Comment from costellsgirl33

Excellent

I do love horses! We had 3 when I was growing up. Midnight Cherokee, and Blue! They were such beautiful horses. Your poem is very nice! Flow is good, very powerful with only a few words used. Great job

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thanks for the wonderful review. Glad you could relate, having your own horses. I would love to have some land and horses.
Appreciate all your comments. Cheers ... ;o)

reply by costellsgirl33 on 08-Jul-2014

You are more than welcome my friend :)

Comment from mjac777

Excellent

Nicely done - in the Lune form.

Vivid imagery - I can see the skittish horses in a beautiful south west canyon galloping to avoid a storm.

The fact I love the Grand Canyon area makes this a most enjoyable read.

Well done.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thanks. So glad you enjoyed this lune and the imagery. Yes, Grand Canyon is a very special place. Appreciate your comments.
Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is an energetic and exciting lune, on an attractive subject. It has good visual and auditory imagery, and it is very attractively presented. Good luck in the contest, Jeanie

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks for the wonderful review, Jeanie. So glad you enjoyed the visual and auditory imagery in this lune. Appreciate all your comments. Cheers ... ;o) Art

Comment from linsbm

Excellent

Excellent syllable count for this contest - lune poem.
Perfect photo as described in your powerful words and rendition of this poem. Good luck in the contest. } Lin

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, Lin. Glad you enjoyed this lune and the picture. Appreciate all your comments. Cheers ... ;o)

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

ThunderKat, this is a perfect Lune poem. You tell a complete vivid story with your words. I like your verb scampers and I wish you best wishes in the contest. The thunder was crashing like crazy here last night with tornado warnings and sirens blaring ...but no scampering horses.
Smiles,
StormyIndy : )

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Hello StormyIndy - Lots of storming last night. I was over in Iowa/Cedar Rapids area - tornadoes in the area, enormous lightning, torrential rain and 60 mph winds - all traffic stopped on I 80, no one could see. It was a scary night. Glad you enjoyed this lune. In response to a review, I changed 'scamper' to 'gallop' as a scamper is more of a light-footed, playful run, and I imagine the thunder made them run harder. I main thing I want is for the reader to hear the hooves pounding along with the thunder. Do you think 'scamper' is better than 'gallop' in this scenario?
Appreciate your thoughts. ... ;o) ThunderKat

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

wild horses scamper
as thunder
echoes through canyon
This piece meets the criteria of the lune poem as the syllable count is spot on. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message that is short and simple.

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 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, RR
Appreciate all your comments.
Cheers ... sk