Comment from Shirley B

Excellent

Oh Brooke this poem is adorable. Sawyer is so cute playing with his friend wondering which is up and which is down. You sure have a knack with children's poetry. Great job, Shirley

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Thank you so very much, Shirley :-) Brooke

Comment from BCScot

Excellent

As usual I enjoyed your work, I liked this piece and the picture of Sawyer figuring out which end is up! Thank you for sharing with us!

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Thank you, BCScot, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

haha. lol. such a sweet piece of poetic art! up and down, a merry-go-round:) children are so delightfully innocent.
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Thank you so much, rebekka :-) Brooke

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Just pure delight! 'As I go down, and down and down'...you could definitely do a children's book with all of your charming poems! Blessings tonight...Judy

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Judy, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Simply delightful, Brooke!

I continue to be amazed at your ability to speak the language of a child's heart.

Bottoms up, my dear!!

Love,

Sonali

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Sonali, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

This is a wonderful quatern, Brooke, and I think you are a genius with words. Whoever would have thought of using 'up' in this way, I'm sure I don't know! Brilliant children's poem, Giddy

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Giddy, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Aplgwest

Excellent

Brooke,how very clever. Kind of an Alice in Wonderland frame of thought. The rhyme scheme is less complicated than usual but suits the subject well. Another good one! --Elaine

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

Little jack and Jill tumbling down a hill.
catchy poem about ups and downs.
Quatern form is perfect for this subject as your
line tumbles down each stanza. nancy

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from granny goes viral

Excellent

This is a wonderful poem to tickle youngsters with. Well, it tickled me. And I am in my second childhood. This is the kind of poem I would read to a semi-circle of first graders, introducing them to poetry and urging them to draw pictures of what they think the poet is saying. I love this.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Thank you, Granny, for your thoughtful review. I would love to see that class in action :-) Brooke

Comment from thedreampeddler

Excellent

This is how great poems are written.
Excellent job for sure.
It is always much more impressive to me when smaller words are used to fill the space. Some people confuse a large vocabulary with skill, but they are completely different.
Anyway, fantastic job.

thedreampeddler

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

dreampeddler, thank you so much :-) Brooke