If Heaven Ever Visits Earth
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6169 total reviews
Comment from ArtGal
Brooke, Heaven will not only visit earth, but at the end of time, will stay here forever more! And we will walk on streets of gold. Just my own thoughts, but I do believe that if you love butterflies like so many of us do, that they will surround you. What a beautiful poem, and love each stanza, but I must admit that I had to look up the word 'behest', and you give me new ones quite often, lol, so I thank you for this. Great job, girl. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Brooke, Heaven will not only visit earth, but at the end of time, will stay here forever more! And we will walk on streets of gold. Just my own thoughts, but I do believe that if you love butterflies like so many of us do, that they will surround you. What a beautiful poem, and love each stanza, but I must admit that I had to look up the word 'behest', and you give me new ones quite often, lol, so I thank you for this. Great job, girl. . .Sharon
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Sharon, thank you so much for your most thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
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You're so very welcome, dear Brooke.
Comment from krys123
Brooke, this poem is exceptionally written in all of its requirements. Its meter, tempo lining and rhythm all are composed quite exceptionally. Your writing is neither force nor labored why your rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem which makes it so easy to read because of the rhyming which helps the rhythm. Your artistic critique or commentary is the most interesting I have read it opens up not many questions but answers which you have made quite openly and clearly understood. Your imagery was also brilliantly expressive in this passage you write: "A kaleidoscope of butterflies above a field of gold".
These types of poems for me it is an honor to read this type of perfection so thank you very much for sharing and posting this for us and all readers and made the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Brooke, this poem is exceptionally written in all of its requirements. Its meter, tempo lining and rhythm all are composed quite exceptionally. Your writing is neither force nor labored why your rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem which makes it so easy to read because of the rhyming which helps the rhythm. Your artistic critique or commentary is the most interesting I have read it opens up not many questions but answers which you have made quite openly and clearly understood. Your imagery was also brilliantly expressive in this passage you write: "A kaleidoscope of butterflies above a field of gold".
These types of poems for me it is an honor to read this type of perfection so thank you very much for sharing and posting this for us and all readers and made the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Alex, thank you so much for your most generous and thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend and have a great weekend.
Alex
Comment from boxergirl
A stunning picture of butterflies and sunflower to accompany your poem, "If Heaven ever visits Earth". Nice ABCB rhyme scheme to make it flow smoothly. Beautiful presentation that brings a sense of serenity to the reader. 8-)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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A stunning picture of butterflies and sunflower to accompany your poem, "If Heaven ever visits Earth". Nice ABCB rhyme scheme to make it flow smoothly. Beautiful presentation that brings a sense of serenity to the reader. 8-)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thanks so very much, boxergirl :-) Brooke
Comment from TOMORAL
What a beautiful picture you paint of all those butterflies. I can picture heaven being like that. Thanks for sharing this delightful piece.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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What a beautiful picture you paint of all those butterflies. I can picture heaven being like that. Thanks for sharing this delightful piece.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Tomoral, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from beautyseeker
Lovely poem whimsically written... I can so easily see heaven a beautiful array of kaleidoscopes!And yes kaleidoscopes of course of butterflies, lovely imagry!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Lovely poem whimsically written... I can so easily see heaven a beautiful array of kaleidoscopes!And yes kaleidoscopes of course of butterflies, lovely imagry!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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beautyseeker, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
Beautiful poem ...and beautiful metaphor....I think of my self cocooning it on earth and one day I hope I will be a butterflying....
Well done Brooke...beautiful artwork too
God bless
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Beautiful poem ...and beautiful metaphor....I think of my self cocooning it on earth and one day I hope I will be a butterflying....
Well done Brooke...beautiful artwork too
God bless
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, kiwijenny :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh Brooke, what a romantic notion! How very lovely, and your presentation - wow. It's stunning. This is a most exquisite poem, deserving of a six, which (you guessed it), I do not have.
God, I love your poetry!
OUTSTANDING! *********************!!!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Oh Brooke, what a romantic notion! How very lovely, and your presentation - wow. It's stunning. This is a most exquisite poem, deserving of a six, which (you guessed it), I do not have.
God, I love your poetry!
OUTSTANDING! *********************!!!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Dawn, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your encouragement and generous wish for a sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
How cool! I had heard of a flutter, a rabble and, of course, a swarm - but I had never heard the appellation "kaleidoscope"!! How amazingly appropriate :-) :-)
Great poem (educational too LOL)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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How cool! I had heard of a flutter, a rabble and, of course, a swarm - but I had never heard the appellation "kaleidoscope"!! How amazingly appropriate :-) :-)
Great poem (educational too LOL)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Leineco, yes the one site I went to said it can also be called a rabble :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
Very lively and upbeat concept and delivery.
Good abcb rhymes in your quatrain in 8-6/8-6
Seek ye first the kingdom of God and all good things will be added to you. Once you are in good standing anything that you desire will be granted so I suspect those butterflies will be waiting when the time comes
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Very lively and upbeat concept and delivery.
Good abcb rhymes in your quatrain in 8-6/8-6
Seek ye first the kingdom of God and all good things will be added to you. Once you are in good standing anything that you desire will be granted so I suspect those butterflies will be waiting when the time comes
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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emrpoems - thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
behest? I'd never heard of that word what a handy word to know when you are a rhymer especially when looking for a rhyming word with request! lol well done Brooke.
brooke can I ask you something you being very anal on the grammar department. Why don't you use Question marks more consistently where you ask a question in a line be it rhetorical or whatever? it's just an observation as a recipient of your thorough grammatical/poetical reviews?
just curious I'm sure you will give me a satisfactory poetical reason that will suffice my query! lol
beautifully written as usual by the way
xxdip
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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behest? I'd never heard of that word what a handy word to know when you are a rhymer especially when looking for a rhyming word with request! lol well done Brooke.
brooke can I ask you something you being very anal on the grammar department. Why don't you use Question marks more consistently where you ask a question in a line be it rhetorical or whatever? it's just an observation as a recipient of your thorough grammatical/poetical reviews?
just curious I'm sure you will give me a satisfactory poetical reason that will suffice my query! lol
beautifully written as usual by the way
xxdip
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Dip :-) I do use question marks with rhetorical questions. I didn't use them here because I considered them declarative statement beginning I wonder. Is Peter here tonight? That I would use a question mark with. I wonder if Peter is here tonight. That I wouldn't use a question mark with.
Brooke :-)
