If Heaven Ever Visits Earth
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6169 total reviews
Comment from CR Delport
A while ago while playing golf, I found myself in a kaleidoscope of small, white butterflies. There were thousands of them. It was like being in a fairytale. I love butterflies :) This is very well written.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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A while ago while playing golf, I found myself in a kaleidoscope of small, white butterflies. There were thousands of them. It was like being in a fairytale. I love butterflies :) This is very well written.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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CR, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from James Dooney
Oh yes this is another very good work here ! I love the language that you have used here to tell your tale ! very well done !
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Oh yes this is another very good work here ! I love the language that you have used here to tell your tale ! very well done !
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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James, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
I didn't know that. Yes, how very perfect, a kaleidoscope of butterflies. Beautifully put and comforting to read and contemplate with all of the bad news lately. Lovely, mikey
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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I didn't know that. Yes, how very perfect, a kaleidoscope of butterflies. Beautifully put and comforting to read and contemplate with all of the bad news lately. Lovely, mikey
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Mikey - I am always so pleased when one of my poems comes at a good time in a reader's life :-) Brooke
Comment from sunnilicious
'kaleidoscopes of butterflies' is such a beautiful line. I loved that you managed to repeat it. Wonderful visual imagery created. Creative. Lovely poem. Nice work.
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'kaleidoscopes of butterflies' is such a beautiful line. I loved that you managed to repeat it. Wonderful visual imagery created. Creative. Lovely poem. Nice work.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Sunnilicious, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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Enjoy
Have a great week
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
As a matter of fact, I think I would prefer a Kaleidoscope of Butterflies to a Pride of Lions. You know, if given a choice. smile
Great job on this one Brooke,
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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As a matter of fact, I think I would prefer a Kaleidoscope of Butterflies to a Pride of Lions. You know, if given a choice. smile
Great job on this one Brooke,
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Carolyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
I've seen that once, not Heaven on Earth, though I had some good times, but a kaleidoscope, while in Florida. It truly is a sight to behold. Not a bad wish. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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I've seen that once, not Heaven on Earth, though I had some good times, but a kaleidoscope, while in Florida. It truly is a sight to behold. Not a bad wish. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Lancellot :-) Brooke
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
I really needed this upbeat poem about Heaven and the kaleidoscope of butterflies tonight! This beautiful imagery created through the words of the poem and the repetition of the line "Kaleidoscope of butterflies" really helps visualize the rainbow of colors that a kaleidoscope of butterflies creates. I think it is fitting to tie butterflies with Heaven because it has been said that if you whisper a wish to a butterfly it will carry it up to Heaven on its wings. I love to think that butterflies are little messengers from above. The repetition of the line "Kaleidoscope of butterflies" really draws the reader's attention and creates an excellent impact. This poem flows beautifully as a result of the abcb rhythmic pattern that remains consistent throughout this entire piece. The photo accompanying this poem is perfectly chosen to define the words of the writer and further enhance the writer's vision. The final line of this poem unifies this poem perfectly and leaves this poem to resonate strongly with the reader long after it has been read.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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I really needed this upbeat poem about Heaven and the kaleidoscope of butterflies tonight! This beautiful imagery created through the words of the poem and the repetition of the line "Kaleidoscope of butterflies" really helps visualize the rainbow of colors that a kaleidoscope of butterflies creates. I think it is fitting to tie butterflies with Heaven because it has been said that if you whisper a wish to a butterfly it will carry it up to Heaven on its wings. I love to think that butterflies are little messengers from above. The repetition of the line "Kaleidoscope of butterflies" really draws the reader's attention and creates an excellent impact. This poem flows beautifully as a result of the abcb rhythmic pattern that remains consistent throughout this entire piece. The photo accompanying this poem is perfectly chosen to define the words of the writer and further enhance the writer's vision. The final line of this poem unifies this poem perfectly and leaves this poem to resonate strongly with the reader long after it has been read.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Rainbows, for your attentive reading of this poem and for your thoughtful response to it. Thank you also for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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It was a beautifully designed piece of literature truly worthy of nothing less than six stars! You always amaze me with the multitude of subjects that you write about, yet you always intricately design your poems to fit the subject matter making the topic come alive through your well chosen word choices. Have a lovely day and you are welcome for the review! :-)
Comment from Glasstruth
A poem that leaves one to wonder. Like the image of a kaleidoscopes of butterflies from heaven. Simple, yet it grabbed me with a beauty I can visualize. A wonderful request. Les
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A poem that leaves one to wonder. Like the image of a kaleidoscopes of butterflies from heaven. Simple, yet it grabbed me with a beauty I can visualize. A wonderful request. Les
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Les, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from J.Byers
Most appropriately indeed. I liked your use of refrain lines in this work, and that you kept it short, sweet, and to the point. A beautifully worded poem, that created a wonderful image.
Blessings,
~ J.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Most appropriately indeed. I liked your use of refrain lines in this work, and that you kept it short, sweet, and to the point. A beautifully worded poem, that created a wonderful image.
Blessings,
~ J.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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J, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from MissMerri
This is just beautiful. I love the musical rhythm of the alternating lines (8/6/8/6) and the melodic lilt of the vocabulary as well. "Kaleidoscopes of butterflies" is just fun to say and melodic in its own right. What a lovely choice of subject matter and all so beautifully described. I enjoyed this immensely.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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This is just beautiful. I love the musical rhythm of the alternating lines (8/6/8/6) and the melodic lilt of the vocabulary as well. "Kaleidoscopes of butterflies" is just fun to say and melodic in its own right. What a lovely choice of subject matter and all so beautifully described. I enjoyed this immensely.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Adonna, thank you so very much, my friend :-) I so appreciate your thoughtful comments and generous sixth star. Brooke :-)
