A Tiger Roused Me from My Sleep
rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7143 total reviews
Comment from J. Dark
Perfect rhyming quatrains, the piece reads beautifully fast and snappy. Such a lovely concept which children are bound to lap up. I enjoyed this and it made me smile.
Hope you are well.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Perfect rhyming quatrains, the piece reads beautifully fast and snappy. Such a lovely concept which children are bound to lap up. I enjoyed this and it made me smile.
Hope you are well.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Julie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ann marie mazz
hi brooke
I adore the entire cat family small and big
thus
I just had to turn the page
I found this so endearing
your words read with ease
I very much enjoyed your black and yellow color scheme
how very appropriate for the tiger
all I can say is
boy our dreams get us each and every time
thank you for sharing your talent
all is well within your poetic entry
this was a pleasure to read
ann marie
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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hi brooke
I adore the entire cat family small and big
thus
I just had to turn the page
I found this so endearing
your words read with ease
I very much enjoyed your black and yellow color scheme
how very appropriate for the tiger
all I can say is
boy our dreams get us each and every time
thank you for sharing your talent
all is well within your poetic entry
this was a pleasure to read
ann marie
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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ann marie, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem and its presentation :-) Brooke
Comment from sgalletti
Wonderfully crafted story of nightmares that children experience. As always, exceptional poetic devices used throughout, including multi-syllable rhyming words, vivid concrete imagery, alliteration, and internal as well as external rhyme. In the two lines "I never trembled...or ever been so fearful" should those lines begin with "I've" vs. "I"? Enjoyed - and learned, as I always do reading your poetry. Sue
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Wonderfully crafted story of nightmares that children experience. As always, exceptional poetic devices used throughout, including multi-syllable rhyming words, vivid concrete imagery, alliteration, and internal as well as external rhyme. In the two lines "I never trembled...or ever been so fearful" should those lines begin with "I've" vs. "I"? Enjoyed - and learned, as I always do reading your poetry. Sue
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Sue - so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
Brooke! Brooke!Oh babbling,dabbling Brooke! the Queen of ABCB and proximate rhyme! haha You have an amazing ability to make a poem out of anything, any picture, any situation. and even though the subject matter can be rather inane you always manage to make it rhythmically perfect and exciting.
thankyou for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Brooke! Brooke!Oh babbling,dabbling Brooke! the Queen of ABCB and proximate rhyme! haha You have an amazing ability to make a poem out of anything, any picture, any situation. and even though the subject matter can be rather inane you always manage to make it rhythmically perfect and exciting.
thankyou for sharing
dip
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Mr. Whitesall, the lovely man who owned the preschool I attended, called me Babbling Brooke. :-) Thanks so much, Dip :-) Brooke
Comment from jadapenn
This type of dream is what heavy heartbeats are made of. Thank goodness for bright sunny mornings when all these horrors disappear. A love poem, Brooke. I loved it but can only imagine what a scare it will be for a small boy. :) luv jada
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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This type of dream is what heavy heartbeats are made of. Thank goodness for bright sunny mornings when all these horrors disappear. A love poem, Brooke. I loved it but can only imagine what a scare it will be for a small boy. :) luv jada
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Jada, thank you so much for your generous response to my poem. I don't intend it for the toddler crowd, but elementary school kids love the dark stuff :-) Brooke
Comment from bob cullen
Words fail me. Your poetry really inspires others on this site to match your output, your style and your quality. Have you published your work? And can it be purchase? Do you have a personal favourite piece.
Who are your favourite poets? Sorry about all the questions, but your skill intrigues and fascinates me. I am a real fan,
Bob
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Words fail me. Your poetry really inspires others on this site to match your output, your style and your quality. Have you published your work? And can it be purchase? Do you have a personal favourite piece.
Who are your favourite poets? Sorry about all the questions, but your skill intrigues and fascinates me. I am a real fan,
Bob
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Bob, thank you so much for your generous sixth star. I have to get to work on publishing. Some of my favorite poets are Emily Dickinson, ee cummings and Robert Frost and Wilfred Owens, but there are many more :-) Brooke
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
HEllo there~!
Ah! I loved this poem. It's very well-written and the ending was a relief.. Phew! It was only a bad dream. But that picture of the carousel tiger sure is quite chilling!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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HEllo there~!
Ah! I loved this poem. It's very well-written and the ending was a relief.. Phew! It was only a bad dream. But that picture of the carousel tiger sure is quite chilling!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Kausar, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Oz Harte
Great dancing cadence that clips the reader along at a strapping pace. Apart from the end rhymes, there were internal rhymes, or near rhymes, intentional or otherwise, that added flavour and additional life. Then this humorous tale ended with a funnier twist. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Great dancing cadence that clips the reader along at a strapping pace. Apart from the end rhymes, there were internal rhymes, or near rhymes, intentional or otherwise, that added flavour and additional life. Then this humorous tale ended with a funnier twist. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Oz, thank you so much :-) My proximate rhymes are always intentional as I am a huge fan of proximate rhyming :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
So here we face the age-old question of how do we know a poem is a light-hearted piece of fun from the very first line, even when the topic is apparently serious.
Could it be the bouncy rhythm and/or the alternating lines of feminine rhyme? Or possibly the slightly exaggerated vocabulary e.g. homicidal?
In any case this is an excellent piece of fun and the reader is never in any doubt that there will be a happy ending rather than 'pools of blood so gory.'
Steve
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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So here we face the age-old question of how do we know a poem is a light-hearted piece of fun from the very first line, even when the topic is apparently serious.
Could it be the bouncy rhythm and/or the alternating lines of feminine rhyme? Or possibly the slightly exaggerated vocabulary e.g. homicidal?
In any case this is an excellent piece of fun and the reader is never in any doubt that there will be a happy ending rather than 'pools of blood so gory.'
Steve
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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So glad this one was fun for you, Steve :-) Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
I love your poem about how real a dream can be, brilliant rhyming in abab style.
I hadn't brought my sword to bed,
from dragons I'd been slaying --
not that a sword could stop those fangs
the tiger was displaying.
Well written
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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I love your poem about how real a dream can be, brilliant rhyming in abab style.
I hadn't brought my sword to bed,
from dragons I'd been slaying --
not that a sword could stop those fangs
the tiger was displaying.
Well written
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Mary,thank you so much :-) Brooke
