The Caterpillar Has to Crawl
a quatern with modified repeating lines141 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
Your muse is enjoying a very buggy world at the moment, isn't she? Caterpillars bring back many memories of childhood and they never cease to fascinate children. This is the reason for the success of "the Very Hungry Caterpillar", This playful, rhyming poem, focusing on his mode of movement is just as captivating.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Your muse is enjoying a very buggy world at the moment, isn't she? Caterpillars bring back many memories of childhood and they never cease to fascinate children. This is the reason for the success of "the Very Hungry Caterpillar", This playful, rhyming poem, focusing on his mode of movement is just as captivating.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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seaglass, thank you so very much :-) Yes, my grandson loves to spot bugs on his daily walks and his visits to the park :-) Brooke
Comment from l.raven
HI Brooke, a very sweet children's poem...a caterpillar has to learn to crawl before it can fly...the same as a child...I so love your poem...you do these so well...very nicely written...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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HI Brooke, a very sweet children's poem...a caterpillar has to learn to crawl before it can fly...the same as a child...I so love your poem...you do these so well...very nicely written...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Linda :-) Brooke
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you are so welcome Brooke...luff
Comment from GWHARGIS
I guess when you think about it, we are all caterpillars at one time or another. We all have to crawl before we can fly, or write or do anything. I like the imagery of the caterpillar climbing the plains and the hills. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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I guess when you think about it, we are all caterpillars at one time or another. We all have to crawl before we can fly, or write or do anything. I like the imagery of the caterpillar climbing the plains and the hills. Nicely done.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so much :-) I so appreciate your encouragement and generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from Eric1
What an absolutely wonderful piece of writing, far too good for children, I love the flow and the lovely rhythm throughout,'A wolly version of the worm'? that gorgeous line will stay with me forever, I loved this and wish I had a six to give it!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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What an absolutely wonderful piece of writing, far too good for children, I love the flow and the lovely rhythm throughout,'A wolly version of the worm'? that gorgeous line will stay with me forever, I loved this and wish I had a six to give it!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Eric, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I think I have told you this story before, if so I am sorry. A couple of years ago when we had our caterpillars and watched them go into a crystals one of my impatient first graders asked, every day by the way, "When will they turn into butterflies?" I answered, "I don't know, only Mother Nature knows." One of my little guys then asked, "Who's Mother Nature?" Another one, "Jesus's wife." Another one, "I don't think that's right." I love caterpillars and first graders!!!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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I think I have told you this story before, if so I am sorry. A couple of years ago when we had our caterpillars and watched them go into a crystals one of my impatient first graders asked, every day by the way, "When will they turn into butterflies?" I answered, "I don't know, only Mother Nature knows." One of my little guys then asked, "Who's Mother Nature?" Another one, "Jesus's wife." Another one, "I don't think that's right." I love caterpillars and first graders!!!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Barbara. Yes, I remember the story but no need to apologize. It's definitely cute enough to bear repeating :-) Brooke
Comment from Debra White
Hi Brooke, I really enjoyed this and I especially liked how you tweaked your repeat lines. Such a lovely poem of logical whimsy (I hope you know what I mean by that lol!) your use of alliteration is brilliant, sounds great read aloud - love the pear and peach line in particular - satisfying to get your tongue around those lovely 'p's!
Kind regards, Debra :)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke, I really enjoyed this and I especially liked how you tweaked your repeat lines. Such a lovely poem of logical whimsy (I hope you know what I mean by that lol!) your use of alliteration is brilliant, sounds great read aloud - love the pear and peach line in particular - satisfying to get your tongue around those lovely 'p's!
Kind regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Debra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
Nice AABB rhyme scheme poem about the caterpillar. You have to admire their tenacity in moving to different places. Alliteration throughout makes it flow smoothly as well. 8-)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Nice AABB rhyme scheme poem about the caterpillar. You have to admire their tenacity in moving to different places. Alliteration throughout makes it flow smoothly as well. 8-)
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ladybugs then caterpillars. Is there something you're not telling us, Brooke? Has something been ...(wait for it)... (almost there) ...BUGGING YOU? Ah-ha-ha-ha-a-aaaaaaaaaaaaa...!!!
But, I digress (as I am wont to do).
In all seriousness, this wonderfully written, lighthearted verse would be perfect for a children's' book of poems.
Great work!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Ladybugs then caterpillars. Is there something you're not telling us, Brooke? Has something been ...(wait for it)... (almost there) ...BUGGING YOU? Ah-ha-ha-ha-a-aaaaaaaaaaaaa...!!!
But, I digress (as I am wont to do).
In all seriousness, this wonderfully written, lighthearted verse would be perfect for a children's' book of poems.
Great work!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Dean, thank you so much, my friend - what a cool present you've sent me :-) Brooke
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I love your little excursions into all things entomological of late, Brooke...LOL--:>}
My pleasure!
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Sawyer is loving the bugs a lot lately :-)
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Him too? I've always adored insects. Perhaps he'll grow up to discover a new species of butterfly.
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Either that or he'll repair elevators or drive a school bus or be an astronomer...he has a bunch of interests LOL
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He'll narrow it down one day, when he's ready to really dig in. Sawyer seems like a wonderful little guy, from all I've read about him. I'm sure he is.
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Yeah, he has a few more years to decide. Heck, he has a few more years until kindergarten. LOL
Comment from Sasha
The caterpillar certainly pays a high price for his future wings, doesn't he? Great job with this one. I got a real kick out of it. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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The caterpillar certainly pays a high price for his future wings, doesn't he? Great job with this one. I got a real kick out of it. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Valerie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
Love this little message of the caterpillar. And the picture is perfect. OF course, the poem is terrific, too. As humans we have to crawl too before we learn to walk. That made me think of my oldest daughter. She never crawled on her hands and knees like most kids. She scooted along on her butt with one leg behind her. It was cute to watch her. LOL. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Love this little message of the caterpillar. And the picture is perfect. OF course, the poem is terrific, too. As humans we have to crawl too before we learn to walk. That made me think of my oldest daughter. She never crawled on her hands and knees like most kids. She scooted along on her butt with one leg behind her. It was cute to watch her. LOL. Miss Sally
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) Brooke
