The Caterpillar Has to Crawl
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Comment from lappmellott
Well, your poem certainly gave me something to think about. I just think of a caterpillar as a pesky little insect. Great job and I love the picture.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Well, your poem certainly gave me something to think about. I just think of a caterpillar as a pesky little insect. Great job and I love the picture.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, lappmellott :-) Brooke
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke, A poem filled with great imagery and adventure. I could just see that little caterpillar working so hard to climb the pear tree. I especially liked:
It may become a butterfly
who navigates the spacious sky,
but long before it finds its call,
the caterpillar has to crawl.
(Just like us people)
A fun poem and a life lesson to recall. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke, A poem filled with great imagery and adventure. I could just see that little caterpillar working so hard to climb the pear tree. I especially liked:
It may become a butterfly
who navigates the spacious sky,
but long before it finds its call,
the caterpillar has to crawl.
(Just like us people)
A fun poem and a life lesson to recall. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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LateBloomer, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from sibhus
Poor littl guy, but yet they are so intresting to watch as they hump along. At times it almost seems ashame that they lose their fuzzy selfs to become butterflies. This a charming look at the world of the caterpillar through rhyme. Good stuff there, Brooke.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Poor littl guy, but yet they are so intresting to watch as they hump along. At times it almost seems ashame that they lose their fuzzy selfs to become butterflies. This a charming look at the world of the caterpillar through rhyme. Good stuff there, Brooke.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Thank you, sibhus, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from rod007
i think the metaphor in this piece is astounding, and my reading of it is that we all have to crawl. This is the test, the struggle before we can reach that beauty that is the call of our faith, and the unity with God and our flight like the butterfly into his heaven. Well done, Brooke.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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i think the metaphor in this piece is astounding, and my reading of it is that we all have to crawl. This is the test, the struggle before we can reach that beauty that is the call of our faith, and the unity with God and our flight like the butterfly into his heaven. Well done, Brooke.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
I loved the assonance of K sounding words with, "caterpillars...crawl, creature, crispest and call. I also appreciated the theme of learning to crawl before flight is achieved. We all struggle with the learning process in hopes of developing into a better person, but we all start at the bottom, just the same. Beautiful rhyme and solid meter enhance the write, well done. All my best, Bill
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Hello Brooke,
I loved the assonance of K sounding words with, "caterpillars...crawl, creature, crispest and call. I also appreciated the theme of learning to crawl before flight is achieved. We all struggle with the learning process in hopes of developing into a better person, but we all start at the bottom, just the same. Beautiful rhyme and solid meter enhance the write, well done. All my best, Bill
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from elchupakabra
You gotta' crawl before you walk, or in this case fly. I thought you did a really great job constructing this piece with some subtle alliterations. I also love that you took a unique spin on the much used caterpillar to butterfly theme. Great work overall on this piece, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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You gotta' crawl before you walk, or in this case fly. I thought you did a really great job constructing this piece with some subtle alliterations. I also love that you took a unique spin on the much used caterpillar to butterfly theme. Great work overall on this piece, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, elchupakabra :-) Brooke
Comment from poetbear
You need to publish a series of these because of their pure joy and celebration of Nature.
This time of year they creawl into my home which I am not fond of but try to get them back outside if I can.
This is a jewel.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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You need to publish a series of these because of their pure joy and celebration of Nature.
This time of year they creawl into my home which I am not fond of but try to get them back outside if I can.
This is a jewel.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Maddy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Sure!!
Comment from Adri7enne
Yes, I guess we all have to go through that stage. Wouldn't be fun, otherwise. We all have to fight our way through the caterpillar stage. Like my father used to say:"It's a long haul!" LOL!
I loved the picture and the black background. Nice one, Brooke.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Yes, I guess we all have to go through that stage. Wouldn't be fun, otherwise. We all have to fight our way through the caterpillar stage. Like my father used to say:"It's a long haul!" LOL!
I loved the picture and the black background. Nice one, Brooke.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Adrienne - wise Dad :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
A woolly version of the worm is a great line that is humorous
and adds whimsy to the poem. Your smooth flow of words makes this a poem to read over and over,it has a positive message of the caterpillar continuing to find her way before she becomes a butterfly.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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A woolly version of the worm is a great line that is humorous
and adds whimsy to the poem. Your smooth flow of words makes this a poem to read over and over,it has a positive message of the caterpillar continuing to find her way before she becomes a butterfly.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Brooke,
Another little poetic gem.
You know, this collection of insect poems with pictures would create a marvelous book.
I look forward to the next in line!
Ron x
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Another little poetic gem.
You know, this collection of insect poems with pictures would create a marvelous book.
I look forward to the next in line!
Ron x
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Ron, thank you so much :-) Brooke
