Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "The Zig Zag Man In County Jail"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
12 total reviews
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. Junior is learning that he can not plead ignorance. I hope he does care for Angela. The Bard is still a good ally. I have a feeling that Diamond and Ruby will be a good help too. Great work.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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I love the story. Junior is learning that he can not plead ignorance. I hope he does care for Angela. The Bard is still a good ally. I have a feeling that Diamond and Ruby will be a good help too. Great work.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Yeah. I'm trying to get Diamond and Ruby into the act. They're in Vegas! Junior does care about Angela, so that is something. Glad you're enjoying. I'm trying to catch up on responding. I do read all of these and appreciate them. Thank you so much. mikey
Comment from Selina Stambi
My goodness, Mikey! What a rollercoaster ride your tale is!
I'm quite dizzy with all the unfolding events. Poor Angela. Hope she finds a way out of her mess.
Hope you're having a great week!
Sonali
suddenly come to know what punishment (felt) like.
look at those kids pretend to be grateful(?)
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My goodness, Mikey! What a rollercoaster ride your tale is!
I'm quite dizzy with all the unfolding events. Poor Angela. Hope she finds a way out of her mess.
Hope you're having a great week!
Sonali
suddenly come to know what punishment (felt) like.
look at those kids pretend to be grateful(?)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
Comment from l.raven
Hey you, ok !!!now Lucy and Bard are back in the room singing the zig zag song...LOL...and Bard tells of tales in jail...and makes a pas at Junior...lol...Harper and Junior are having words...and Angela just got what was most likely her first spanking...and it's time for breakfast...smile...now lets go get that girl...very interesting read...love that Bard...Luff Ya Linda xxoo love
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Hey you, ok !!!now Lucy and Bard are back in the room singing the zig zag song...LOL...and Bard tells of tales in jail...and makes a pas at Junior...lol...Harper and Junior are having words...and Angela just got what was most likely her first spanking...and it's time for breakfast...smile...now lets go get that girl...very interesting read...love that Bard...Luff Ya Linda xxoo love
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Good banter and humour between the Bard, detectives and company. I have no suggestions, I have been out bird watching, kingfishers to be precise, and next week I am off to Wales, got myself a camera and will be climbing the Brecon Hills, then into the Snowdonia mountain range. I may not post much whilst away, no time. Your intricate plot will soon be unravelling and coming to its climax, I am guessing. Good write as always. Faye
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Good banter and humour between the Bard, detectives and company. I have no suggestions, I have been out bird watching, kingfishers to be precise, and next week I am off to Wales, got myself a camera and will be climbing the Brecon Hills, then into the Snowdonia mountain range. I may not post much whilst away, no time. Your intricate plot will soon be unravelling and coming to its climax, I am guessing. Good write as always. Faye
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I like that Harpster confronted Junior. Great line here:
I'm trying to learn. You don't even know there is something to learn.
And also: Your whole life is a damn lie. Etc.
There was a lot of unnecessary fluff with the zig zag man, but when you got to Junior and his dad, you finally moved the story forward with something that needed to be said.
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I like that Harpster confronted Junior. Great line here:
I'm trying to learn. You don't even know there is something to learn.
And also: Your whole life is a damn lie. Etc.
There was a lot of unnecessary fluff with the zig zag man, but when you got to Junior and his dad, you finally moved the story forward with something that needed to be said.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
Comment from CR Delport
One bunk stands. The Bard sure pulls no punches but it is quite hilarious. Of course junior doesn't think so. This is another great chapter and I spotted no obvious errors.
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One bunk stands. The Bard sure pulls no punches but it is quite hilarious. Of course junior doesn't think so. This is another great chapter and I spotted no obvious errors.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Good to see a new chapter. This is a great chapter with a lot of exchange among the characters. Great reveals of underlying tensions. The Bard in rare form. Wonderful and daring poem. Wow!!! Angela sounding more like the victim as she should. I hope some of that intelligence and spirit still shines through. Excellent work. NG
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Good to see a new chapter. This is a great chapter with a lot of exchange among the characters. Great reveals of underlying tensions. The Bard in rare form. Wonderful and daring poem. Wow!!! Angela sounding more like the victim as she should. I hope some of that intelligence and spirit still shines through. Excellent work. NG
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
Comment from seaglass
This is a needed place to be. Giving us a chance to align with Angela while the others'regroup the troops'. This turns out to be quite timely. Yesterday, FBI released a report that in a massive sweep, they rescued 168 children (In US) from sex slavery groups.
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This is a needed place to be. Giving us a chance to align with Angela while the others'regroup the troops'. This turns out to be quite timely. Yesterday, FBI released a report that in a massive sweep, they rescued 168 children (In US) from sex slavery groups.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Family tradition. It's nothin' like a family dispute. Meanwhile, the poor girl is cooped up back of a school yard, some building. What is the next move? It's one big--happy family. I got in a few chuckles from your Bard poem. Are you sure--it's safe for him to be running around? (HUMOR) I like some of your slang. Genocide, mechanical nigga',biz'ness. Did the Bard really go to jail? So, he was the Zig-Zag man. One with the brains. I tell you one thing ... some people may have all their SPAG in check but I rather read something exciting!! I overlook wee erroes, jump them to be entertained. You are a story teller. Fantastic job! Mikey. wackydo, do loco.
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Family tradition. It's nothin' like a family dispute. Meanwhile, the poor girl is cooped up back of a school yard, some building. What is the next move? It's one big--happy family. I got in a few chuckles from your Bard poem. Are you sure--it's safe for him to be running around? (HUMOR) I like some of your slang. Genocide, mechanical nigga',biz'ness. Did the Bard really go to jail? So, he was the Zig-Zag man. One with the brains. I tell you one thing ... some people may have all their SPAG in check but I rather read something exciting!! I overlook wee erroes, jump them to be entertained. You are a story teller. Fantastic job! Mikey. wackydo, do loco.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
Comment from ravenblack
The zig-zag man- cue the 70's twanga wanga guitar, Mr. Blacksploitation jail flick. Jail is honest racism, all Rollin' with their crew. The trick is to still see it on the outside. Hope you don't get any grief for the poem. I see what you were doin'. Just please, no raps by Ghandi G.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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The zig-zag man- cue the 70's twanga wanga guitar, Mr. Blacksploitation jail flick. Jail is honest racism, all Rollin' with their crew. The trick is to still see it on the outside. Hope you don't get any grief for the poem. I see what you were doin'. Just please, no raps by Ghandi G.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Damn! I had a good one too... Nobody sees this but my few regulars. I had to put it somewhere, someday. When I was in jail I had to hang out with Nazis. They wanted me to be their leader. I didn't mention my opinion of them. I was surprised I was able to keep my big mouth shut. Hahaha. mikey
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Well, back in my drunk devil-May-care days I ran across a bunch of these Aryan yahoos. One of them tried to hit on my friend's girlfriend by showing her the swastika tattooed on his chest. When she told me what happened, of course I had to go over there and open my mouth (I was convinced my mouth was invincible) and found myself surrounded by five skinheads. Their leader held them back, told his story, about his prison yard experiences, the races sticking together. I told him I understood where he was coming from due to his experiences, but did not agree with him at all. He continued to talk, my friends were scared shirtless as I continued to argue with him. The conversation ended, I got up to go, turned to the guy and told him that I have a girlfriend who is black. Miraculously, we walked out without incident. And the mouth lived on.
