Should Droughts Deplete the Land
rhyming quatrains in 6//6/8/6129 total reviews
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Brooke,
A scary poetic description of the end of time! But Sawyer doesn't appear to be worried.
I bought a camera some years ago that takes four separate pictures on a single 35mm frame. But I'm all digital now.
Ron x
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
A scary poetic description of the end of time! But Sawyer doesn't appear to be worried.
I bought a camera some years ago that takes four separate pictures on a single 35mm frame. But I'm all digital now.
Ron x
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Ron, thank you so much :-) Miranda uses an app to create this effect
Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
Brooke, I can't argue about the smile. But it's
Sawyer's expression of wonderment that resonates
the most with me. 'Course, I ain't his granny.
And you always manage to put things in such unassailable terms. Stars. Dawns. Oceans.
Hey, leave something for the rest of us.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Brooke, I can't argue about the smile. But it's
Sawyer's expression of wonderment that resonates
the most with me. 'Course, I ain't his granny.
And you always manage to put things in such unassailable terms. Stars. Dawns. Oceans.
Hey, leave something for the rest of us.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Lee. If I had to choose among his many expressions, I would choose the impish grin ones. I love the traditional smile that one uses for a portrait, but I love even more the little half smiles and the mischievous looks :-) I so appreciate your generous rating, too :-) Brooke
Comment from JB Lynn
Some serious subjects you broach in this poem, but there is still that enduring theme of hope you lace in all your work. Sometimes I think your poems do for us what Sawyer's smile does for you.
My absolute favorite part was the last stanza. The rhythm just popped for me! And I liked the contrast between "bemoan" and "joy" - two words that I don't think are used very often. This was a terrific way to freshen your piece and make it uniquely yours.
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Some serious subjects you broach in this poem, but there is still that enduring theme of hope you lace in all your work. Sometimes I think your poems do for us what Sawyer's smile does for you.
My absolute favorite part was the last stanza. The rhythm just popped for me! And I liked the contrast between "bemoan" and "joy" - two words that I don't think are used very often. This was a terrific way to freshen your piece and make it uniquely yours.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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JB, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
A little different from what you normally produce Brooke, but it still manages to get back to the thing that " rattles your keys" a lovely easily flowing and rhythmic journey the rhyme is your usual good quality abcb, the meter even! Good one! Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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A little different from what you normally produce Brooke, but it still manages to get back to the thing that " rattles your keys" a lovely easily flowing and rhythmic journey the rhyme is your usual good quality abcb, the meter even! Good one! Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
Beautiful! Such a loving tribute. The rhyming quatrains are done perfectly and the alliterations are great. You sure know how to turn a phrase. Great job!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Beautiful! Such a loving tribute. The rhyming quatrains are done perfectly and the alliterations are great. You sure know how to turn a phrase. Great job!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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RYME4U, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
I see no end to your positive poetic thoughts. You transform simple words to make those that read them smile. This is a gift you have been given and share it with us all here. This was just a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read... John
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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I see no end to your positive poetic thoughts. You transform simple words to make those that read them smile. This is a gift you have been given and share it with us all here. This was just a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read... John
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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John, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh how cute. I am with you. Sawyer's smile could light up the entire word. He is so precious. I enjoyed reading your wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Oh how cute. I am with you. Sawyer's smile could light up the entire word. He is so precious. I enjoyed reading your wonderful poem.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Barbara :-) Here's a new story for you. Sawyer was being naughty, doing his mom's least favorite thing, which is deliberately dribbling water from his sippy cup. She has spoken to him about this several times. So she started to issue her ultimatum, "Sawyer, if you spit one more time..." and at that point he interrupted her by saying rather loudly "take away my sippy cup right now!" and then he handed it to her. LOL Brooke
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Oh my, another ornery male. I raised four, but they're precious and cute when they do it.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I adore the sentiment in this one, Brooke. Some things - usually those without dollar signs attached - are priceless!
You skill at rhyming always impresses me. It's wonderful.
I like the examples you chose, and particularly love the line about time not resuming - very profound.
Lovely photos of Sawyer reacting to that amazing word! LOL!
Av
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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I adore the sentiment in this one, Brooke. Some things - usually those without dollar signs attached - are priceless!
You skill at rhyming always impresses me. It's wonderful.
I like the examples you chose, and particularly love the line about time not resuming - very profound.
Lovely photos of Sawyer reacting to that amazing word! LOL!
Av
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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thank you so much, Av - that line is my favorite, the one I'm proudest of, and you're the only person to mention it so far :-) Brooke
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Comment from rod007
Your deep love for Sawyer is reflected magnificently in this precious poem. Nothing, and you put eloquently, that happens in the natural world will cast any shadow or blight on your love for the little boy. Well done, Brooke.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Your deep love for Sawyer is reflected magnificently in this precious poem. Nothing, and you put eloquently, that happens in the natural world will cast any shadow or blight on your love for the little boy. Well done, Brooke.
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
