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In Chloe's Smile

a swap quatrain

126 total reviews 
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
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I enjoyed this one Brooke,
He is slimming up and doesn't look like a toddler anymore. It is nice to have a friend like Chloe to hold hands with and take a walk.
Well done,
Carolyn

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
    Carolyn,thank you so much :-) He is in the 92nd percentile of height but the 50th percentile of weight, so yes, he is a long and lean little boy :-) The fact that he doesn't look like a baby anymore is breaking his mother's heart. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from CR Delport
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Ah the Cute Little One and his friend looks adorable. They are still so young, innocent, and full of life. This is another gem of a poem for the collection.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
    CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from granny goes viral
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I just love, love, love the pure love and simplicity your words paint. I am always smiling when I read your words.
Thank you so much for taking the time to share your day and your words.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
    Granny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ArtGal
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Now tell me, what could be more precious than this??? He just couldn't have found a cuter one than Chloe! When they grow up, I can see them as Homecoming King and Queen, lol! Hey, you just never know. And I can see how Sawyer lost his heart to her Cutie Pie smile, lol. Keep 'em coming, Brooke, 'cause we never get bored with them. . .Sharon

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
    Sharon, thank you so much :-) This is a little girl who hasn't been taught how to play hard to get yet. LOL She made a major play for him with her touchy feely ways and her constant comments about how cute he is before he just surrendered. LOL :-) Brooke
reply by ArtGal on 04-Jul-2014
    She'll never have to play hard to get, and neither will he! They will be able to have their pick, not only on their looks, but already knowing what to do to get their ways! I think it may only take a smile on both parts, lolol!!!
Comment from rjuselius
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aaaawww.. the picture reminds me of my god-daughter, she looks exactly the same:) the poem itself is superb and describes well chloe's sweetness.
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
    Rebekka, thank you for your thoughtful review. Your god daughter must be a real cutie :-) Brooke
Comment from Smoothiecool
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what a beautiful write to a beautiful picture that portrays love

your well chosen words allows the reader to see and feel
this

yes a smile can always steal a heart

good visual to portray message

good enjambment through sentences to allow flow

good AA/BB rhyme theme through out verses

good alliteration in
heart to heart
hand in hand
can't, conceive

good verb use "smile" "lost" "love" to bring impact

flows well

cheers..Smoothiecool



 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
    Faye, thank you so much for your thorough and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
reply by Smoothiecool on 04-Jul-2014
    most welcome..SC >. Faye
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this swap quatrain about the girl who has stolen sawyer's heart, lol. they make such a cute couple...

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
    sweetwoodjax, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
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This swap quatrain sounds very natural, Brooke. It's a delightful poem and matches perfectly with the picture. Lovely soft 'C' consonance in lines three and four second verse. Giddy

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
    Giddy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mountainwriter49
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Hi, Brooke

I love this poem. Your use of repeating phrases is just wonderful, but not overdone. The aabb rhyme pattern is strong and effective. The theme is endearing and well developed. This is a most lovely read this evening.

Ray

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
    Thanks so much, Ray, for your generous sixth star and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
reply by mountainwriter49 on 03-Jul-2014
    You are most welcome, my talented friend. Be sure to button down for the storm. I'm in the Valley and we're not affected--thankfully!
    rr
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
    We had a horrific storm last night. We not only had the drenching rain and the intermittent loud clashes of thunder, but for about a half hour there was this constant and unnerving rumble of thunder. I got so nervous I called my son and made him entertain me for a half hour. LOL :-)
reply by mountainwriter49 on 03-Jul-2014
    Now you should write a poem about the storm! Thank goodness we've been spared that kind of weather here.
Comment from Deniz22
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Oh, sweet! God bless them...what a cute pair! I'm really touched by this picture and poem of sweet innocence. Thank you for sharing it. Dennis

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
    Dennis, thank you so much :-) Brooke