As I Go Down and Down and Down
a quatern142 total reviews
Comment from acerisestory
You've gone "up and up and up" with this one, Brooke! But that's not unusual. A very thought provoking poem: where is down and where is up, after all? I love the repetition of "down and down and down," and your alliteration is really well done. I am waiting for you to publish, Brooke. If I had a six, I'd give it to you. Thanks for another well crafted poem. Alana
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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You've gone "up and up and up" with this one, Brooke! But that's not unusual. A very thought provoking poem: where is down and where is up, after all? I love the repetition of "down and down and down," and your alliteration is really well done. I am waiting for you to publish, Brooke. If I had a six, I'd give it to you. Thanks for another well crafted poem. Alana
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Alana, for your encouragement and your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from MissMerri
You have mastered the art of thinking the way a child might think, Brooke. This is so cute and whimsical and a unique mixture of adult logic and child-like vision of the world. I truly enjoyed this. You are a poet indeed!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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You have mastered the art of thinking the way a child might think, Brooke. This is so cute and whimsical and a unique mixture of adult logic and child-like vision of the world. I truly enjoyed this. You are a poet indeed!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Adonna, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
How cute! I'm always amazed at how you can recapture your inner child's fanciful mind. I love how you portray 'up' as a place - what a darling poem. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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How cute! I'm always amazed at how you can recapture your inner child's fanciful mind. I love how you portray 'up' as a place - what a darling poem. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Lou, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Brooke - some wise words to ponder my friend. I think we see more when we are "down" - Cutie Pie is a wizard:)
Great writing, fun and light.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Dear Brooke - some wise words to ponder my friend. I think we see more when we are "down" - Cutie Pie is a wizard:)
Great writing, fun and light.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Maureen :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
CUTE! AND MORE CUTE! Some of my first graders struggle with up and down. I will be sure to read them this poem. It may help.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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CUTE! AND MORE CUTE! Some of my first graders struggle with up and down. I will be sure to read them this poem. It may help.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Barbara - and God bless those little ones. Sawyer has up and down straight for a very long time now. I appreciate your generous sixth star. Brooke
Comment from words
Love your whimsically philosophical quatern.
There are days when I too wonder where up is. LOL
I find the form of this one most satisfying. Love how the repeating line progressively shifts position in the stanzas.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Love your whimsically philosophical quatern.
There are days when I too wonder where up is. LOL
I find the form of this one most satisfying. Love how the repeating line progressively shifts position in the stanzas.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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I adore the quatern. It is enough of a form to be a named form, but not as complex and restricting as something like the villanelle. Thank you so very much, Diane. I've been holding on to two sixes all week long. You and Lee both better post something soon before I get tired of saving them. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Adri7enne
Fascinating concepts, up and down and round and round. Kids have so much to absorb and every bit of it is fascinating. Nice to rediscover the world through a child's eyes. Great stuff, Brooke!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Fascinating concepts, up and down and round and round. Kids have so much to absorb and every bit of it is fascinating. Nice to rediscover the world through a child's eyes. Great stuff, Brooke!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your positive comments, Adrienne. Any reason for the 4 rating? Brooke :-)
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Just a mistake, Brooke. I will correct. I appreciate you pointing it out. You know I never award you less than five. You are perfection, girl!
Comment from nomi338
Aha! So that is where down is found. I believe that knowing where down is found is equally important to knowing where up is. You see I already know that to get to up, one must leave down behind. Down is familiar, secure and good, up is unknown and maybe just a little dangerous. If you fall down here from up there, you might get hurt a little bit and that scares me. I don't know if I want to go up there after all. Awesome poem Brooke.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Aha! So that is where down is found. I believe that knowing where down is found is equally important to knowing where up is. You see I already know that to get to up, one must leave down behind. Down is familiar, secure and good, up is unknown and maybe just a little dangerous. If you fall down here from up there, you might get hurt a little bit and that scares me. I don't know if I want to go up there after all. Awesome poem Brooke.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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nomi, thank you for your most insightful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Debbie
Very nicely done
Reads like a river flowing smoothly
Get rhyme and rythum
I know children love doing this and it is funny watching them get up being dizzy and trying to stand.
Thank You for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Very nicely done
Reads like a river flowing smoothly
Get rhyme and rythum
I know children love doing this and it is funny watching them get up being dizzy and trying to stand.
Thank You for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Angel Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mjac777
This is truly professional quality (IMHO)
Besides being a darling, amusing, and highly entertaining story - I could find no fault.
Are you (or have you), published this yet?
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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This is truly professional quality (IMHO)
Besides being a darling, amusing, and highly entertaining story - I could find no fault.
Are you (or have you), published this yet?
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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mjac, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your encouragement and generous sixth star. I need to get working on publishing :-) Brooke
