Comment from fdgsr

Excellent

I love this kind of observation. It reminds me of Truth Supreme. The absence of all is no thing -- nothing to you. Anything is something, and everything is all there is. Everything is and nothing is no thing. Truth is what is true or false, and God is, no matter what is true or what is false. Truth is Truth itself. Without Truth you are nothing. Without yourself, there is no Truth. Je pense, donc je suis!

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

fdgsr, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from L.M.Mullins

Excellent

I very much like the repetition of your first line. The piece flows great almost floating as you read. The rhymes feel natural.
LM

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Len, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Cin

Excellent

Oh to be a child again! What a delightful rhythm and rhyme. This poem reminded me of the many hours spent reading Winnie the Pooh and the questions often posed by the characters :-)

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Cin, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with wonder/where...birds/branches...bees/buttercup...squirrels/scurry...nowhere/near. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Righteous Riter :-) Brooke

Comment from J.Byers

Excellent

You have tackled an interesting concept with this write, and from the perspective of a child too, which can be difficult to do. Perhaps we make our own 'up', or are we simply up when we are not down? These are the questions chasing through my head after reading your poem.

Blessings,

~ J.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thank you, J, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from Gargantuan2

Excellent

You must have an endless supply of pictures giving you incentive. Whatever the case I am happy to read yet another of your masterpieces. (I also hope those pics keep coming too, hehe)

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Gargantuan, thanks so much. One thing is certain in life, and that is my daughter will keep snapping those pictures. Her husband and brother think she has gone off the deep end. LOL :-) Brooke

Comment from Kenneth Schaal

Excellent

Delightful children's verse, metered and rhymed perfection, and written to the photo I imagine. I see in the quatern's case the refrain is the first line, and it moves through the stanza dropping in line till it ends up s the finish line. Kenny

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Kenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Just Pete

Exceptional

Perfestly rhymed, this is such a cute poem with a great means of teching the meanings of those two wrds. It's rather like the beginners' book I rmember from my early school days. It certainly deserved those fine awards. Pete

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Pete, for this generous and gracious review :-) Brooke

Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

Very interesting rhyming quatern that reminds me of Dr.Suess who possibly, wrote in a similar manner, describing on how he looked at the world in one of his children's books. Having fun it seems for two playmates on a Summer day.

Caressa

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Caressa, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I'm glad to see our best buddies are back! I enjoyed your rhymes while you captured the innocence of children as they ponder such weighty concepts as "up"! More cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Joan :-) Nora and Sawyer are an unbeatable duo :-) Brooke

reply by Joan E. on 04-Jul-2014

Hey--that's two 30 seconds of response time in one day--you're spoiling me!! Enjoy the Fourth- Joan

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

LOL - happy fourth to you too, Joan :-)

reply by Joan E. on 04-Jul-2014

Smiles and

reply by Joan E. on 04-Jul-2014

Smiles and hope the dampness doesn't obliterate the fireworks! -J