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If I Can't Make the Shot

a swap quatrain

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Comment from janalma
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The poem and the pic remind me of a story I read to my little grandkids--can't go over it, can't go under it, have to go thru it. With variations. Lol. Cute poem here that is inspirational for kids (and adults) as yours usually are.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
    janalma, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
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Oh. This is a perfect companion to the other piece. I wish I had a matching six to go with it as this is as good as the other one. Another upbeat and uplifting piece. A little different message here, but the same idea. Make do with what you have and improvise if you have to. Great piece. mikey

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
    Thank you so very much, Mikey :-) Brooke
Comment from livelylinda
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Brooke: an inspirational kind of poem filled with your usual words of wisdom inspired by Sawyer. . .there is so much they teach US. Lovely as always. Linda

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
    Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
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I love the poem and I loved the line about how when everything goes dark I'll find a brighter flame. That's what I need to do. Great job friend

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
    ExperiencingLiphe, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Carole Rosa
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Brooke, Great motivation for an adult as well for Sawyer. "If I can't, I'll find a way!" Sawyer's photo is perfect for your message. I assume you compose your poems to match Sawyer's pictures. Sweet as always. Carole


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
    Thank you so much, Carole :-) Yes, the pictures inspire the poems. The little one is my muse. Brooke
Comment from Victoria K
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Another wonderful poem by you!

I have read a couple of your previous pieces, and I am very impressed with your ability to convey so much through poetry.

Even though you adhere to a set rhyme scheme, your words always seem effortless, like they would be chosen regardless of whether they rhyme or not. This is a true accomplishment, as many rhyming poems can feel "forced" and therefore not authentic.

Thanks for always producing great material :)

Victoria

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
    Victoria, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to my poetry :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
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This is a very inspirational piece. Very well said. We should never give up and always believe we can make it, if we think and put in the work.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
    lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Great poem on perseverance! This is something kids need to learn, and like everything else that is challenging to today's pamppered kids, it's being downplayed. Someday when they need preseverance they'll be clueless. NOt Sawyer, though.. his family has the right idea. :)

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
    Thanks so much, Phyllis. A pampered 18 year old girl rearended my daughter-in-law yesterday with a brand new huge Jeep with those oversized tires, that ran right over the top of Tamara's back bumper and crushed the trunk. What parent buys a kid that age such a huge, fancy, brand new car? Luckily, Tamara is OK, but the car is wrecked. And I bet her daddy doesn't even ground her.
    Brooke
reply by Phyllis Stewart on 26-Jun-2014
    I tutor high school kids in this upper middle class town. Lots of wealthy folks in those huuuuge new houses. I'd say about half my students get BRAND NEW CARS as soon as they get their licenses! I'm driving the car my mom left... it's exactly 20 years old, and Mark's car has 240,000 miles on it. Yet these children drive $30,000 cars at age 16. It's UNREAL. My daughter inherited my old Jeep when I upgraded to a newer used Jeep. She STILL has it... it's a 1998 and has had a few systems replaced, and she did a lot of the work HERSELF. She's soooo much like her dad. Not at all pampered, that's for sure. :)
Comment from Quire's Gal
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More sage wisdom for Sawyer. He will grow up a welladjusted lad indeed.

This is fun and whimsical. These are my favorite lines...

If I can't quench my thirst, I'll find the nearest stream,
and if my bubble's burst, I'll dream a different dream.

I love the the bubbles burst/dream a different dream line...very poetically expressed.

Your last few entries have provided me with new ideas to tackle...thank you.
Katherine

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
    Thanks so much, Katherine - it is, indeed, a fun form to tackle :-) Brooke
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi Brooke,

UH-OH, I see the construction pylons by Sawyer! That means more work ahead once he finishes with the hoops and sails the sea.

Fun poem.

Cheers * Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
    Jax, thanks so much :-) Brooke