Somebody Thinks
a rhyming poem in mixed meter153 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
aaawww. so very cute:) children have so many questions and their curious minds dive into motion when asking for example why the sky is blue. they have more questions than i have answers:)
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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aaawww. so very cute:) children have so many questions and their curious minds dive into motion when asking for example why the sky is blue. they have more questions than i have answers:)
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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rebekka, thanks so very much :-) I appreciate your generous rating and thoughtful comments. Brooke
Comment from Eternal Muse
He has grown, our little boy! But still has this charming smile which is his signature.
I don't think I ever wrote a poem in a mixed meter. Here it works very well because it is basically written from the perspective of a child.
Great imagery, as always, Brooke.
Nobody's shared why rivers bend
or where I'll find the rainbow's end,
or where a falling star might go,
but somebody thinks I ought to know.
Loved the visuals here.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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He has grown, our little boy! But still has this charming smile which is his signature.
I don't think I ever wrote a poem in a mixed meter. Here it works very well because it is basically written from the perspective of a child.
Great imagery, as always, Brooke.
Nobody's shared why rivers bend
or where I'll find the rainbow's end,
or where a falling star might go,
but somebody thinks I ought to know.
Loved the visuals here.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Yelena, thank you so much. Yes, he just keeps growing and growing. I have a great picture from this same session of him actually carrying that big old umbrella around his yard. LOL Brooke
Comment from marijmd
My favorite line - love all the alliteration - fun to read out loud!
why bubbles burst and breezes blow,
Nice pace and meter!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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My favorite line - love all the alliteration - fun to read out loud!
why bubbles burst and breezes blow,
Nice pace and meter!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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marijmd, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sueswrite
What a great story subject and the photo attached fits so perfectly! Just the simple innocent thoughts of a happy, curious child written precisely as one would expect! Great job and best wishes to you!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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What a great story subject and the photo attached fits so perfectly! Just the simple innocent thoughts of a happy, curious child written precisely as one would expect! Great job and best wishes to you!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Sueswrite, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
Ah, look at that cute little face. That smile and laugh can light up the darkest of days. This is very well written and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Ah, look at that cute little face. That smile and laugh can light up the darkest of days. This is very well written and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Spitfire
Reading between the lines I see that sometimes parents expect too much of their children. It's the making of many TV dramas and movies too. Love Sawyer's expression of delight at learning a new skill.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Reading between the lines I see that sometimes parents expect too much of their children. It's the making of many TV dramas and movies too. Love Sawyer's expression of delight at learning a new skill.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Spitfire :-) Brooke
Comment from reconciled
but why...? and how come Grandma...? Well ....I don't know....pfff.....yes you do.....lol ahh ...I know....you love that boy.....fantastic read No One. love michael
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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but why...? and how come Grandma...? Well ....I don't know....pfff.....yes you do.....lol ahh ...I know....you love that boy.....fantastic read No One. love michael
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Michael, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Zue65
Your poem captured the stage in a child's life when he is exploring the things around him, confirming what he sees and feels against precepts and concepts he is still trying to discover. The lines perfectly portrayed that eternal search and the crisis that we all went through when we are growing up like Sawyer. I enjoyed your poem Brooke. God bless.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Your poem captured the stage in a child's life when he is exploring the things around him, confirming what he sees and feels against precepts and concepts he is still trying to discover. The lines perfectly portrayed that eternal search and the crisis that we all went through when we are growing up like Sawyer. I enjoyed your poem Brooke. God bless.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Nassus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
Sawyer certainly does appear tickled--it's great fun to feel mastery! I relished your capturing the child's perception of the world around him, with your use of repeats and varied rhythms plus rhymed couplets in these quatrains. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Sawyer certainly does appear tickled--it's great fun to feel mastery! I relished your capturing the child's perception of the world around him, with your use of repeats and varied rhythms plus rhymed couplets in these quatrains. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Joan, thank you so much. Yep, he loves that feeling of mastery, and at this age, there is so so much to master :-) Brooke
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Cute poem, Brooke. I love the umbrella story. Seems that boys have a passion for taking things apart, not so much for putting them back together it seems. Thanks for sharing this. It sure brings back memories, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Cute poem, Brooke. I love the umbrella story. Seems that boys have a passion for taking things apart, not so much for putting them back together it seems. Thanks for sharing this. It sure brings back memories, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
