The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "What must I do to win thy love"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from GracieAnn
Carolyn, this Triolet Poetry Contest entry is well penned and fulfills the elements of the contest with a strong spiritual message. Nice to see a fellow poet and Christian to put a verse at the end as I do. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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Carolyn, this Triolet Poetry Contest entry is well penned and fulfills the elements of the contest with a strong spiritual message. Nice to see a fellow poet and Christian to put a verse at the end as I do. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 03-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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Thank you GracieAnn for your wonderful comments. Yes, I enjoy supporting work with a scripture, especially if I have a quote. The Lord deserves that credit. :-)
Love, Carolyn
Comment from Irish Rain
So very pretty, and what a great form for this faith filled poem, as the essential question keeps repeating...beautiful! No more 6 stars left, or you'd have one...Blessings tonight...Judy
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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So very pretty, and what a great form for this faith filled poem, as the essential question keeps repeating...beautiful! No more 6 stars left, or you'd have one...Blessings tonight...Judy
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you Judy, I will take the virtual six, along with your fine comments anytime. This was my first Triolet, but I enjoyed the form.
:-) Carolyn
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I have never written one...they are so pretty, and yours makes a lovely point!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Carolyn - Such strong threads of faith that hold the tender heart. Lovely message, and for me the sense of peace floated within your lines. I loved reading this one. Good luck in the contest my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Love
Maureen
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Dear Carolyn - Such strong threads of faith that hold the tender heart. Lovely message, and for me the sense of peace floated within your lines. I loved reading this one. Good luck in the contest my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Love
Maureen
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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And thank you Maureen, I'm glad you enjoyed this. It was my first Triolet, so I am hoping it does well in the contest. I never know what they are looking for, so I aimed for accuracy, as well as a meaningful message. Your comments are always encouraging to me.
Love you, Carolyn
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I've never written one either....:)
Extra luck to you:)
x
Comment from 9999pool
How can we win on love if we have given all and is still waiting for a bright spark in the sky to make our dream love come true.
What more can I do or say to make you love me or at least let our love begin its flow and joy.
Excellent Triolet. Well done and bravo too!!
Cheerio, hugs and luv, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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How can we win on love if we have given all and is still waiting for a bright spark in the sky to make our dream love come true.
What more can I do or say to make you love me or at least let our love begin its flow and joy.
Excellent Triolet. Well done and bravo too!!
Cheerio, hugs and luv, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you dear Ritchie, for your wonderful comments, (I always look forward to those) and the awesome stars. This was my first Triolet.
What ever happened to Karen?
Love, Carolyn
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Hi Carolyn,
Yes, what happened to her. She just 'disappeared' from here, smiles. I hope she doesn't have any undisclosed illness like Gungalo (which caught us all by surprise.
Have a lovely and wonderful day. i shall be off and on in FS for a while but will try to keep up with your great works, smiles.
Cheerio, love and hugs, bro Ritchie. :))
Comment from Sanku
Love His people - that is what He wants all of us to do.
A good question you have posed to him and this proves your strong devotion.I am happy to read spiritual poems because i too am a great believer in God
You have written "tiolet" instead of triolet.on the top of the poem
love take care.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Love His people - that is what He wants all of us to do.
A good question you have posed to him and this proves your strong devotion.I am happy to read spiritual poems because i too am a great believer in God
You have written "tiolet" instead of triolet.on the top of the poem
love take care.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks Sanku, I will fix that. So glad you liked the poem.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Kingsland
This piece of writing just oozes out poetic verve from its beginning to its ending. I enjoyed reading those thoughts and poetic measure. This is a well written piece of poetic parlance that I enjoyed reading... John
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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This piece of writing just oozes out poetic verve from its beginning to its ending. I enjoyed reading those thoughts and poetic measure. This is a well written piece of poetic parlance that I enjoyed reading... John
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Well thank you John for this wonderful review.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
Interesting since the repeated thoughts have a deeper meaning the second time around. Now I know I have to go back and work on mine!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Interesting since the repeated thoughts have a deeper meaning the second time around. Now I know I have to go back and work on mine!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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This is the first Triolet I have ever written. I found it challenging and as you say, the repetition gives a deeper meaning.
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from krys123
Carolyn, just so you know quick enough you weren't blinded as repetitive should be your fifth line that should be repetitive. The format should be as follows:
AA 1
A 2
B 3
A 4
AA 5
A 6
B 7
AA 8
B 9 LINES
otherwise and that it is excellently descriptive and artistically expressive as the imagery goes throughout the poem.
The rhyming is also exceptionally neither of your rhymes are for storm a bird while your rhythm does flow smoothly throughout your poem.
Thank you so much for sharing am posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Carolyn, just so you know quick enough you weren't blinded as repetitive should be your fifth line that should be repetitive. The format should be as follows:
AA 1
A 2
B 3
A 4
AA 5
A 6
B 7
AA 8
B 9 LINES
otherwise and that it is excellently descriptive and artistically expressive as the imagery goes throughout the poem.
The rhyming is also exceptionally neither of your rhymes are for storm a bird while your rhythm does flow smoothly throughout your poem.
Thank you so much for sharing am posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Dear Alex,
Thank you for taking the time to read, and as usual I am delighted you liked the over-all poem. I cut and copied the rules for the contest as they seem different from the ones you provided. This was my first attempt at Triolet.
From the contest description site:
For this contest you are challenged to write a Triolet poem. A triolet is a poem of only eight lines with a rhyme scheme abaaabab. The fourth and seventh lines are the same exact line as the first. The eighth line is the same exact line as the second.
I appreciate the heads up, but will leave as is, for the time being.
Love, Carolyn
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You are so sincerely welcome Carolyn and I must be confused I read it differently.
I used their protocopy for my reference.
Alex
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes, it's a question I'm sure God frequently asks Himself. And yet, many still resist and refuse His selfless sacrifice and gift of eternal salvation. So be it.
We are not made to be robots. We are ordained, by God, with the power of free thinking and discernment. He leaves the choice of whether or not to accept his gift up to each individual. They either accept the word of God and take is as truth, or they don't.
I myself chose to believe.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Yes, it's a question I'm sure God frequently asks Himself. And yet, many still resist and refuse His selfless sacrifice and gift of eternal salvation. So be it.
We are not made to be robots. We are ordained, by God, with the power of free thinking and discernment. He leaves the choice of whether or not to accept his gift up to each individual. They either accept the word of God and take is as truth, or they don't.
I myself chose to believe.
Well done.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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As one believer to another, thank you Dean for your fine comments. Carolyn
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You're very welcome, Carolyn. It was my pleasure.
Comment from acerisestory
I am not familiar with a triolet poem, but I very much like the way yours flows. It professes a lovely message of God's love. Good luck in the contest. Alana
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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I am not familiar with a triolet poem, but I very much like the way yours flows. It professes a lovely message of God's love. Good luck in the contest. Alana
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you Alana for the comments and best wishes. Carolyn
