The Caterpillar Has to Crawl
a quatern with modified repeating lines141 total reviews
Comment from TOMORAL
A fine and dandy story about the miracle of a caterpillar. Love the rhythm, rhyme and reason of it all. Perfection done, your grandson is mighty lucky to have such a Nana. Blessings, Lynn
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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A fine and dandy story about the miracle of a caterpillar. Love the rhythm, rhyme and reason of it all. Perfection done, your grandson is mighty lucky to have such a Nana. Blessings, Lynn
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Tomoral, for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Cajungirl
Bravo, Brooke, my grandchild agreed, this is well worth six-stars. I think caterpillars are beautiful little creatures. Bless you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Bravo, Brooke, my grandchild agreed, this is well worth six-stars. I think caterpillars are beautiful little creatures. Bless you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Cajungirl, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your encouragement and that of your grandchild :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke, and this particular poem you show and manifest the knowledge, skill and experience needed for success in a particular field or endeavors such as poetry. Since I have known you your poems are exceptional throughout. In this particular poem describing Caterpillar in ways that are expressive and descriptively exceptional. Your metering and tempo are perfect And this in turn helps the poem flows through the verses so clearly and smoothly. Your rhyming is indeed neither force nor labored and helps with the rhythm as it smoothly to say and attaches to the lines in a way that helps the rhythm. I cannot see any suggestions on my part to add to this perfect writing. Thank you for sharing them posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones. Wishing you and yours the happiest of days.
Alex
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Brooke, and this particular poem you show and manifest the knowledge, skill and experience needed for success in a particular field or endeavors such as poetry. Since I have known you your poems are exceptional throughout. In this particular poem describing Caterpillar in ways that are expressive and descriptively exceptional. Your metering and tempo are perfect And this in turn helps the poem flows through the verses so clearly and smoothly. Your rhyming is indeed neither force nor labored and helps with the rhythm as it smoothly to say and attaches to the lines in a way that helps the rhythm. I cannot see any suggestions on my part to add to this perfect writing. Thank you for sharing them posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones. Wishing you and yours the happiest of days.
Alex
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Alex, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
Each time I read one of your poems, Brooke, I am uplifted! This is another really fun and so very well-written poem. It's for children, I believe, but is so enjoyable for us adults. Of course, your alliteration is amazing and your rhyming is right on. Thank you for sharing! Alana
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Each time I read one of your poems, Brooke, I am uplifted! This is another really fun and so very well-written poem. It's for children, I believe, but is so enjoyable for us adults. Of course, your alliteration is amazing and your rhyming is right on. Thank you for sharing! Alana
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Alana, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
Another delight, your poems are so very nice to read! Thank you for sharing, this would be such a good lesson, accomplish one thing before you try the next step! What a lovely addition to a child's book this would be!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Another delight, your poems are so very nice to read! Thank you for sharing, this would be such a good lesson, accomplish one thing before you try the next step! What a lovely addition to a child's book this would be!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Bina, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
Nice use of repetition Brooke! This was one of those that could be used in an illustrated children's book! Your usual immaculate job with this one, I always draw example from your ease of flow and meter! Your rhyming ain't Haifa bad either! Well done, Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Nice use of repetition Brooke! This was one of those that could be used in an illustrated children's book! Your usual immaculate job with this one, I always draw example from your ease of flow and meter! Your rhyming ain't Haifa bad either! Well done, Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from paulah60
A very nice analogy for mastering a basic skill before being able to learn more complex things (the idiom: 'you need to learn to crawl before you can walk'). And, a very effective way of teaching children this concept (even as it doesn't ameliorate the frustration in very young children as they acquire new skills).
Well done, Brooke!
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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A very nice analogy for mastering a basic skill before being able to learn more complex things (the idiom: 'you need to learn to crawl before you can walk'). And, a very effective way of teaching children this concept (even as it doesn't ameliorate the frustration in very young children as they acquire new skills).
Well done, Brooke!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Thank you for your insightful reading of this poem, Paula :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
Brooke, this is one of your best! It does a superb job of describing the caterpillar throughout the poem and even alludes to what it will become.
The imagery is picture-perfect for a youngster. So easy to see him crawling (or "wriggling") on plain or hill, tree or fruit. And you know how I am not a fan of couplets, but all of these are perfect! As is your meter. Well done, my friend!
Rod
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Brooke, this is one of your best! It does a superb job of describing the caterpillar throughout the poem and even alludes to what it will become.
The imagery is picture-perfect for a youngster. So easy to see him crawling (or "wriggling") on plain or hill, tree or fruit. And you know how I am not a fan of couplets, but all of these are perfect! As is your meter. Well done, my friend!
Rod
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much for your generous review, Rod. Yeah, if you look through my portfolio you'll see I am not a frequent user of couplets, but when writing for kids they seem more appropriate than otherwise :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Some say the happiest days of its life are spent crawling, in direct contact with the earth. A quatern must be quatrains written to some specific rhyming order. yours, as always, provides excellent reading and a pleasant message. Kenny
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Some say the happiest days of its life are spent crawling, in direct contact with the earth. A quatern must be quatrains written to some specific rhyming order. yours, as always, provides excellent reading and a pleasant message. Kenny
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Kenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
Brooke, what's wrong with me? Have I become a squishy s'more? I've spent my sixes like a a coed with an allowance. The shame.
I love everything about this poem. Your language always inspires me. And this message even inspires the jaded likes of me.
I see Sawyer's apple cheeks and inquisitive eyes, and I say, 'Yeah, he looks like me.' Okay, I'm selectively myopic.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Brooke, what's wrong with me? Have I become a squishy s'more? I've spent my sixes like a a coed with an allowance. The shame.
I love everything about this poem. Your language always inspires me. And this message even inspires the jaded likes of me.
I see Sawyer's apple cheeks and inquisitive eyes, and I say, 'Yeah, he looks like me.' Okay, I'm selectively myopic.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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LOL Thank you, my friend. Lee, you're one of the only writers I know who can make a review like a hilarious mini short story. Brooke :-)
