Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi...ah, the wee fluffy guy, I like the breeze. Quatrians really work for this stuff, I wonder if kids poetry is meant to be like this, in this style, it seems to work so well.?
padumachitta
I am going away for a little more than 3 weeks. We have a hut in the Alps, no cell phone, no wifi...we will go to town a few times to buy grocereis and check out emails(we hope)...I will try to keep up as best as possible...but, may well just hide in the Alps for a while:-)

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Thank you so very much, padumachitta :-) a hut in the Alps, that sounds so so good to me :-) Brooke

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

An amazing summer poem about a dandelion, When they are in this fluffy ball of seeds are just beautiful, and when they plant their seeds the yellow carpet of dandelions are magic.
I enjoyed reading your wonderful quatrains. I believe you have passed all the contests requirements.

well done
Mary

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Mary, thank you so much for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

you have followed the format to perfection (what else could one expect from you Brooke) LOL

great visual

good rhyme not forced

good enjambment through sentences to allow free flow

glad the dandelion lost his blue feeling

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Thanks so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful reading of my poem :-) Brooke

reply by Smoothiecool on 03-Jul-2014

always welcome..SC >. Faye

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Great Quatern Brooke using the dandelion seeds being blown around in the summer breeze to spread his seeds and start a family of dandelions. Nice one, good luck in the contest.

valda

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

valda, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

Loneliness is killing and no one enjoyes it even this dandelion. Lonliness is boring and killing. I love the creative subject you pick, good justice done to drive home your message.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Ola, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from marijmd

Excellent

Well may he live long and prosper - or should that be procreate? Several hundred times. One of my favorite things to pick!

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Thank you, marijmd, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Distracted23

Exceptional

Another beauty. You have a wonderful gift. The words seem to pour out of you and flow like a stream. I appreciate the description of the poetry form you included in your notes. The writing may appear easy, but following a structure adds a challenge. Excellent work. :-)

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Jill, thank you so very much for your generous sixth star and kind comments :-) Brooke

Comment from donnadiann

Excellent

Besides the nice alliterations and excellent description of summer, there is also the coziness of the light rain (I've always liked to be dry and cozy, but near the rain as it's falling. And the personification of summer, is well written:)

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

donnadiann, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

:-)
a dandelion meets a summer breeze
who offers help in socializing
the whispered promise of relief
more than met the advertising

a dandelion mets a summer breeze -
next thing you know he's propagating!
Now all his golden progeny
are wildly germinating.

LOL. . .cute poem :-)

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Leineco - glad you got a laugh from this bit of whimsy :-) Brooke

Comment from words

Excellent

Love it.
Dandelions and quaterns ... how could this one not be a stunner.

And, in your inimitable way, you have slipped in a bit of cosmic wisdom.

You have ended my reviewing day with a smile.

Thank you.

Hugs,d

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Diane :-) Brooke