If Heaven Ever Visits Earth
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6169 total reviews
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This is a great piece of art all the way around. I love sunflowers(Kansas state flower) and this one is exceptional. As are the words. Well done. The back-glow is incredibly stunning to contemplate as I read your wonderful words. Great, as always.
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This is a great piece of art all the way around. I love sunflowers(Kansas state flower) and this one is exceptional. As are the words. Well done. The back-glow is incredibly stunning to contemplate as I read your wonderful words. Great, as always.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Kingsrook :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Brooke,
"If Heaven Ever Visits Earth" is a colorful poem with excellent figurative language and imagery (a field of gold). It has good rhythm and rhyme. The kaleidoscope of butterflies appears to be a metaphor.
Preston
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Hi, Brooke,
"If Heaven Ever Visits Earth" is a colorful poem with excellent figurative language and imagery (a field of gold). It has good rhythm and rhyme. The kaleidoscope of butterflies appears to be a metaphor.
Preston
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Preston, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
Love them when they visit in the spring. Not many honey bees left but the butterflies are good cross pollinators. Beautiful work Brooke.
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Love them when they visit in the spring. Not many honey bees left but the butterflies are good cross pollinators. Beautiful work Brooke.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Ben, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from BLACKDYKE
Short and fantastic dearest Brooke.
You choose the right picture and
the right words to present us with
the best of poetry. Presentation
nye on perfect too. Eric
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Short and fantastic dearest Brooke.
You choose the right picture and
the right words to present us with
the best of poetry. Presentation
nye on perfect too. Eric
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Eric, for your generous and encouraging response to this poem :-) Brooke
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My pleasure.
Comment from Donya Quijote
Beautiful, simply exquisitely beautiful. A kaleidoscope is the perfect description for lots of butterflies in one place and one time. When they are flying it does look like one. Nice use of b sounds. REpeated line works nicely in each stanza. An awesome illustration to go with poem and a fine presentation overall. A fantastic wish to wish for. Uplifting. Thanks for sharing you wish with us today....
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Beautiful, simply exquisitely beautiful. A kaleidoscope is the perfect description for lots of butterflies in one place and one time. When they are flying it does look like one. Nice use of b sounds. REpeated line works nicely in each stanza. An awesome illustration to go with poem and a fine presentation overall. A fantastic wish to wish for. Uplifting. Thanks for sharing you wish with us today....
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Donya, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from His Grayness
Sorry Brooke..still no sixes in inventory! This is a really sweet and lighthearted (though sincere) message that offers a vision of total freedom and joy. Thanks for sharing. I LOVED IT! Vance
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Sorry Brooke..still no sixes in inventory! This is a really sweet and lighthearted (though sincere) message that offers a vision of total freedom and joy. Thanks for sharing. I LOVED IT! Vance
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Vance, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
I've used that artist before. This photograph is almost like 3-D in its beauty. I love the phrase "kaleidoscope of butterflies" as it just sounds so good out loud. Your poem is lovely in presentation and emotion.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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I've used that artist before. This photograph is almost like 3-D in its beauty. I love the phrase "kaleidoscope of butterflies" as it just sounds so good out loud. Your poem is lovely in presentation and emotion.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Karyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Lovely quatrains Brooke, in perfect 8/6/8/6 rhyme form. Lovely words and I've learned something - that a group of butterflies is called a kaleidoscope. Thank you for the read. Regards Dorothy
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Lovely quatrains Brooke, in perfect 8/6/8/6 rhyme form. Lovely words and I've learned something - that a group of butterflies is called a kaleidoscope. Thank you for the read. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Dorothy :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
Fabulous artwork, Brooke. Did you consider either yellow or gold for the text?
I never knew that was the name for a group of butterflies - I thought it was called, 'They eat sh*t just like flies, but are far prettier and easier to swat'. LOL.
VERY cute and whimsy read, as usual in excellent meter and rhyme. I can't recall ever being bored by your writing, as it has so many levels of sweetness, and we all require a dose of that on a regular basis.
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Fabulous artwork, Brooke. Did you consider either yellow or gold for the text?
I never knew that was the name for a group of butterflies - I thought it was called, 'They eat sh*t just like flies, but are far prettier and easier to swat'. LOL.
VERY cute and whimsy read, as usual in excellent meter and rhyme. I can't recall ever being bored by your writing, as it has so many levels of sweetness, and we all require a dose of that on a regular basis.
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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I did use light yellow - you think I should go brighter? I'll try it. I'm not sure I could work they eat shit just like flies into my kinda poem ;-) Thanks, Ray. Brooke
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LOL, Brooke.
It looks white to me, and maybe gold would look better.
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It's already done! And honest to gosh it was light yellow. LOL
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Much better now, Brookers, IMHO. xx
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If anyone who gives me a six tells me it's mainly for the artistic presentation of the post, I'll owe you a six ;-)
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You don't 'owe' me anything, Brookers - your agreeing with me is my shocked reward. Haha! xx
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LOL
Comment from ravenblack
Kaleidoscopes of butterflies above a field of gold- what an awesome, ethereal image. And though your photo tells a different story, I know the golden flowers would be the humble yet glorious dandelion.
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Kaleidoscopes of butterflies above a field of gold- what an awesome, ethereal image. And though your photo tells a different story, I know the golden flowers would be the humble yet glorious dandelion.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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thanks so much, ravenblack, for the review and the dandelion comment, which has me smiling :-) Brooke
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Meek they (we) may be, but we (they) sure shine.
