Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Evacuating Caesar's and Wayne Newton"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
13 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
OH Michael, LMAO!!!!OMG...Wayne Newton....Marie Osmond....???? you must sit and crack up when you write this stuff...you....I can see it now...well lets see what happens on the roof...and of course Bard is up there ...and he is the most talented one...LOL...well their going to follow their lead...let move on...I love this chapter...great job you...Luff Linda xxoo love
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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OH Michael, LMAO!!!!OMG...Wayne Newton....Marie Osmond....???? you must sit and crack up when you write this stuff...you....I can see it now...well lets see what happens on the roof...and of course Bard is up there ...and he is the most talented one...LOL...well their going to follow their lead...let move on...I love this chapter...great job you...Luff Linda xxoo love
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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Glad you liked this. I took a couple days off to get a second wind!! More to come. mikey
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that's good....a little time for the misses...LOL...smiling...Luff
Comment from adewpearl
gotta love a chapter with Wayne Newton in the title LOL
fascinating discussion of captivity, such as eating when a captive
blackjack playing southerner - blackjack-playing Southerner
lots of excitement as the soldiers and FBI invade the place
marine reservist - Marine
once you are out of the building, sir - add comma for direct address
good use of natural-sounding dialogue
Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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gotta love a chapter with Wayne Newton in the title LOL
fascinating discussion of captivity, such as eating when a captive
blackjack playing southerner - blackjack-playing Southerner
lots of excitement as the soldiers and FBI invade the place
marine reservist - Marine
once you are out of the building, sir - add comma for direct address
good use of natural-sounding dialogue
Brooke
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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So pleased you enjoyed this. I took a couple days off to clear my little brain. It was a lot more fun coming back to it! Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from seaglass
Lots of action building up. This made me chuckle. As a young teen, I loved Wayne Newton before my interest moved on. Haven't thought of him in years. I'm sure we're going to see some action from Angela in all of the soon.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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Lots of action building up. This made me chuckle. As a young teen, I loved Wayne Newton before my interest moved on. Haven't thought of him in years. I'm sure we're going to see some action from Angela in all of the soon.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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I'm glad you liked this chapter. I took a couple days off to clear my brain. It was more fun coming back to it a little more refreshed. Yep, gotta get Angela doing something pretty soon. mikey
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Take care and be safe over the holiday
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You too! I'm lazy which translate to safe!!
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Same here, don't like being rowdy anymore. Don't like loud fireworks all that much. Can't drink, everything that's good to eat on holidays is off my diet, guess I just sit home and write.
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Thank God you're a good writer!!
Comment from Nosha17
This scene at Caesar's is playing out very well, the descriptions and set-up is really good. I liked the idea that the father may be able to assist with the capture of the son. Most enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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This scene at Caesar's is playing out very well, the descriptions and set-up is really good. I liked the idea that the father may be able to assist with the capture of the son. Most enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Thank you! I'm also trying to get Ruby and Diamond in the story too. Two singers in Vegas! We'll see, mikey
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is well constructed with purpose and direction. It is cohesive with apropos dialogue. The actions of the pomp-ass people involved. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Mikey, this is well constructed with purpose and direction. It is cohesive with apropos dialogue. The actions of the pomp-ass people involved. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Glad you liked it. I took a break for a couple days. Now, I'm having fun again. We'll see where it goes! Mikey
Comment from ravenblack
Just one suggestion- if Winston boards a chopper and it is bound to be taken down, could you add Siegfried and Roy and Celine Dion to the mix? Please?
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Just one suggestion- if Winston boards a chopper and it is bound to be taken down, could you add Siegfried and Roy and Celine Dion to the mix? Please?
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Okay, but I'm throwing Phil Collins in with them for covering "Can't Hurry Love". It's the right thing to do.
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Hey, cool with me. I was always a Peter Gabriel fan myself. Toss in Slim Whitman too.
Comment from Sankey
Good work again mate. Glad you are back on this story.
Well done plenty of drama and excitement still.
One spag possibly.
But(,?) the FBI were aware...did it need a comma there?
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Good work again mate. Glad you are back on this story.
Well done plenty of drama and excitement still.
One spag possibly.
But(,?) the FBI were aware...did it need a comma there?
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Yeah, I don't think I do need that comma. Getting better at them though! I took a couple days off the story and I feel refreshed now. Glad you liked it.
Comment from CR Delport
Oh my, Winston has Wayne Newton :) I like the way you describe the way it is for the captives. Even the way soldiers only follow orders, like their not allowed to think for themselves. Another great chapter and I didn't spot any obvious errors.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Oh my, Winston has Wayne Newton :) I like the way you describe the way it is for the captives. Even the way soldiers only follow orders, like their not allowed to think for themselves. Another great chapter and I didn't spot any obvious errors.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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Glad you liked this one. I took a couple days off to clear my little brain. I feel more excited now. mikey
Comment from ProjectBluebook
I be dang! I never saw that comin.' I was kidding about Wayne Newton, bam! the playboy is here. I'mm getting me chuckle sin. Wayne Newton and Marie Osmond, LOL! that's a damn good start, Mikey. You got me laughing ... where in the hell is Donny? Shit--fire! Hum, they are behind Winston, in the fan thing. The noise is an ally. Got to be careful not to shoot the hostages. My God! the lanet willl quit spinning if ole Wayne bites the bullet. Hahahaha! What about Marie? Is Winston and Barry waiting for a rescue chopper. Why is it late? I sit comin'? Wayne might have sung his last song. he's overrated anyways. LOL! Count your doubloon, Sir Mikey. Good deeds come full circle.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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I be dang! I never saw that comin.' I was kidding about Wayne Newton, bam! the playboy is here. I'mm getting me chuckle sin. Wayne Newton and Marie Osmond, LOL! that's a damn good start, Mikey. You got me laughing ... where in the hell is Donny? Shit--fire! Hum, they are behind Winston, in the fan thing. The noise is an ally. Got to be careful not to shoot the hostages. My God! the lanet willl quit spinning if ole Wayne bites the bullet. Hahahaha! What about Marie? Is Winston and Barry waiting for a rescue chopper. Why is it late? I sit comin'? Wayne might have sung his last song. he's overrated anyways. LOL! Count your doubloon, Sir Mikey. Good deeds come full circle.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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Can't kill Wayne. Marie... well... I don't know if anyone would notice. Hahaha. You mentioned Wayne. I'm very impressionable!! mikey
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Nope, you can't kill Mr. Vegas. Donny might miss Marie. they are Mormons. LOL!
Comment from nordicgirl
A great twist. Love some if the dialogue here. The FBI guy is a scream. Just a little over the top but not a buffoon. Good idea to get Winston iut of the picture I think. Fun stuff and then back to the kids. Hopefully the Bard can squeeze a clue out of Winston. NG
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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A great twist. Love some if the dialogue here. The FBI guy is a scream. Just a little over the top but not a buffoon. Good idea to get Winston iut of the picture I think. Fun stuff and then back to the kids. Hopefully the Bard can squeeze a clue out of Winston. NG
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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Great to know I'm back on track. I took a little breather cause I felt bogged down. Thank you, mikey
