This Dandelion, Feeling Blue
a quatern (see contest directions)124 total reviews
Comment from boxergirl
Great job with your quarrying about the dandelion feeling blue. I liked the personification of the summer breeze, sun and rain as well. I was pulling for the dandelion. 8-)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Great job with your quarrying about the dandelion feeling blue. I liked the personification of the summer breeze, sun and rain as well. I was pulling for the dandelion. 8-)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
No, no, dandeions are supposed to be sunny things, even when gone to seed, right? How clever this is! The breeze, the sun and the rain all conspire to keep ol' dandy happy - that's the way of it! (Not lie Mums and Dads who torture poor little kiddies just cuz they're a bit adventurous...LOL!)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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No, no, dandeions are supposed to be sunny things, even when gone to seed, right? How clever this is! The breeze, the sun and the rain all conspire to keep ol' dandy happy - that's the way of it! (Not lie Mums and Dads who torture poor little kiddies just cuz they're a bit adventurous...LOL!)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Dawn :-) Brooke
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:))) My pleasure.
Comment from Angel Debbie
Love the descriptive word choices in this write.
Summer breeze made things all better.
Nice peaceful and sweet write.
Thank You for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Love the descriptive word choices in this write.
Summer breeze made things all better.
Nice peaceful and sweet write.
Thank You for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Angel Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwigirl2821
It's a funny thing about the dandelion how delicate they are and when the wind whips through their world they scatter and fill the air with fluff. Kinda like life methinks! Brilliant and oh my how beautiful your little one has become! love you my friend. Feel like I need to tell those that I think so highly of in case they leave before I had a chance to say it. be well. xoxo d
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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It's a funny thing about the dandelion how delicate they are and when the wind whips through their world they scatter and fill the air with fluff. Kinda like life methinks! Brilliant and oh my how beautiful your little one has become! love you my friend. Feel like I need to tell those that I think so highly of in case they leave before I had a chance to say it. be well. xoxo d
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Deb, for your lovely comments, my friend :-) You're right - even the youngest and healthiest among us could get run over by a bus tomorrow :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
How very lovely, Brooke. I am so glad I am a fan of yours and get to read your gracious poems. This is very refreshing. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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How very lovely, Brooke. I am so glad I am a fan of yours and get to read your gracious poems. This is very refreshing. Miss Sally
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from The Death
Hi, Brooke.
Lovely quatern! Whimsical and fun. Loved the conversational tone you've employed to enhance its appeal.
Excellent use of personification. There's good visual imagery here. The concept is fun, too. It can be even visualized as a metaphor for the depressed souls.
You've worked with the refrain really well.
This dandelion, feeling blue,
thought no one cared to share his life.
His loneliness just grew and grew,
no family, no friends, nor wife.
These cute lines made me smile. I'm really feeling blue these days.
Excellent use of soft and hard I assonance. The iambic meter is flawless.
You create a cheerful mood, as always.
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Hi, Brooke.
Lovely quatern! Whimsical and fun. Loved the conversational tone you've employed to enhance its appeal.
Excellent use of personification. There's good visual imagery here. The concept is fun, too. It can be even visualized as a metaphor for the depressed souls.
You've worked with the refrain really well.
This dandelion, feeling blue,
thought no one cared to share his life.
His loneliness just grew and grew,
no family, no friends, nor wife.
These cute lines made me smile. I'm really feeling blue these days.
Excellent use of soft and hard I assonance. The iambic meter is flawless.
You create a cheerful mood, as always.
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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I'm sorry you've been feeling blue, Anupam. Thank you so much for your attentive, thoughtful and thorough review :-) Brooke
Comment from kintesiegel
As usual a beautiful sentiment and imagery. But I felt like the poem needed more resolution in the last stanza rather than the intimated support.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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As usual a beautiful sentiment and imagery. But I felt like the poem needed more resolution in the last stanza rather than the intimated support.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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kintesiegel, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
A lot of people write about dandelions, but not usually with a flair as you have done here. You form and form were excellent for this free flowing verse. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... John
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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A lot of people write about dandelions, but not usually with a flair as you have done here. You form and form were excellent for this free flowing verse. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, John :-) Brooke
Comment from Eric1
This beautifully constructed poem is excellent, it has the full monty, Good rhyme, good imagery, good rhythm and excellent flow, oh yes, it also makes me sooo worried about my own entry, beautiful work as always Brooke.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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This beautifully constructed poem is excellent, it has the full monty, Good rhyme, good imagery, good rhythm and excellent flow, oh yes, it also makes me sooo worried about my own entry, beautiful work as always Brooke.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Eric, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
Wish I had a six to give, as you mastered this Quatern to perfection, along with the required rhyme. And imaginative creativity about a dandelion, I would of never thought, until now..
Caressa
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Wish I had a six to give, as you mastered this Quatern to perfection, along with the required rhyme. And imaginative creativity about a dandelion, I would of never thought, until now..
Caressa
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you so very much, Caressa :-) Brooke
