. I kind of suspected it when the part of dragons and swords came up, but I also thought it might just be a daydream of a little boy. I liked it and thought it was a lot of fun.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Matthew :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. I like the rhyming with eat me/greet me. Good description and alliteration. Good complimentary photo followed by clear message.
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. I like the rhyming with eat me/greet me. Good description and alliteration. Good complimentary photo followed by clear message.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
This is a nice poem and well written with great rhyming. As a small girl, every night when I went to sleep, I had terrible nightmares. They went on nightly for many years. This poem reminded me about how afraid I was to go to sleep.
Kat
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke,
This is a nice poem and well written with great rhyming. As a small girl, every night when I went to sleep, I had terrible nightmares. They went on nightly for many years. This poem reminded me about how afraid I was to go to sleep.
Kat
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Kat, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from TAB_that's me
Brooke it is well written and descriptive but it might be a bit frightful as a child's poem. I wouldn't want to read it to a small child before bed.
teresa
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Brooke it is well written and descriptive but it might be a bit frightful as a child's poem. I wouldn't want to read it to a small child before bed.
teresa
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014
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Teresa, I would not read it to a preschool child, but kids in elementary school eat up the dark stuff. My daughter was a huge fan of Hillaire Belloc and Edward Gorey, for instance. :-) Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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You are right, older ones do like the dark stuff:)
