In Chloe's Smile
a swap quatrain126 total reviews
Comment from Green Lake Girl
I found it! What a couple of cute kids. To think you've captured this moment in time with verse. It will be wonderful for them to see this when they're older. As always, well penned, Brooke.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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I found it! What a couple of cute kids. To think you've captured this moment in time with verse. It will be wonderful for them to see this when they're older. As always, well penned, Brooke.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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I'm glad you got to see a picture of them together :-) Thanks so much, my friend. Brooke
Comment from Liandra
Another lovely poem with perfect rhyme. I believe one day this little girl and boy, will read your poems and smile at the wonderful memories you have captured.
The picture of them holding hands is perfect.
:) Liandra
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Another lovely poem with perfect rhyme. I believe one day this little girl and boy, will read your poems and smile at the wonderful memories you have captured.
The picture of them holding hands is perfect.
:) Liandra
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Liandra, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome. I enjoy your words, they brighten my day after writing my last chapter and the one I'm editing now.
So, my friend, thank you for sharing your joy...
:) hugs,
Liandra
Comment from Bina1
What a sweet poem, as sweet as their friendship! The photo, is as always, top notch! Thanks for sharing, a lovely age to enjoy!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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What a sweet poem, as sweet as their friendship! The photo, is as always, top notch! Thanks for sharing, a lovely age to enjoy!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Bina, I appreciate your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Delightful photo of these two little mates and a lovely swap quatrain of the simple things. Clasped hands, smiles as they run through their young life together. Nice read,
valda
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Delightful photo of these two little mates and a lovely swap quatrain of the simple things. Clasped hands, smiles as they run through their young life together. Nice read,
valda
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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valda, thank you so very much :-)) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
another adewpearler!
Like a sausage factory of sweet little poems on tap!
Would have liked to have seen perfect rhyme especially when rhyming in AABB format
maybe revisit the second verse line 1 and 2 for perfect rhyme like the rest of the poem..I love poems that start with a preposition or a conjunction
In Chloe's hand, In Chloe's smile
All is clasped and revealed
I've lost my heart; can't reconcile
My love is forever sealed
In Chloe's heart, I've lost mine
Our love becomes as one
We'll never part, this love's divine
And each day will always be fun
In Chloe's smile, I feel her love
I feel it in every way
In Chloe's smile, I never get enough
She really makes my day
xxdip
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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another adewpearler!
Like a sausage factory of sweet little poems on tap!
Would have liked to have seen perfect rhyme especially when rhyming in AABB format
maybe revisit the second verse line 1 and 2 for perfect rhyme like the rest of the poem..I love poems that start with a preposition or a conjunction
In Chloe's hand, In Chloe's smile
All is clasped and revealed
I've lost my heart; can't reconcile
My love is forever sealed
In Chloe's heart, I've lost mine
Our love becomes as one
We'll never part, this love's divine
And each day will always be fun
In Chloe's smile, I feel her love
I feel it in every way
In Chloe's smile, I never get enough
She really makes my day
xxdip
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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thanks for your poetic response to my poem, Dip - I fear we will never be of one mind on the issue of proximate rhyme, my friend :-) Brooke
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and that's the beauty of poetry and diversity of ones perception its healthy to have different tastes and styles so never change each others and just accept warts and all
xxdip
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Sawyer's got a girl friend, an attractive little girl with expressive features. More than likely she's stole Grandma's heart as well as Sawyer's. Expressly rhythmic, and some delightful unusual rhymes. Kenny
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Sawyer's got a girl friend, an attractive little girl with expressive features. More than likely she's stole Grandma's heart as well as Sawyer's. Expressly rhythmic, and some delightful unusual rhymes. Kenny
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Kenny, thank you so much :-) Yes, I totally approve of his taste in women. LOL Brooke
Comment from jadapenn
Lol, into the girls, are we. This is such a cute poem. One day Sawyer will open his poetry book and linger on this great photo. Then he will read the poem and something in his little heart will spark. Loved it. :) luv jada
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Lol, into the girls, are we. This is such a cute poem. One day Sawyer will open his poetry book and linger on this great photo. Then he will read the poem and something in his little heart will spark. Loved it. :) luv jada
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Jada, thank you so much. Even when he was just learning to talk he would make pretend phone calls to her, and her favorite thing to say is, Sawyer is so cute! LOL I have great photos of the two of them kissing each other on the cheek, which they do all the damn time. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
What divine, poetry, fine author! Just perfect rhythm, rhyme, tenor and tone. No criticism whatsoever. Only praise, praise, praise! Love your little Chloe--and the photo is a perfect accompaniment! Seraph ~
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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What divine, poetry, fine author! Just perfect rhythm, rhyme, tenor and tone. No criticism whatsoever. Only praise, praise, praise! Love your little Chloe--and the photo is a perfect accompaniment! Seraph ~
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Seraph, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
A picture paints a thousand words, and it seems you have found some of them
Such beauty and innocence, words may not be enough to depict the moment.
A jolly good write, and a unique moment captured in time within this rhyming structure.
Have a good day,
Best wishes
RG
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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A picture paints a thousand words, and it seems you have found some of them
Such beauty and innocence, words may not be enough to depict the moment.
A jolly good write, and a unique moment captured in time within this rhyming structure.
Have a good day,
Best wishes
RG
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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RG, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
On one level just a tale of childhood friendship - on another perhaps a love poem.
You have used the swap quatrain with small variations to good effect in this charming little piece.
Steve
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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On one level just a tale of childhood friendship - on another perhaps a love poem.
You have used the swap quatrain with small variations to good effect in this charming little piece.
Steve
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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thanks so much, Steve, for a thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
