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The Caterpillar Has to Crawl

a quatern with modified repeating lines

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Comment from Ben Colder
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I can see Sawyer watching the worm and trying to make out what it is. One of mine one time followed behind a beetle with his finger and got stung. He never tried that again. Well done Brooke.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    Ben, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from James Dooney
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Hi there Brooke. Once again you have done a good job here with this one. I just love the way you rhyme it. I feel that it really gives this some solid foundation. Well done !

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    James, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
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I enjoyed your caterpillar poem very much, Brooke. It's nice to read a poem focusing on the caterpillar instead of the butterfly. I love the last verse because we all have to do some creeping before we find our calling.
Smiles,
Karyn : )

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    Karyn, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
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Cute! perfect AABB rhyme.. You have a treasure trove of kiddies poems Brooke .."THE LITTLE BOOK OF ADEWPEARLERS"..is looking closer everyday!

xxdip

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    Dip, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from words
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What a smile-inducing tale this is, Brooke.

A good lesson for us all .... Yup, caterpillar first, then ... the butterfly.

In my own life, I seem to switch back and forth ... the transition has not yet become permanent. LOL And when I am in the caterpillar stage, I am grateful for this fact.

Hugs, d

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    Diane, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
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A quatern. Yeahsure. I think you are making these things up as you go. Kidding. That is a lean, clean, mean little poem.
Sort of what I've come to expect from this writer.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    Thank you, LIJ, for your thoughtful review :-) The quatern is actually one of the old French classic forms, not one of those dozens of forms members are forever making up :-) Brooke
Comment from catch22
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Hi Brooke, what a skillfully written quatern. I love caterpillars and the idea of metamorphosis. The funny thing is that oftentimes, the process of crawling is what humbles us into becoming someone beautiful and radiant. It's a strange thing. We all need to start from our foundation and learn to crawl if we want to achieve real growth and change. I don't need to tell you that the refrain line works well and is very worth repeating--we just discussed this very idea:) Very nicely penned.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    Gail, thank you so much for this thoughtful response to my quatern :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
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The caterpillar is a fine example of how one slave away his life for freedom at the end. As usual your poem is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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My error, Brooke. I've updated it.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    Thank you so much, Charlie, for your positive comments. Did you mean the 4 rating?? Brooke
reply by c_lucas on 21-Jun-2014
    My error, Brooke. Charlie
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    Thanks, Charlie :-)
Comment from RYME4U
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Very well done. I love the rhythm of the quatern and the rhyming words you used. The caterpillar picture is a perfect match. You describe the little fuzzy worm quite well. Great job!

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
    RYME4U, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from TAB_that's me
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They crawl and crawl and crawl and then someone runs over them or steps on them but that is not very happy thoughts like the ones you have written about in this very cute children's poem.
Teresa

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 Comment Written 20-Jun-2014

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
    Gee, there is a downward turn. LOL Maybe I'll entitle my next bug poem Splat! ;-) Thanks so much for the laugh and the review, Teresa :-) Brooke
reply by TAB_that's me on 20-Jun-2014
    LOL!