This Dandelion, Feeling Blue
a quatern (see contest directions)124 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
The photo is great and complements your poem so well. You chose a perfect repeating line. And I can believe a single Dandelion feels lonely. He would like family. Best wishes for the prompt.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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The photo is great and complements your poem so well. You chose a perfect repeating line. And I can believe a single Dandelion feels lonely. He would like family. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Ine :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi :-) Brooke,
"This Dandelion, Feeling Blue" is an exceptional poem in quatern form. It has excellent rhyme and meter. Its rhyme scheme is consistently followed. It has superior figurative language and imagery. (a summer breeze who whispered to him)
It meets the requirements for the quatern form and the repetition is effective. Good luck in the contest.
Preston
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Hi :-) Brooke,
"This Dandelion, Feeling Blue" is an exceptional poem in quatern form. It has excellent rhyme and meter. Its rhyme scheme is consistently followed. It has superior figurative language and imagery. (a summer breeze who whispered to him)
It meets the requirements for the quatern form and the repetition is effective. Good luck in the contest.
Preston
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Preston, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem and your kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from rod007
This is absolutely brilliant as you magically combined all the elements in nature that promotes a new progeny of dandelions - breeze, sun and rain. A delightful cocktail mix of nature's gift for life. Well done, Brooke for this unique creation!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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This is absolutely brilliant as you magically combined all the elements in nature that promotes a new progeny of dandelions - breeze, sun and rain. A delightful cocktail mix of nature's gift for life. Well done, Brooke for this unique creation!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Rod, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your generosity and thoughtfulness. Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
You and your dandelions. LOL! I wish they WERE blue... would make the pesky weeds less noticeable on my lawn. But personal hatred of dandelions aside, it's a cute poem. :)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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You and your dandelions. LOL! I wish they WERE blue... would make the pesky weeds less noticeable on my lawn. But personal hatred of dandelions aside, it's a cute poem. :)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Phyllis. I will not hold your prejudices against you :-) Brooke
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke, Lots of emotions flow through this poem. Of special note:
This dandelion, feeling blue,
thought no one cared to share his life.
His loneliness just grew and grew,
no family, no friends, nor wife.
(Brooke, This little dandelion is like so many people who are loved and admired, but they don't see it cannot believe that they are loved and respected.)
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But then he met a summer breeze
(this dandelion, feeling blue),
who whispered to him through the trees,
"I'll make a family for you.
(Ahh, the feeling of new love, hope, and youth, even if the heart is aging.)
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Then summer sun and gentle rain
proclaimed, "We're here to help you too,"
(Sometime a walk in the sun or the rain or perhaps below the moon can change a gloomy day or night into light.)
A thought-provoking poem and great contest entry.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke, Lots of emotions flow through this poem. Of special note:
This dandelion, feeling blue,
thought no one cared to share his life.
His loneliness just grew and grew,
no family, no friends, nor wife.
(Brooke, This little dandelion is like so many people who are loved and admired, but they don't see it cannot believe that they are loved and respected.)
And:
But then he met a summer breeze
(this dandelion, feeling blue),
who whispered to him through the trees,
"I'll make a family for you.
(Ahh, the feeling of new love, hope, and youth, even if the heart is aging.)
And:
Then summer sun and gentle rain
proclaimed, "We're here to help you too,"
(Sometime a walk in the sun or the rain or perhaps below the moon can change a gloomy day or night into light.)
A thought-provoking poem and great contest entry.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Latebloomer, a writer gets such a good feeling from discovering that some readers actually read the work and think about it and engage with it :-) Thank you so much for that :-) Brooke
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Brooke, I often say that when it comes to poetry and art, I'm like the person who doesn't know how to cook, but knows when she's had a great meal. Big smile, Bloomer
Comment from emrpoems
love the idea you chose to write on.
Solid ABABA rhymes along with all the other requirements being satisfied.
You have a strong entry in the quatern contest. Best of luck
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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love the idea you chose to write on.
Solid ABABA rhymes along with all the other requirements being satisfied.
You have a strong entry in the quatern contest. Best of luck
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, emrpoems :-) Brooke
Comment from Donya Quijote
This is a wonderful poem, full of hope, uplifting. I like how you have all the element gather around the lonely dandelion to help chase away his blues. Dandelions are funny plants. It's rare that you find just one alone. When you do, just wait a few days and then there's a patch. Like you, I love dandelions and still blow them from time to time. Do you eat them? I hear that that they are good in salads. Might try them out myself some time...
Boy can I relate to that first stanza. Kind of got me there.
Nice, constant rhythm. I can hear where the crescendos would go if this were a song. Repeating line goes well in each location. Great message. Now, if only the same could be done for all the lonely people.
Best of luck in the contest. A winner in my book for sure...
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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This is a wonderful poem, full of hope, uplifting. I like how you have all the element gather around the lonely dandelion to help chase away his blues. Dandelions are funny plants. It's rare that you find just one alone. When you do, just wait a few days and then there's a patch. Like you, I love dandelions and still blow them from time to time. Do you eat them? I hear that that they are good in salads. Might try them out myself some time...
Boy can I relate to that first stanza. Kind of got me there.
Nice, constant rhythm. I can hear where the crescendos would go if this were a song. Repeating line goes well in each location. Great message. Now, if only the same could be done for all the lonely people.
Best of luck in the contest. A winner in my book for sure...
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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thanks so much, my generous and thoughtful friend :-) Eat them? That would be like eating my best friend LOL Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
A-w-w-w-w, poor little seedy fella. Now if only mankind were as kind to nature as she was to herself, perhaps we could clean up this big, blue marble in which we all share and live.
Wonderfully done, Brooke. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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A-w-w-w-w, poor little seedy fella. Now if only mankind were as kind to nature as she was to herself, perhaps we could clean up this big, blue marble in which we all share and live.
Wonderfully done, Brooke. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Dean, for your kind thoughts and lovely photo :-) Brooke
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No sweat, Brooke. You're welcome. Hey, if you're ever in need a photo for anything, I'm your go-to guy, LOL.
Comment from Andrewajgblue
You have managed to make me feel sorry for a weed! So something must be amazing, it rhymes perfectly, and the narrative was really clear, i loved how it had a lovely ending, great entry, good luck,
Andrew
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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You have managed to make me feel sorry for a weed! So something must be amazing, it rhymes perfectly, and the narrative was really clear, i loved how it had a lovely ending, great entry, good luck,
Andrew
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Andrew, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
The wind did not create a family for the dandelion, it created an army. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good Job.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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The wind did not create a family for the dandelion, it created an army. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good Job.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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LOL - thanks for the laugh, Charlie, and for the review. Brooke :-)
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You're welcome, Brooke. Is Sawyer out of the stockades, yet?
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Yeah, they let him out so he could play with the rest of the pirate stuff ;-)
