If Life is a Drum
a swap quatrain129 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Meet the Pied Piper of California! Complete with small brolly for use as a parachute in case the wind picks him up. Brilliant story/poem about the challenges met and handled by the little man who conquers the world in one day. LOL.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Meet the Pied Piper of California! Complete with small brolly for use as a parachute in case the wind picks him up. Brilliant story/poem about the challenges met and handled by the little man who conquers the world in one day. LOL.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Kay :-) He is so damned cute I just don't know what to do other than to write about his adventures :-) Brooke
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Put your thinking cap on and create critters that talk to Sawyer, making him the centre of your tales - a bit like Sandra and Hedgerow Capers. Hey! What do you think about this Eternal Flame for deceased writers (I wrote to Thomas the Tank Engine ages ago about it) he agreed that not every writer has family (like me) - we don't have $200 to keep the flame burning!! My work will wither and die with me. Nanette Mary is another one gone off the grid, I think she has passed over. :-{ Grrr...
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Kay, I saw the price of it and nearly choked on my own tongue. I'm sorry to say I have not thought of Nanette Mary in a while, and yes, since she was so very old, I fear you are correct.
Comment from emrpoems
Motivational and inspirational is this poem. Never heard of the swap quatrain but you executed the form as you should,
Good rhyming couplets and lovely rhythm. Sawyer looks like he took his ride in a parachute
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Motivational and inspirational is this poem. Never heard of the swap quatrain but you executed the form as you should,
Good rhyming couplets and lovely rhythm. Sawyer looks like he took his ride in a parachute
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Thanks, emrpoems, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
HAHAHAHA - what a great, inspiring poem, so full of enthusiasm and pep. This picture of Sawyer is perfect for it too. Just marvelous, Brooke - as always!!!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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HAHAHAHA - what a great, inspiring poem, so full of enthusiasm and pep. This picture of Sawyer is perfect for it too. Just marvelous, Brooke - as always!!!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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thank you, Dawn - you're always so encouraging :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
This is like the little wrap around contest that's going on, but taken up several notches! It is so effective. This feels like a determined march and the third lines feel like shouted declarations of determination!! The rhythm is infectious and it's all I can do to stay seated. Great piece. mikey
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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This is like the little wrap around contest that's going on, but taken up several notches! It is so effective. This feels like a determined march and the third lines feel like shouted declarations of determination!! The rhythm is infectious and it's all I can do to stay seated. Great piece. mikey
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Mikey :-) I appreciate your enthusiastic comments and generous rating. Little contest? Brooke
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Well, BIG contest. I always exaggerate one way or the other!!
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what the heck contest are you talking about, big or little? LOL
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Write a wrap around refrain. I think its a site contest.
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gotcha, I just looked it up - I am in that contest, but it's not the same form as this. Now I can stop being confused LOL
Comment from Charlene0513
To adewpearl,
A very extraordinary grandson you have there. Anyone will be afraid to compete against his goals of life.
Again, some excellent proximate rhyming schemes in the AABB format.
Charlene
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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To adewpearl,
A very extraordinary grandson you have there. Anyone will be afraid to compete against his goals of life.
Again, some excellent proximate rhyming schemes in the AABB format.
Charlene
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Charlene, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
Well written, of course. I just finished commenting in a review about kids being driven who have no fire in the gut.
Now the speaker here has fire a-plenty. His pop would be unbearable with his boasting.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Well written, of course. I just finished commenting in a review about kids being driven who have no fire in the gut.
Now the speaker here has fire a-plenty. His pop would be unbearable with his boasting.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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LIJ, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Brooke,
This is a very inspiring piece of work. I like the positive affirmations that resound throughout the poem, and its straight-forward approach to life, well done. I have one question, if you don't mind sharing a little info... Your lines that have the words, "...run it if life..., beat it if life..." etc. Why is there no comma between "it" and "if". (I'm still stashing away a few dollars for a class... my new medical bill's are taking their toll. I don't know if I mentioned it to you, but I was diagnosed with bladder cancer in Feb. I caught it early and treatments are going well!) Beautiful job on this poem, and thanks for your help, all my best, Bill
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
This is a very inspiring piece of work. I like the positive affirmations that resound throughout the poem, and its straight-forward approach to life, well done. I have one question, if you don't mind sharing a little info... Your lines that have the words, "...run it if life..., beat it if life..." etc. Why is there no comma between "it" and "if". (I'm still stashing away a few dollars for a class... my new medical bill's are taking their toll. I don't know if I mentioned it to you, but I was diagnosed with bladder cancer in Feb. I caught it early and treatments are going well!) Beautiful job on this poem, and thanks for your help, all my best, Bill
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Bill. I don't have a comma between it and if because the sentences that end in it are complete sentences that don't flow into the next line. I appreciate your generous sixth star and look forward to your taking my class when circumstances allow. I am pleased to hear your treatments are going well. With so many cancers in today's age of modern medicine, early detection leads to a really high cure rate :-) Brooke
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I see... Thank you so much for that explanation, it is greatly appreciated! Bill
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
I've never heard of a swapped quatrain before. You sure did a great job in writing this cute little poem about darling Sawyer. I'll have to try to write one some day. I want to write more poems about Dylan.
Kat
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I've never heard of a swapped quatrain before. You sure did a great job in writing this cute little poem about darling Sawyer. I'll have to try to write one some day. I want to write more poems about Dylan.
Kat
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Kat, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
And just make sure the little tyke stays true to the beat of his own drum. That inner strength to follow your own path, to be a one man surfing band (just don't get the drum wet) is excellent advice.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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And just make sure the little tyke stays true to the beat of his own drum. That inner strength to follow your own path, to be a one man surfing band (just don't get the drum wet) is excellent advice.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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ravenblack, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Acquired Taste
Another message of positive encouragement - this can be read to any child (and needful adults) and allow the seeds of a positive walk forward stay in their hearts. Like this one!
Jean
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Another message of positive encouragement - this can be read to any child (and needful adults) and allow the seeds of a positive walk forward stay in their hearts. Like this one!
Jean
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Jean, thank you so much :-) Brooke
