As I Go Down and Down and Down
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Comment from RodG
This is such a neat way of expressing the vagueness of "up" to children.
I especially like the "ups" you used to illustrate: high branches, where elevators stop their ascent, and where the cherry sits on a sundae.
Also noteworthy is how you strung your refrain through each stanza.
A fun read, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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This is such a neat way of expressing the vagueness of "up" to children.
I especially like the "ups" you used to illustrate: high branches, where elevators stop their ascent, and where the cherry sits on a sundae.
Also noteworthy is how you strung your refrain through each stanza.
A fun read, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Rod, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
You are indeed in a class by
yourself; you take the simplest
things and recite these tales
that take us back in wonderment,
sometimes bewilderment, at life
all around us.
Well done
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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You are indeed in a class by
yourself; you take the simplest
things and recite these tales
that take us back in wonderment,
sometimes bewilderment, at life
all around us.
Well done
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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fastdigits, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from jaded831
Excellent read, I sensed a bit of comedy in the last stanza. I could picture him tumbling and landing on his bottom. Once again Sawyer is a star.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Excellent read, I sensed a bit of comedy in the last stanza. I could picture him tumbling and landing on his bottom. Once again Sawyer is a star.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Jaded, thank you so much :-) It's good to see you! Brooke
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Thanks, good to be back.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
You are so good at writing poetry every day. No wonder you are in spot #1. This is another great poem about your darling grandson, Sawyer. It's a good thing your daughter takes pictures of him all the time so you have new ones to show.
Kat
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke,
You are so good at writing poetry every day. No wonder you are in spot #1. This is another great poem about your darling grandson, Sawyer. It's a good thing your daughter takes pictures of him all the time so you have new ones to show.
Kat
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Kat, thank you so very much :-) She supplies me with a never ending wealth of pictures - the poor child thinks her phone/camera is an extension of her hand :-) Brooke
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LOL - Thanks for sharing. I got a good laugh from it.
Comment from Tegan1311
I love how you can take something so simple and make it fun and interesting. Your words flow well and the picture is really adorable. This is a very cute poem.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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I love how you can take something so simple and make it fun and interesting. Your words flow well and the picture is really adorable. This is a very cute poem.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks, Tegan, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
This is so cute! Especially coupled with the photo of Sawyer somersaulting down and down LOL
Beyond cute - it's very clever. . .laddering not just the first, but the first AND second lines down each succeeding stanza! (While here I struggle trying to get just one line to slowly trickle down the sides of a glass of lemonade!) Your dexterity never ceases to amaze me :-)
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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This is so cute! Especially coupled with the photo of Sawyer somersaulting down and down LOL
Beyond cute - it's very clever. . .laddering not just the first, but the first AND second lines down each succeeding stanza! (While here I struggle trying to get just one line to slowly trickle down the sides of a glass of lemonade!) Your dexterity never ceases to amaze me :-)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks so very much, Leineco :-) Brooke
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke,
This poem made the child within me surface. All that I could think of after reading:
"As I go down, and down, and down"
(I go round, and round, and round ...
And whew, oh my, I'm now dizzy.)
I also liked:
but there's one thing I can't ignore --
the up is nowhere near the floor
(So, once you've hit the floor ...
up, up, and away, you will soar.
But sadly, sometimes life makes us hit to floor to realize all that we had and all that is to be gained.)
A fun poem that made me smile and giggle.
Keep the blue waters flowing, and the child within alive.
Up! Up! and Away!
LateBloomer
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke,
This poem made the child within me surface. All that I could think of after reading:
"As I go down, and down, and down"
(I go round, and round, and round ...
And whew, oh my, I'm now dizzy.)
I also liked:
but there's one thing I can't ignore --
the up is nowhere near the floor
(So, once you've hit the floor ...
up, up, and away, you will soar.
But sadly, sometimes life makes us hit to floor to realize all that we had and all that is to be gained.)
A fun poem that made me smile and giggle.
Keep the blue waters flowing, and the child within alive.
Up! Up! and Away!
LateBloomer
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you so very much, LateBloomer :-) Brooke
Comment from Nosha17
I am sure kids think the world is definitely a better place from the upside down, especially when they look at people upside down, that sure looks comical. Very cute rhyming and choice of words for your poem which just sings along. Cute pic of that wee boy and most enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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I am sure kids think the world is definitely a better place from the upside down, especially when they look at people upside down, that sure looks comical. Very cute rhyming and choice of words for your poem which just sings along. Cute pic of that wee boy and most enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Faye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from pafaust
This has a very Dr. Seussy feel which is one of my favorite things. I like the rhythm and flow of the poem and you've asked some pretty good questions.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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This has a very Dr. Seussy feel which is one of my favorite things. I like the rhythm and flow of the poem and you've asked some pretty good questions.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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pafaust, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from jmdg1954
Brooke, as I read this poem other then visualizing each lines reference, my mind kept going to Shel Silverstein's works. It reminded me of his style.
Nicely done. John
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Brooke, as I read this poem other then visualizing each lines reference, my mind kept going to Shel Silverstein's works. It reminded me of his style.
Nicely done. John
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you so very much for that flattering comparison, John :-) Brooke
