If I Can't Make the Shot
a swap quatrain133 total reviews
Comment from James Dooney
I like this work here of yours Brooke and I feel that you have left a very positive message here for the kids of today. Good job !
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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I like this work here of yours Brooke and I feel that you have left a very positive message here for the kids of today. Good job !
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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James, Thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
This was an encouraging poem of rhyme & determination, to keep on & seemingly, never give up, even if by the picture, your a 'Lil guy, like Sawyer, you still can have plenty of high hopes & inspirations like you, his Grandma writes about. Maybe, even a future basketball star yet to be if that is his wish...
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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This was an encouraging poem of rhyme & determination, to keep on & seemingly, never give up, even if by the picture, your a 'Lil guy, like Sawyer, you still can have plenty of high hopes & inspirations like you, his Grandma writes about. Maybe, even a future basketball star yet to be if that is his wish...
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Caressa, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MM lives on :)
You always have the most adorable poems Brooke and this one I loved as well and adore that you share your pride and joys picture with your readers. Thanks for sharing always a pleasure
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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You always have the most adorable poems Brooke and this one I loved as well and adore that you share your pride and joys picture with your readers. Thanks for sharing always a pleasure
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Christopher, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. well, a timely Poem for me. Keep trying. Too many things going wrong. My dog cut here paw yesterday, blood everywhere. And this morning I open my Computer to find the News about Gungalo.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Hi. well, a timely Poem for me. Keep trying. Too many things going wrong. My dog cut here paw yesterday, blood everywhere. And this morning I open my Computer to find the News about Gungalo.
padumachitta
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, padumachitta. Such sad news about Gungalo. Brooke
Comment from Bryana
Absolutely lovely poem, I like so much I've
read it several times. I love the way you
describe the solution for any problem one
may have.
There's always a pleasure to read your work
dear Brooke.
Have a wonderful weekend with Sawyer.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Absolutely lovely poem, I like so much I've
read it several times. I love the way you
describe the solution for any problem one
may have.
There's always a pleasure to read your work
dear Brooke.
Have a wonderful weekend with Sawyer.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Bryana :-) Brooke
Comment from Kym Jade
We loved this wonderful poem.
In its well crafted lays a message about life we should all heed.
If I am not well enough to do something today
I will do my very best to find another way
Best wishes and dreams
Kym
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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We loved this wonderful poem.
In its well crafted lays a message about life we should all heed.
If I am not well enough to do something today
I will do my very best to find another way
Best wishes and dreams
Kym
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Kym, thank you so much for your generous review. It is always a lovely surprise to see you :-) Brooke
Comment from judiverse
I really love the swaps in this. They all work so well. Very exuberant tone throughout, and very upbeat. You show us that if things don't turn as you hope, there's always another way. I like the examples you give, especially the one in the last stanza, "I'll practice all the more if I have lost the game." Lovely AABB rhyme in this. judi
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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I really love the swaps in this. They all work so well. Very exuberant tone throughout, and very upbeat. You show us that if things don't turn as you hope, there's always another way. I like the examples you give, especially the one in the last stanza, "I'll practice all the more if I have lost the game." Lovely AABB rhyme in this. judi
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Judi, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. It was such a joy to read. judi
Comment from Just Pete
A great poem of childish questions and answers. Another that reads like a nursery rhyme.
"If I can't swim the sea, I'll find myself a boat
that sails to distant shores while I am kept afloat.
If I'm in need of shade, I'll plant myself a tree --
I'll find myself a boat if I can't swim the sea...."
This stanza is particularly good. Pete
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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A great poem of childish questions and answers. Another that reads like a nursery rhyme.
"If I can't swim the sea, I'll find myself a boat
that sails to distant shores while I am kept afloat.
If I'm in need of shade, I'll plant myself a tree --
I'll find myself a boat if I can't swim the sea...."
This stanza is particularly good. Pete
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Pete, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
That my poetic friend is one of my favourite pieces you have posted.
I just love the rhyme formula, I love the repetition and assurance in each verse. it has a beautiful rhythmic canter that once you establish is easy to flow with.
It has perfect AABB rhyme and it can be perceived in many ways as an analogy to life and its challenges in all of us not just your grandson shooting a basket as portrayed in this photo.
It sums up determination, it sums up the tenacity never to give in or be defeated..it sums up an attitude!
thanks for sharing this beautiful poem Brooke
dip
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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That my poetic friend is one of my favourite pieces you have posted.
I just love the rhyme formula, I love the repetition and assurance in each verse. it has a beautiful rhythmic canter that once you establish is easy to flow with.
It has perfect AABB rhyme and it can be perceived in many ways as an analogy to life and its challenges in all of us not just your grandson shooting a basket as portrayed in this photo.
It sums up determination, it sums up the tenacity never to give in or be defeated..it sums up an attitude!
thanks for sharing this beautiful poem Brooke
dip
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Dip, thank you - I'm pleased as punch and tickled pink :-) Brooke
Comment from Irish Rain
I just love this...love those wrapped refrains! First they ask 'if'...then they reinforce themselves, same question becomes the answer! This is also a very inspiring poem, in itself! Blessings tonight!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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I just love this...love those wrapped refrains! First they ask 'if'...then they reinforce themselves, same question becomes the answer! This is also a very inspiring poem, in itself! Blessings tonight!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Justjo, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You are always welcome!
