Finding Daisy
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Allies and Enemies"Another Ess and Oz comic fantasy
4 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
Cool, Snod. And hot! Ess is not the kind of witch anyone should take lightly. I loved the stand off with Daisy's brother. Score one for the witch! Yea!!
And the scene between Ess and Shades....So romantic, snod. I really enjoyed this short chapter.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Cool, Snod. And hot! Ess is not the kind of witch anyone should take lightly. I loved the stand off with Daisy's brother. Score one for the witch! Yea!!
And the scene between Ess and Shades....So romantic, snod. I really enjoyed this short chapter.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks. This morning I read a chapter from a friend's book on the train. Oh my! Glad I could get the passion in the story without the graphics.
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I'm getting the idea your friend goes into much more detail. LOL! Pretty intimidating stuff, un? LOL! I think if your characters are real enough, just a glimpse of what's going on is every bit as tantalizing. Of course I'm always hoping to walk by, unobserved. LOL! Fun, snod!
Comment from Sonaleeka
Very well written..I did not read the previous chapters.But this chapter itself very well written and captivating.
I am glad got a chance to read your chapter.
God bless!Have a nice day!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Very well written..I did not read the previous chapters.But this chapter itself very well written and captivating.
I am glad got a chance to read your chapter.
God bless!Have a nice day!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you. I'm glad you read it too
Comment from Eigle Rull
This piece was very nicely written in words that are easy to read and understand. It's important to convey your message to the reader. And you've done that here. I like the storyline and of course the dialog. I enjoyed reading this piece. It was excellent.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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This piece was very nicely written in words that are easy to read and understand. It's important to convey your message to the reader. And you've done that here. I like the storyline and of course the dialog. I enjoyed reading this piece. It was excellent.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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You're very kind, thank you
Comment from rmj09
You show a clear focus of your story line and maintain the genre of Fantasy Fiction throughout. Easy reading easy to follow.
...Do you even have...when she was with 'my kind' (chg " to ')
...tell him how sorry I am (chg that to ,) he sent...
... You do too, I understand (drop that)
... (drop")She punched him on the shoulder... And that - (drop ") She punched him again.
I wanted to punch him myself you brought the story to a fighters emotion here and resolved it with her throwing herself in his arms.
Keep up the good work
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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You show a clear focus of your story line and maintain the genre of Fantasy Fiction throughout. Easy reading easy to follow.
...Do you even have...when she was with 'my kind' (chg " to ')
...tell him how sorry I am (chg that to ,) he sent...
... You do too, I understand (drop that)
... (drop")She punched him on the shoulder... And that - (drop ") She punched him again.
I wanted to punch him myself you brought the story to a fighters emotion here and resolved it with her throwing herself in his arms.
Keep up the good work
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the review
