Should Droughts Deplete the Land
rhyming quatrains in 6//6/8/6129 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem really would make me feel good if I knew that someone put so much value in my face. This will be warmly received.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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This poem really would make me feel good if I knew that someone put so much value in my face. This will be warmly received.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
An interesting way of responding to Armageddon or something like it. I think a child would understand what you're trying to say to him because of the commonplace things he can relate to like roses, sun, stars, and clocks.
Also, this becomes a lovely love poem, too, as a result of your final stanza.
A lovely poem to share on a Sunday morn, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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An interesting way of responding to Armageddon or something like it. I think a child would understand what you're trying to say to him because of the commonplace things he can relate to like roses, sun, stars, and clocks.
Also, this becomes a lovely love poem, too, as a result of your final stanza.
A lovely poem to share on a Sunday morn, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Rod, for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. I am on holiday so I will be reviewing selected pieces of writing. I don't want to spend my holiday on FanStory, but I want to keep in touch.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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This is yet another beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. I am on holiday so I will be reviewing selected pieces of writing. I don't want to spend my holiday on FanStory, but I want to keep in touch.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Tomes, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Have a great holiday! Brooke
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Same to you
Comment from robina1978
I loved the photo's most. But your poem is a nice form and very up -to -date. About one of nature's disasters: droughts. All will increase they say.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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I loved the photo's most. But your poem is a nice form and very up -to -date. About one of nature's disasters: droughts. All will increase they say.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, Ine. I always like the photos most. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Eric1
A gorgeous poem that flows freely from the lips and the page, I am assuming this was written about the lovely little boy above, if not it should have been!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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A gorgeous poem that flows freely from the lips and the page, I am assuming this was written about the lovely little boy above, if not it should have been!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Eric, thank you so much :-) Yes, Sawyer inspired the poem. Brooke
Comment from Sonjalee
This is iambic meter, right? It flows beautifully What do you call your rhyming scheme:Land and dawn do not rhyme but sea and me rhyme. Second stanza boom and resume rhyme but night and hours do not
Third stanza fate and joy do not rhyme but revile and smile do . What is that rhyming called?
The meaning of the poem is beautiful and its sentiments are very special. wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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This is iambic meter, right? It flows beautifully What do you call your rhyming scheme:Land and dawn do not rhyme but sea and me rhyme. Second stanza boom and resume rhyme but night and hours do not
Third stanza fate and joy do not rhyme but revile and smile do . What is that rhyming called?
The meaning of the poem is beautiful and its sentiments are very special. wonderful poem.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Sonja, thank you, my friend. Yes, it is iambic meter. The rhyme scheme is called abcb rhyming, where only the second and fourth lines rhyme. Brooke :-)
Comment from acerisestory
So very nice, Brooke! I know that you are referring to Sawyer and yet we all feel that a smile from someone can make a difference in our day (or life, for that matter). Your rhyming is perfect :) Thanks for sharing yet another uplifting message! Alana
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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So very nice, Brooke! I know that you are referring to Sawyer and yet we all feel that a smile from someone can make a difference in our day (or life, for that matter). Your rhyming is perfect :) Thanks for sharing yet another uplifting message! Alana
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Alana, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
Simply graceful. He must be the most photographed little boy in his sand box club. You always put things in perspective for and remind us of what is truly important. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Simply graceful. He must be the most photographed little boy in his sand box club. You always put things in perspective for and remind us of what is truly important. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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lancellot, thank you - I think it's a safe bet about being most photographed and you only ever get to see the tip of the iceberg. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Debbie
That is some word to spell supercalifragilisticexpialidocious it's enough to make any one smile.
Nice flow, reads real smooth, thank you for the nice smile and the great picture of Sawyer and all his smiles!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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That is some word to spell supercalifragilisticexpialidocious it's enough to make any one smile.
Nice flow, reads real smooth, thank you for the nice smile and the great picture of Sawyer and all his smiles!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Angel Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A lovely poem in perfect meter and a great way of saying that no matter what may happen, you wont bemoan the situation because you had 'his' smile. A lovely tribute poem. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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A lovely poem in perfect meter and a great way of saying that no matter what may happen, you wont bemoan the situation because you had 'his' smile. A lovely tribute poem. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
