Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Very cute lyrics and rather super picture. The rhymes are wonderful and it sings along. Great use of language and a most enjoyable read as always. Faye

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Faye, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Andrewajgblue

Excellent

Once again a lovely poem, ideal for reading to children, your rhyme was perfect and I loved the "a woolly version of the worm " a wonderful line, it made me smile , I really enjoyed it,
Andrew

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Andrew, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Shirley B

Exceptional

Dear Brooke, What a cute poem. I know I have probably asked this before and my memory has failed me again. Have you written a children book? You need too. You are so good. Sawyer would love it as he gets older. You are such an inspiration to me. Great job, Shirley

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Shirley, thank you so very much :-) I appreciate your encouragement. Brooke

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

A good simple hypothesis which is altogether a proven one. Lovey little lines presented with a good poetic quality within a good aabb structure.
Good end rhymes with good alliteration involved.
Good write,
best wishes,
RGstar

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

RG, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Sanku

Exceptional

The caterpillar has to crawl before it can become a butterfly and flit around the flowers.A period of struggle is mandatory before we can have an easy life. You manage to give information as well as advice to kids through this beautifully crafted poem .

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Sanku, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Just Pete

Exceptional

Another of your wonderful children's poems that would serve so well in an alphabet book.

"The caterpillar learns to crawl
because it cannot fly at all -
it cannot fly, but it can squirm,
a woolly version of the worm..."

A really brilliant stanza. Pete.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Pete, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from reconciled

Excellent

Boy...this catapillar craps for the birds....I want to be a butterfly......someone save my life tonight ....sugar bear....lol...ahhh...alright....lets say goodnight Elton.....love you Michael

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thanks for the laughs and the review, Michael :-) Brooke

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

I once found an 8 inch caterpillar in our garden. I wish I could see that butterfly. I love butterflies :) This is very well written.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

CR, thank you so much :-) Eight inches, now that is one helluva bug! LOL :-) Brooke

Comment from TFBN

Excellent

Very clever poem. Good rhyme scheme. A fun poem to read. Wonder how you chose the theme though. Unique. Talks about the caterpillar more than the butterfly. Nice!

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

TFBN, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Great picture!
Great rhyming and flow. Squirm and worm--good one!
Great alliteration, like C and W in first stanza.

Superb phonetics in the phrasing here:

If such a creature wants to reach
the crispest pear or plumpest peach,

Fun lines to read aloud.

*optional suggestion:
It may become a butterfly(,)
who navigates the spacious sky,

Spacious sky--nice sound.

Good ending:
but long before it finds its call,
the caterpillar has to crawl.

Enjoyed this playful write.

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

thank you, rama devi, for your thoughtful feedback. Brooke

reply by rama devi on 21-Jun-2014

My pleasure, dear B. Blessings, rd