If Heaven Ever Visits Earth
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6169 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
Gorgeous photo, Brooke.
I love the images your poem brings to mind.
Strong rhyme and 8/6 meter throughout.
I didn't know a group of butterflies were called a kaleidoscope.
That's perfect!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Gorgeous photo, Brooke.
I love the images your poem brings to mind.
Strong rhyme and 8/6 meter throughout.
I didn't know a group of butterflies were called a kaleidoscope.
That's perfect!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Nancy, thanks so much. I didn't know the name either until I Googled it after I wrote my first line - what a serendipitous surprise :-) Brooke
Comment from tbacha58
Hi Brooke, your pen will never need to be refilled, as your thoughts are engraved very deep in your heart. Beautiful Words with rhyming run through an amazing path which has no end of towards your creativity.
Good luck. Love Terry Hi to Sawyer. Love Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke, your pen will never need to be refilled, as your thoughts are engraved very deep in your heart. Beautiful Words with rhyming run through an amazing path which has no end of towards your creativity.
Good luck. Love Terry Hi to Sawyer. Love Terry xoxo
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Terry, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
I like to think of the Great Outdoors as being God's Cathedral. This is very well written with a smoogh flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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I like to think of the Great Outdoors as being God's Cathedral. This is very well written with a smoogh flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke
Comment from Delahay
I did not know that a group of butterflies is called a kaleidoscope. How appropriate. You have written a lovely poem that paints a beautiful picture of a field of flowers with a huge crowd of butterflies floating above it.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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I did not know that a group of butterflies is called a kaleidoscope. How appropriate. You have written a lovely poem that paints a beautiful picture of a field of flowers with a huge crowd of butterflies floating above it.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Ward, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
What a lovely presentation this is. The quatrains flow perfectly and the rhymes are delightful. I did not know a group of butterflies was a "kaleidoscope" Very interesting. Great job!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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What a lovely presentation this is. The quatrains flow perfectly and the rhymes are delightful. I did not know a group of butterflies was a "kaleidoscope" Very interesting. Great job!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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RYME4U, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Debbie
This is a beautiful poen full of grace.
Butterfies are beautiful any place.
This is a very smooth flowing well rhyming write.
The picture is a beautiful compliment to the write.
Nicely done. Thank You for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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This is a beautiful poen full of grace.
Butterfies are beautiful any place.
This is a very smooth flowing well rhyming write.
The picture is a beautiful compliment to the write.
Nicely done. Thank You for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Angel Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
If Heaven ever visits Earth,
I wonder shall I see
kaleidoscopes of butterflies
who've come to call on me.
Just beautiful - the bright and breezy poem that flow so smoothly and the whole presentation - such a treat.
Off to meet Richard in half an hour - can't wait to hug him close.
Margaret
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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If Heaven ever visits Earth,
I wonder shall I see
kaleidoscopes of butterflies
who've come to call on me.
Just beautiful - the bright and breezy poem that flow so smoothly and the whole presentation - such a treat.
Off to meet Richard in half an hour - can't wait to hug him close.
Margaret
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Margaret, thank you so much. I am particularly pleased with this poem, so I truly appreciate your encouraging sixth star :-) When you're hugging your son, add an extra squeeze for me on behalf of moms and grandmoms everywhere who wish they were hugging their own precious ones :-)
Brooke
Comment from rama devi
What a wonderful picture Stunning indeed.
I never knew a group of butterflies is called a kaleidoscope--how fitting--and what a fabulous premise for a poem too.
As usual, fine flow and rhyming--especially like request and behest- gold and behold. I like the repeat of BEH in those two too. Nice resonance.
Beautiful presentation and match between image and words. Enjoyed
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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What a wonderful picture Stunning indeed.
I never knew a group of butterflies is called a kaleidoscope--how fitting--and what a fabulous premise for a poem too.
As usual, fine flow and rhyming--especially like request and behest- gold and behold. I like the repeat of BEH in those two too. Nice resonance.
Beautiful presentation and match between image and words. Enjoyed
Love,
rd
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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thanks so much, rd - I didn't know that was the name either until I Googled while writing this - and what a delightful surprise to find out it wasn't named something unpoetic like a herd. LOL Brooke :-)
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LOL! That's fun. Thanks for sharing, B. Blessings, rd
Comment from flylikeaneagle
26 June 2014
Adewpearl:
If I could give you a ten gold star I would give this to you! What a awesome, inspiring, terrific poem. Something so small yet so beautiful and delicate is a joy to see and watch fly.
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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26 June 2014
Adewpearl:
If I could give you a ten gold star I would give this to you! What a awesome, inspiring, terrific poem. Something so small yet so beautiful and delicate is a joy to see and watch fly.
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, flylikeaneagle - I so appreciate your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You are welcome. I hope that my butterfly garden will be this pretty soon. I have deer that keep eating my lilies and hostas. Thank you for all of your editing tips and great advice. flylikeaneagle
Comment from RodG
You make us ponder, Brooke, about what we might find in Heaven. The image of "kaleidoscopes of butterflies" is so "heavenly" and stirs the imagination.
I like the way you weaved your refrain "kaleidoscopes of butterflies" into each stanza. Rod
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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You make us ponder, Brooke, about what we might find in Heaven. The image of "kaleidoscopes of butterflies" is so "heavenly" and stirs the imagination.
I like the way you weaved your refrain "kaleidoscopes of butterflies" into each stanza. Rod
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so very much, Rod :-) Brooke
