If I Can't Make the Shot
a swap quatrain133 total reviews
Comment from Sueswrite
I really enjoyed this adorable poem about a very self-confident child. This swap quatrain writing style with this is terrific and the photo is perfect! Great work!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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I really enjoyed this adorable poem about a very self-confident child. This swap quatrain writing style with this is terrific and the photo is perfect! Great work!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Sueswrite, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
This is really a very positive write. Determination being the strong focus on life. Looking at the glass half full instead of half empty.
Great words to know that there is always a different way of seeing. Whatever we see will be.
well written
Sawyer is really doing his very best in this photo.
Mary
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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This is really a very positive write. Determination being the strong focus on life. Looking at the glass half full instead of half empty.
Great words to know that there is always a different way of seeing. Whatever we see will be.
well written
Sawyer is really doing his very best in this photo.
Mary
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Mary, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
That is the beauty of perseverance and strength. To never give up, to strive is as important to the young as it is to the seasoned, though the perspectives are slightly different, the meaning is the same.
A thoughtful poem and a good aabb structure with good end rhymes and good ethics.
RGstar
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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That is the beauty of perseverance and strength. To never give up, to strive is as important to the young as it is to the seasoned, though the perspectives are slightly different, the meaning is the same.
A thoughtful poem and a good aabb structure with good end rhymes and good ethics.
RGstar
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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RG, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I love the art work and words very much.
We can only give our best shot with everything
Within our lives.
Sawyer seems to be very keen and loving this game.
honey tree
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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I love the art work and words very much.
We can only give our best shot with everything
Within our lives.
Sawyer seems to be very keen and loving this game.
honey tree
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Annie, thank you so very much for this generous response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from GWinterwin
Another good poem with a good message. Good word flow and rhyming make it easy to read and understand. Lots of good advice here about never giving up, but doing whatever is needed to be better and survive.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Another good poem with a good message. Good word flow and rhyming make it easy to read and understand. Lots of good advice here about never giving up, but doing whatever is needed to be better and survive.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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G Winterwin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
I hope he keeps making the shot and pursues the game in school--it's great exercise! I once again relished the sway quatrain. Your lesson in persistence and your rhymes are memorable. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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I hope he keeps making the shot and pursues the game in school--it's great exercise! I once again relished the sway quatrain. Your lesson in persistence and your rhymes are memorable. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Joan - yeah, basketball is a lot less dangerous than football, I suppose. I want him to join the chess and debate teams. LOL :-) Brooke
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I cannot disagree--tennis would probably be O.K. too. More smiles- Joan
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tennis - good idea, gets in some fresh air and exercise :-)
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And it can even be considered a team sport with doubles! -J
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I like the way your mind works :-)
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I enjoy our mutual admiration! ;) -Joan
Comment from heyjude
Brooke, I enjoy your poems so much that get
inspiration from your pictures of Sawyer.
Great alliteration in tippy-toes, different
dream and bubbles burst.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Brooke, I enjoy your poems so much that get
inspiration from your pictures of Sawyer.
Great alliteration in tippy-toes, different
dream and bubbles burst.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from bob cullen
Your poetry always has the most precise rhythm and it flows with the easy pace of a country stream.
It's uplifting and most times it carries the innocent face of your grandson, I presume.
When I'm feeling down I like to find and read an Adewpearl poem. Thank you for providing that release
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Your poetry always has the most precise rhythm and it flows with the easy pace of a country stream.
It's uplifting and most times it carries the innocent face of your grandson, I presume.
When I'm feeling down I like to find and read an Adewpearl poem. Thank you for providing that release
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Bob, and yes, Sawyer is my only grand child :-) Brooke
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He appears to be a gorgeous little chap, just like his Nan
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I can never decide if he is cuter or smarter. LOL Today my daughter posted videos of him singing Vanilla Ice's Ice Ice Baby, and then for contrast Hey Mr. Tambourine Man. Of course, at 25 months he only sings the first several lines of each, but I can't help but thinking how remarkable that is :-)
Comment from babylonia
Brooke,
LOL Made me smiggle. The expression on his face. I'm going to do it. LOL I need his determination. :D
Imagery is excellent.
Love,
Barbara
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Brooke,
LOL Made me smiggle. The expression on his face. I'm going to do it. LOL I need his determination. :D
Imagery is excellent.
Love,
Barbara
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thanks so very much, Barbara :-) Brooke
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Brooke,
You're welcome.
Love,
Barbara
Comment from Keronica
This is a wonderful poem based on how we can try until we succeed in what we want or need! :) This was an enjoyable read! (That all rhymes!) WEEEEE! ;) Thanks for sharing!
~Keronica
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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This is a wonderful poem based on how we can try until we succeed in what we want or need! :) This was an enjoyable read! (That all rhymes!) WEEEEE! ;) Thanks for sharing!
~Keronica
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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How lovely to see you, Keronica :-) Thanks so much for your enthusiastic review :-) Brooke
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You're welcome! :)
