Somebody Thinks
a rhyming poem in mixed meter153 total reviews
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with tell/well...say/way. Good alliteration with bubbles/burst...breezes/blow...where/waves. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with tell/well...say/way. Good alliteration with bubbles/burst...breezes/blow...where/waves. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
You ought to know, but I don't think Sawyer should yet. (*snickering*). As usual, I am completely charmed. I do hope you are publishing, as I know these would make a beautiful keepsake, and you must have reams of book by now. Seriously, my friend, your wonderful poetry deserves to be housed in a place everyone can enjoy. I can see your books becoming household treasures for many families...
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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You ought to know, but I don't think Sawyer should yet. (*snickering*). As usual, I am completely charmed. I do hope you are publishing, as I know these would make a beautiful keepsake, and you must have reams of book by now. Seriously, my friend, your wonderful poetry deserves to be housed in a place everyone can enjoy. I can see your books becoming household treasures for many families...
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much :-) You are so wonderfully encouraging. Brooke
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You're welcome, but it's so true - I HOPE you are publishing...!
Comment from Delahay
This poem seems to me to be someone learning that, once a child learns to talk, they will ask "Why?" about everything. We find ourselves having to make up something look it up, or try to get them to accept "I don't know".
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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This poem seems to me to be someone learning that, once a child learns to talk, they will ask "Why?" about everything. We find ourselves having to make up something look it up, or try to get them to accept "I don't know".
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Ward, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from catch22
Hi Brooke, this is a very cute poem about when little children start the "why" game. I did it with my father, and he always had an answer from physics that was above my six year old head. I did trip on the following line:
I haven't yet learned why skies are blue
I would suggest getting rid of yet. I pronounce "haven't" as 2 syllables so "yet" falls on a stressed syllable in my reading--unless you're pronouncing haven't as one syllable...
Adorable picture and poem pairing.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke, this is a very cute poem about when little children start the "why" game. I did it with my father, and he always had an answer from physics that was above my six year old head. I did trip on the following line:
I haven't yet learned why skies are blue
I would suggest getting rid of yet. I pronounce "haven't" as 2 syllables so "yet" falls on a stressed syllable in my reading--unless you're pronouncing haven't as one syllable...
Adorable picture and poem pairing.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Gail, thank you for your feedback. No, I also say have ent as two syllables, but this is mixed meter, so you have to allow it to read naturally. It has good flow for me by doing that.
i HAV ent yet LEARNED why SKIES are BLUE Brooke
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Ahh, thank you for the clarification. Is that an anapestic foot in after the iamb?
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yep dadaDUM
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi,:-) Brooke,
"Someone Thinks" is a truly excellent poem beautifully illustrating the curiosity of a young child and puzzlement that no one was telling why all of these things were. Just
another case of being failed by grown ups. It is a very well crafted poem with with excellent figurative language and imagery (why fairies glow) meter and good rhyme.
Preston
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Hi,:-) Brooke,
"Someone Thinks" is a truly excellent poem beautifully illustrating the curiosity of a young child and puzzlement that no one was telling why all of these things were. Just
another case of being failed by grown ups. It is a very well crafted poem with with excellent figurative language and imagery (why fairies glow) meter and good rhyme.
Preston
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Preston :-) Brooke
Comment from paulah60
I don't know your intentions behind this one, Brooke, but there seems to be an unrealistic push these days in terms of a child's milestones, and a fierce competitiveness that has authority over a modern young mum's psyche: children being sent to speech therapy because they 'should' be saying more at a particular age etc etc. Children are just not allowed to be children!
We'd do well to just rejoice in their sense of wonder about all things WITHOUT their need to know why. They'll start asking soon enough with their endless questions!
Yet again, another important message conveyed.
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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I don't know your intentions behind this one, Brooke, but there seems to be an unrealistic push these days in terms of a child's milestones, and a fierce competitiveness that has authority over a modern young mum's psyche: children being sent to speech therapy because they 'should' be saying more at a particular age etc etc. Children are just not allowed to be children!
We'd do well to just rejoice in their sense of wonder about all things WITHOUT their need to know why. They'll start asking soon enough with their endless questions!
Yet again, another important message conveyed.
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Paula. Yes, toddler age is an age to rejoice in whatever a child is learning and enjoying, not a time to be holding standards up to him as we push the child to know as much as the kid next door does. :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
When children start their questioning, it seems cute at first, but sometimes they can be endless. I remember saying, "Well, Suzy, you ought to know by . . ."
I really like how you weaved your refrain into every stanza.
The mysteries of life weren't solved, Brooke, but you gave us a great read.
Rod
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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When children start their questioning, it seems cute at first, but sometimes they can be endless. I remember saying, "Well, Suzy, you ought to know by . . ."
I really like how you weaved your refrain into every stanza.
The mysteries of life weren't solved, Brooke, but you gave us a great read.
Rod
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Rod :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
I assume Sawyer is asking all kinds of questions that he thinks you should know the answer to. What a wonderful picture of him. Love that smile. Your poem is wonderful, as always. Hugs. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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I assume Sawyer is asking all kinds of questions that he thinks you should know the answer to. What a wonderful picture of him. Love that smile. Your poem is wonderful, as always. Hugs. Miss Sally
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
Wonderful poem , written in perfect style , great fun
to read. Another terrific picture from Miranda of our
handsome Sawyer, great expression in this one. Pili
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Wonderful poem , written in perfect style , great fun
to read. Another terrific picture from Miranda of our
handsome Sawyer, great expression in this one. Pili
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your generous and encouraging review :-) He was really delighted with himself for being able to disassemble the umbrella, so she took full advantage of his good mood. Brooke
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So wonderful !!!! ;:--). Pili
Comment from maggieadams
How delightful. I liked following the 'bouncing know', finding which line it would appear. The questions kids want answered, and the fact that they believe grandma's have all the answers is priceless. As always, the rhyme and meter work to create a joyous poem.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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How delightful. I liked following the 'bouncing know', finding which line it would appear. The questions kids want answered, and the fact that they believe grandma's have all the answers is priceless. As always, the rhyme and meter work to create a joyous poem.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Maggie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
