If I Can't Make the Shot
a swap quatrain133 total reviews
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Geez, I'm so far behind again! You've certainly mastered the swap quatrain ! Perfectly executed in structure, rhyme and meter (of course). It sings to me about the value of persistence in achieving your goals and keeping a positive attitude in life. Wonderful read, my friend.
All the best, Rodger
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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Geez, I'm so far behind again! You've certainly mastered the swap quatrain ! Perfectly executed in structure, rhyme and meter (of course). It sings to me about the value of persistence in achieving your goals and keeping a positive attitude in life. Wonderful read, my friend.
All the best, Rodger
Comment Written 04-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014
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Roger, I just love the form and owe it all to you :-) Thank you! Brooke
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Don't forget Lorraine Cangtor lol. Thank you! I thought I wrote one before and I found it in my portfolio from more than two years ago titled Moonglow. I'm working on two more but not yet ready for prime time LOL. :)
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I don't remember what I ate for lunch yesterday or what I posted two years ago. LOL
Sometimes I enter one of those site-sponsored contests four months before the deadline, and when the judging comes around, I have to read my poem to see what the hell I entered :-)
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LOL I believe you!
Comment from w.j.debi
This is a very interesting poetry form. I see you've done a couple of poems in this form. You make it seem so easy to swap the wording--which I suspect it is not especially since you also have to take make it work in rhyme and meter. Another form for me to learn about. Thank you!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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This is a very interesting poetry form. I see you've done a couple of poems in this form. You make it seem so easy to swap the wording--which I suspect it is not especially since you also have to take make it work in rhyme and meter. Another form for me to learn about. Thank you!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks so very much, Debi :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. I don't get to the site every day so I have to play catch up sometimes.
Comment from Deniz22
You're simply the bestest writer ever! Another gem, with all the words smooth and straight and all the corners tucked in...whatever that means!):)
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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You're simply the bestest writer ever! Another gem, with all the words smooth and straight and all the corners tucked in...whatever that means!):)
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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You have made my day and night with that comment - I'm honored by your encouragement and generosity :-) Thank you! Brooke :-)
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You deserve every accolade...:) Dennis
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Living is a life of alternatives, that denotes not giving up at any temporary setback. I enjoyed this work as you profer alternatives to every limitations. This carries the same message with my own poem 'No surrender' that I posted few hours ago. Good work
ola thomas
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Living is a life of alternatives, that denotes not giving up at any temporary setback. I enjoyed this work as you profer alternatives to every limitations. This carries the same message with my own poem 'No surrender' that I posted few hours ago. Good work
ola thomas
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Ola :-) Brooke
Comment from Treischel
This poem is truly brilliant in its superb thematic concept and in its execution of the format requirements. Inspired by the antics of that precocious Sawyer, it blends his tenacity into a poetic lesson on resolution.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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This poem is truly brilliant in its superb thematic concept and in its execution of the format requirements. Inspired by the antics of that precocious Sawyer, it blends his tenacity into a poetic lesson on resolution.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Treischel, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from beautyseeker
Wow, i didnt expect this, I have to admit the other day I scanned over it, wow what a surprise, so glad i clicked today... This could be a childrens book! Excellent aabb rhyme and flows so well but not just for children book it has a real underlying meaning to life itself! Loved
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Wow, i didnt expect this, I have to admit the other day I scanned over it, wow what a surprise, so glad i clicked today... This could be a childrens book! Excellent aabb rhyme and flows so well but not just for children book it has a real underlying meaning to life itself! Loved
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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beauty seeker, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dutchie
Love this poem very much Brooke. Nice message for a possitive view on life. There is a solution for almost everything.
Just change your view on things. Great flow, wonderful rhyme and a nice subject. Lovely. Fia
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Love this poem very much Brooke. Nice message for a possitive view on life. There is a solution for almost everything.
Just change your view on things. Great flow, wonderful rhyme and a nice subject. Lovely. Fia
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Fia, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sanku
Swap quatrain is an interesting form and it is very ideal for the kind of inspirational poems that help to spread cheer. The reversing of order especially is delightful and gives special emphasis to the message intended. With Sawyers photo and your mastery this is a perfect inspirational poem.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Swap quatrain is an interesting form and it is very ideal for the kind of inspirational poems that help to spread cheer. The reversing of order especially is delightful and gives special emphasis to the message intended. With Sawyers photo and your mastery this is a perfect inspirational poem.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Sanku, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I read Rodger's 'swap' poem the other day, and really enjoyed it. I'd not seen one before. So I was delighted to see another, Brooke!
I'm inspired after reading this! I like the feeling of determination you've created, and love the examples and rhymes you've chosen.
A very positive poem. Thanks for sharing.
Av
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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I read Rodger's 'swap' poem the other day, and really enjoyed it. I'd not seen one before. So I was delighted to see another, Brooke!
I'm inspired after reading this! I like the feeling of determination you've created, and love the examples and rhymes you've chosen.
A very positive poem. Thanks for sharing.
Av
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Av, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking nice piece of poetry beautifully depicting the strength of killer instinct to succeed in life by keeping in mind 'where there is will, there is way'!
Simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth and pleasant flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"If I have lost the game, I'll practice all the more
to find another way to make the winning score."
Excellent!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking nice piece of poetry beautifully depicting the strength of killer instinct to succeed in life by keeping in mind 'where there is will, there is way'!
Simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth and pleasant flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"If I have lost the game, I'll practice all the more
to find another way to make the winning score."
Excellent!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014
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RP, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to my poem :-) Brooke
