Somebody Thinks
a rhyming poem in mixed meter153 total reviews
Comment from zanya
The enjambment conveys a sense of curiousity , a stream -of-consciousness technique, in a world where wonders abound - great pic
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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The enjambment conveys a sense of curiousity , a stream -of-consciousness technique, in a world where wonders abound - great pic
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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zanya, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from costellsgirl33
I live this poem! It is so very sweet and easy flowing. I feel good poem really. Which are my favorite kind! Great job as always my friend
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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I live this poem! It is so very sweet and easy flowing. I feel good poem really. Which are my favorite kind! Great job as always my friend
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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costellsgirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are more than welcome Brooke!
Arnetta
Comment from victor 66
I sometimes think that children are angels who later become earthbound when they mature. They are used to being around someone who has all the answers, and are surprised when you do not. Lovely poem. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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I sometimes think that children are angels who later become earthbound when they mature. They are used to being around someone who has all the answers, and are surprised when you do not. Lovely poem. Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Victor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome, Brooke.
Comment from Amsterdam
I haven't yet learned why skies are blue
(reflection of the ocean )
or where the waves are rolling to,
(where ever the moon takes them )
but somebody thinks I ought to know,
and everyone says, "I told you so."
Nobody's shared why rivers bend
(Ground Rocks are in the way)
or where I'll find the rainbow's end,
( still looking my self )
or where a falling star might go,
( He went to you... you know, the pictures you chose)
but somebody thinks I ought to know.
lols...
needed the laugh.
am
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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I haven't yet learned why skies are blue
(reflection of the ocean )
or where the waves are rolling to,
(where ever the moon takes them )
but somebody thinks I ought to know,
and everyone says, "I told you so."
Nobody's shared why rivers bend
(Ground Rocks are in the way)
or where I'll find the rainbow's end,
( still looking my self )
or where a falling star might go,
( He went to you... you know, the pictures you chose)
but somebody thinks I ought to know.
lols...
needed the laugh.
am
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Am, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from The Death
Hi, Brooke.
Whimsical and cute! It is full of those innocent thoughts and questions which may pop up in any child's mind.
The opening lines are lovely:
Somebody thinks I ought to know
why bubbles burst and breezes blow,
but nobody seems to want to tell
what somebody claims to know so well.
The last line made me chuckle. It slightly hints at the tendency of parents to expect too much from their kids. Excellent alliteration of B and consonance of S sounds.
The refrain line is very effective in highlighting the message. You've made excellent use of vivid images which children found fascinating.
Excellent rhyming and consistent rhythm make it an enjoyable read. It creates such a cheerful mood.
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Hi, Brooke.
Whimsical and cute! It is full of those innocent thoughts and questions which may pop up in any child's mind.
The opening lines are lovely:
Somebody thinks I ought to know
why bubbles burst and breezes blow,
but nobody seems to want to tell
what somebody claims to know so well.
The last line made me chuckle. It slightly hints at the tendency of parents to expect too much from their kids. Excellent alliteration of B and consonance of S sounds.
The refrain line is very effective in highlighting the message. You've made excellent use of vivid images which children found fascinating.
Excellent rhyming and consistent rhythm make it an enjoyable read. It creates such a cheerful mood.
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Anupam, for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Great poem capturing the never ending questions from children. The endless "why's" are most often humorous, sometimes tedious! Sawyer is a really cute kid. I'm sure he is the apple of your eye.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Great poem capturing the never ending questions from children. The endless "why's" are most often humorous, sometimes tedious! Sawyer is a really cute kid. I'm sure he is the apple of your eye.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Green Lake Girl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from sibhus
Awe, this is perfect. Great way o respond to kids million questions in one breath. You caught that why that ask and when you reply it's always another why. This was so much fun, wonderful poem, Brooke.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Awe, this is perfect. Great way o respond to kids million questions in one breath. You caught that why that ask and when you reply it's always another why. This was so much fun, wonderful poem, Brooke.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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sibhus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Acquired Taste
Brooke - another lovely poem for Sawyer. You know you must be the lead angel and explain to him the greatness of God that answers all he will ever question.
Very nice. AT=/
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Brooke - another lovely poem for Sawyer. You know you must be the lead angel and explain to him the greatness of God that answers all he will ever question.
Very nice. AT=/
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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AT, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Petriesan
do dairies glow?
why they sky is blue...what I told my daughter is that God made them blue to match her eyes
lovely piece, all the way. Typical. Envy fills me
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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do dairies glow?
why they sky is blue...what I told my daughter is that God made them blue to match her eyes
lovely piece, all the way. Typical. Envy fills me
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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What a sweet father you are :-) Thanks so much, Petriesan :-) Brooke
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is very cute. I get this, as a mother. I get this as child care provider. All the whys? In a child's life is amazing and we should learn from them.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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This is very cute. I get this, as a mother. I get this as child care provider. All the whys? In a child's life is amazing and we should learn from them.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Bobby Jo. I love the natural and neverending curiosity of children :-) Brooke
