Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Ah, another one of life's conundrums. When does down become up? Astronauts go 'up' to the moon, only to find the earth up in the sky. Dang! I share Sawyer's confusion.

Frankly, I don't think anything gets higher than the
sundae's cherry top (considering this is a G-rated poem, of course).

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Only G rated for my grandson! His parents are right now doing their level-headed best to stop saying Damn it before he goes to pre pre school in September because he just loves to say it. LOL
I warned them that little pitchers have big ears, but they didn't listen and now they're sorry. ;-) Thanks so very much, Lee - I had a reviewer tell me she can always tell my poems when she reads them even blind, and I told her that you, my favorite prose writer, are like that for me. She has now read some of your stuff and is thanking me for sending her in the right direction :-) Brooke

reply by humpwhistle on 02-Jul-2014

Thank you, Brooke. That's very sweet, and licked up. But you never post blind, do you?

I'd love to know what you consider higher than a sundae's cherry, Brooke, but I'm much too much of a gentleman to ask. Whoa. I just asked, didn't I? Damn! (Don't listen, Sawyer).

L

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

I don't post in blind contests, but when my poem is in up next/bonus reviewing the first couple of people see it without my name.

reply by humpwhistle on 02-Jul-2014

Aye! Now I get it.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

I often wonder that myself - where is up found. This is very profound. Nicely written quatern with a great repeating line.
Teresa

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thank you so much, Teresa :-) Brooke

Comment from carlb937

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this. I picture the wonder a child has studying nature. I enjoyed the clever turn of phrase "when I go down and down and down" as it was positioned in each part.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

carl, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

But there's one thing [I can't ignore,]
that up is no where near the floor..... A suggestion. I Believe ignore is a better rhyme than sure. The picture brings back memories of my children playing on the lawn. The poem sounds like a child is talking about up and down. Delightful! xsx Nancy

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

thanks so much for your thoughtful feedback, Nancy - a good suggestion :-) Brooke

reply by nancy_e_davis on 02-Jul-2014

I was nervous about that, after all you are # one. Especially in my opinion! Nancy

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

The squirrels- do they think up is reached with ease?- poignant line. When down down down is reached, up is a struggle. But you just have to remember that up is there, a place that can be visibly seen. This would be a great poem for helping kids to understand depression.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

thanks so much, ravenblack :-) Sawyer loves to watch the squirrels in his back yard trees and elevators and their buttons are his favorite thing in the whole wide world :-) Brooke

Comment from Kausar_Javeria

Excellent

Hello there~!
What a lovely poem! Other than the cute direct point of the poem, I am really getting all sorts of other messages from it! Loved this!
Thanks for sharing~
JazakAllah Khair~
(God Bless~)

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Kausar, for your insightful reading of this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

I love this work, a quatern that is so cohesive in the drifts and thoughts but kept well knighted together for a sustained flow. The elements of nature in it is enchanting

ola thomas

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Ola, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is beautifully executed and an enjoyable read. The repeated line flows nicely throughout each stanza and ties the whole piece together in simplistic harmony. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Mystic Angel, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

Get off of that down escalator. You need to get on the up one. This poem was cute and has some very good metaphors for life's living in it. This was a very enjoyable poem to read as all of your poem are. This is another poem you've written that made me smile... John

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, John :-) Brooke

Comment from innerworlds

Exceptional

My dear, you have not lost touch with those amazing puzzles to be explored in a child's world. And written with such a gentle touch of creative humor, as well! This poem is simply delightful. Thank you for taking me back to my childhood when "up" was an everyday view.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

innerworlds, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke