This Dandelion, Feeling Blue
a quatern (see contest directions)124 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I'm sure it ended up with a huge family after all that help
from nature. The elements do know how to share the love. As do children when they make a wish and blow the seeds away.LOL
You are always true to form and I love....
Then summer sun and gentle rain
proclaimed, "We're here to help you too,"
till soon their gifts removed his pain,
this dandelion, feeling blue.
Very pretty. Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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I'm sure it ended up with a huge family after all that help
from nature. The elements do know how to share the love. As do children when they make a wish and blow the seeds away.LOL
You are always true to form and I love....
Then summer sun and gentle rain
proclaimed, "We're here to help you too,"
till soon their gifts removed his pain,
this dandelion, feeling blue.
Very pretty. Nancy
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Nancy, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from babylonia
Brooke,
Another wonderful poem about dandelions. I love dandelions. I love the picture. Easy to read and follow. No spaggies do I see. Imagery is excellent. Hope you're having a good one.
Love,
Barbara
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Brooke,
Another wonderful poem about dandelions. I love dandelions. I love the picture. Easy to read and follow. No spaggies do I see. Imagery is excellent. Hope you're having a good one.
Love,
Barbara
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Barbara, thank you for your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
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Brooke,
You're very welcome.
Love,
Barbara
Comment from Kaila Mari
Such a perfect Quatern about summer. Nothing to suggest, nothing to correct. All prompt requirements met and besides such a lovely story. Readers sensory perception engaged throughout as I see a field of golden dandelions grow before my eyes. Great job; God bless!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Such a perfect Quatern about summer. Nothing to suggest, nothing to correct. All prompt requirements met and besides such a lovely story. Readers sensory perception engaged throughout as I see a field of golden dandelions grow before my eyes. Great job; God bless!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Kaila, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Ohhh - Blue dandelions - now wouldn't that be awesome?
You create a nurturing mood in the reader's soul - we want to help that poor little guy spread... (lol - what are we thinking!)
Fantastic quatern, Brooke - the travelling line moves very smoothly down the poem.
Rose.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Ohhh - Blue dandelions - now wouldn't that be awesome?
You create a nurturing mood in the reader's soul - we want to help that poor little guy spread... (lol - what are we thinking!)
Fantastic quatern, Brooke - the travelling line moves very smoothly down the poem.
Rose.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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thanks so very much, Rose :-) Brooke
Comment from Gladness
So that's what a QUATERN is. There is more to it than I realized.
I like the story told in this poem. It leaves you with a comforting feeling. There's much to learn from the plants around us.
Anita
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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So that's what a QUATERN is. There is more to it than I realized.
I like the story told in this poem. It leaves you with a comforting feeling. There's much to learn from the plants around us.
Anita
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Anita, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dutchie
It always speeks to my imagination, Brooke, those poems about dandelions. I love the thought that wind, sun and rain makes that the dandelion is not feeling allone anymore. Soon he will have a big family... Such a lovely thought.. Fia
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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It always speeks to my imagination, Brooke, those poems about dandelions. I love the thought that wind, sun and rain makes that the dandelion is not feeling allone anymore. Soon he will have a big family... Such a lovely thought.. Fia
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Fia, for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Oh, Brooke , we can't have your favorite flower turning blue. So very sad. I'm glad it had a happy endding. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~DEbbie
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Oh, Brooke , we can't have your favorite flower turning blue. So very sad. I'm glad it had a happy endding. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~DEbbie
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Debbie, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
Wonderful work, my friend. Superb personification of the dandelion and summer breeze, sun and rain! Delightful message of life and nature's inter-connectivity. Fine flow and rhyming, as usual, with a smattering of well crafted poetic devices. Cute presentation--of course!
Especially liked the consonance of L in this stanza, plus alliteration and consonance of S and alliteration of F and M:
The seeds I spread will soon undo
the loneliness you long have felt."
This dandelion, feeling blue,
began to think his heart might melt.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Wonderful work, my friend. Superb personification of the dandelion and summer breeze, sun and rain! Delightful message of life and nature's inter-connectivity. Fine flow and rhyming, as usual, with a smattering of well crafted poetic devices. Cute presentation--of course!
Especially liked the consonance of L in this stanza, plus alliteration and consonance of S and alliteration of F and M:
The seeds I spread will soon undo
the loneliness you long have felt."
This dandelion, feeling blue,
began to think his heart might melt.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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thanks so much, rd :-) Brooke
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:-)))
Comment from RodG
Wow, what a fine job you have done with this quatern, Brooke. They are not easy to write well, yet this one tells a nice story of a dandelion that is given a chance to not be alone anymore.
I really like the refrain you chose that emphasizes how blue the dandelion was feeling.
Nice personification of the dandelions and his friends the sun and rain and summer breeze. Good luck in the contest.
Rod
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Wow, what a fine job you have done with this quatern, Brooke. They are not easy to write well, yet this one tells a nice story of a dandelion that is given a chance to not be alone anymore.
I really like the refrain you chose that emphasizes how blue the dandelion was feeling.
Nice personification of the dandelions and his friends the sun and rain and summer breeze. Good luck in the contest.
Rod
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Rod, for your thoughtful review and kind contest encouragement :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
A lovely quatern poem for the contest, Brooke. I enjoyed your wonderful lines about your favorite flower, who had a family created for him by the breeze. Very clever and beat wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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A lovely quatern poem for the contest, Brooke. I enjoyed your wonderful lines about your favorite flower, who had a family created for him by the breeze. Very clever and beat wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Karyn :-) Glad you enjoyed. Brooke
