If Heaven Ever Visits Earth
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6169 total reviews
Comment from Just Pete
A truly wonderful idea and a perfectly rhymed and worded poem. The butterfly is surely the epitome of beauty with their fantastic colours and patterns. Congratulations on the well deserved awards. Pete
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A truly wonderful idea and a perfectly rhymed and worded poem. The butterfly is surely the epitome of beauty with their fantastic colours and patterns. Congratulations on the well deserved awards. Pete
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Pete, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from The Death
Hi, Brooke.
Your poem has strong visual imagery. I like the theme a lot. Butterflies are too beautiful. You've made effective use of the refrain line.
If Heaven ever visits Earth,
I wonder shall I see
kaleidoscopes of butterflies
who've come to call on me.
Whimsical lines! Fine use of phonetics with S consonance, C alliteration and I assonance.
The meter is flawless and rhyming is strong, as always. Nice presentation of your work, too.
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Hi, Brooke.
Your poem has strong visual imagery. I like the theme a lot. Butterflies are too beautiful. You've made effective use of the refrain line.
If Heaven ever visits Earth,
I wonder shall I see
kaleidoscopes of butterflies
who've come to call on me.
Whimsical lines! Fine use of phonetics with S consonance, C alliteration and I assonance.
The meter is flawless and rhyming is strong, as always. Nice presentation of your work, too.
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Anupam :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
What a lovely vision of heaven. I hope that there will be butterflies there in abundance! Last week we had a kaleidoscope of around fifty Monarch butterflies on the lavender bushes around our B&B. Their burnished orange made a stunning contrast against the background colour of lavender blue and there was a seething sense of life as they rose and fluttered and settled again in the gentle breeze and winter sunshine. "If Heaven ever visits Earth" - I think it often does, if we have the eyes to see.
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What a lovely vision of heaven. I hope that there will be butterflies there in abundance! Last week we had a kaleidoscope of around fifty Monarch butterflies on the lavender bushes around our B&B. Their burnished orange made a stunning contrast against the background colour of lavender blue and there was a seething sense of life as they rose and fluttered and settled again in the gentle breeze and winter sunshine. "If Heaven ever visits Earth" - I think it often does, if we have the eyes to see.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, tfawcus :-) Brooke
Comment from GentleWind
This is beautiful. The daisy and the kaleidoscope of flutter was a song sung to my heart. May it be as you said...when heaven visits earth.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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This is beautiful. The daisy and the kaleidoscope of flutter was a song sung to my heart. May it be as you said...when heaven visits earth.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Gentle Wind, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from GWHARGIS
You get a six because of the beautiful imager your poem has left in my mind. Great imagery. I liked the style and the dream like quality to this. nicely done.
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You get a six because of the beautiful imager your poem has left in my mind. Great imagery. I liked the style and the dream like quality to this. nicely done.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your thoughtful review and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
Thanks for putting out a beautiful picture of the Monarchs, enjoying this yellow flower..Hopefully they will return this year as weren't much around in 2013...A great rhyming poem to contemplate with good word choices throughout...A very pleasant read for a Sunday.
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Thanks for putting out a beautiful picture of the Monarchs, enjoying this yellow flower..Hopefully they will return this year as weren't much around in 2013...A great rhyming poem to contemplate with good word choices throughout...A very pleasant read for a Sunday.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Caressa, thank you so much :-) I truly appreciate your encouraging and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Janie King
Such a beautiful poem and such and awesome picture your words paints in your readers mind. I love the picture, picture too. God loves you and so do I.
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Such a beautiful poem and such and awesome picture your words paints in your readers mind. I love the picture, picture too. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Janie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MelissaBickel
Your poem is full of 'Golden' moments Brooke. I love the use of kaleidoscope here in each stanza, the refrain of its use truly creates a visual wonder. Enjoyed this very much.
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Your poem is full of 'Golden' moments Brooke. I love the use of kaleidoscope here in each stanza, the refrain of its use truly creates a visual wonder. Enjoyed this very much.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Melissa, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your generous response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from lakeport
If heaven ever visits earth,indeed that's a very beautiful and colorful poem, nice rhyming and form, I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. Hugs!Lakeport.
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If heaven ever visits earth,indeed that's a very beautiful and colorful poem, nice rhyming and form, I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. Hugs!Lakeport.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Lakeport :-) Brooke
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your welcome.Hugs!Lakeport.
Comment from poetbear
I adore butterflies and this hit home.
I enjoyed every single line.
Reads well and makes sense.
Flows like a butterflies'wing.
This is a gem!
Loved it!!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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I adore butterflies and this hit home.
I enjoyed every single line.
Reads well and makes sense.
Flows like a butterflies'wing.
This is a gem!
Loved it!!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Maddy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
