The Caterpillar Has to Crawl
a quatern with modified repeating lines141 total reviews
Comment from Janie King
Very cute poem and one that the reader could picture all that was happening. Sawyer has another expression in the picture posted that makes me wonder what her is thinking. I am so far behind. I'm trying to get tow bedrooms turned into classrooms as I will home school all of Krystal's three and then two 13 year old's (7th graders) that I tutored when they were in 2nd and 4rd grade. They gave migraines and seizures and the flourescent lights and all the pressure of worrying about missing school is really causing panic attacks. They're pretty self-motivated just have trouble dealing with pressure and the flourescent lights. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Very cute poem and one that the reader could picture all that was happening. Sawyer has another expression in the picture posted that makes me wonder what her is thinking. I am so far behind. I'm trying to get tow bedrooms turned into classrooms as I will home school all of Krystal's three and then two 13 year old's (7th graders) that I tutored when they were in 2nd and 4rd grade. They gave migraines and seizures and the flourescent lights and all the pressure of worrying about missing school is really causing panic attacks. They're pretty self-motivated just have trouble dealing with pressure and the flourescent lights. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Janie, thank you so much, my friend :-) That is one huge responsibility teaching all those children. You're a good woman, Janie :-) Brooke
Comment from Deborah Marie
Beautifully written and wonderful photo used. Creative use of rhyming. Nice imagery throughout. And, creative comparisons used. Thanks for sharing, Deb
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Beautifully written and wonderful photo used. Creative use of rhyming. Nice imagery throughout. And, creative comparisons used. Thanks for sharing, Deb
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Deb, thank you so very much for your generous and encouraging review :-) Brooke
Comment from ElegantButler
What a wonderful way to tell a child that it's okay to start off small. So often we forget our humble beginnings, trying to tell our kids to 'think big'. But now I wonder, does the butterfly remember being a caterpillar?
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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What a wonderful way to tell a child that it's okay to start off small. So often we forget our humble beginnings, trying to tell our kids to 'think big'. But now I wonder, does the butterfly remember being a caterpillar?
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Elegant Butler, thank you for your review, and that is a good question! Brooke :-)
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
Nice one, the caterpillar has to be the ultimate contrast between the 'infant' and the 'adult stages of any creature.
Patrick
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Nice one, the caterpillar has to be the ultimate contrast between the 'infant' and the 'adult stages of any creature.
Patrick
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Patrick, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Eternal Muse
This is brilliant stuff, Brooke, and even though I am scared of catepillars, I have to admit the hand of the master.
My only suggestion is, maybe you'd want to explain a quatern in your author notes. I didn't know what it was.
The repeating lines work beautifully, music to my ears:
If such a creature wants to reach
the crispest pear or plumpest peach,
the caterpillar needs to crawl,
no matter if the tree is tall.
Ah... What a master you are, Brooke, when it comes to rhyme and meter!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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This is brilliant stuff, Brooke, and even though I am scared of catepillars, I have to admit the hand of the master.
My only suggestion is, maybe you'd want to explain a quatern in your author notes. I didn't know what it was.
The repeating lines work beautifully, music to my ears:
If such a creature wants to reach
the crispest pear or plumpest peach,
the caterpillar needs to crawl,
no matter if the tree is tall.
Ah... What a master you are, Brooke, when it comes to rhyme and meter!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Yelena, for your generous response to this poem. I used to explain the forms of my poems in my author notes all the time, and I'd still have a dozen people ask, What's a quatern? It frustrated me that so many people don't read the notes. Brooke :-)
Comment from BlueFlag
Wow very great poem
I loved it
And already has 2 ribbons
and is very good
5 big stars
good luck
very good poem, i liked it alot
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Wow very great poem
I loved it
And already has 2 ribbons
and is very good
5 big stars
good luck
very good poem, i liked it alot
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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BlueFlag, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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your welcome brooke
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
This poem is fantastic beyond words! I love the precisely calculated word choices and their arrangement in this poem. I love how you intricately detailed the movement of the caterpillar all the while keeping the upbeat, rhythmic pace of this poem consistently flowing as a result of the repetitive aabb meter format. This poem is very pleasing to the ear as it has a sing song type of quality to it.This would be an excellent poem to use with young children as the rhyming aspect would appeal greatly to them yet they would learn science from the subject matter in a fun way. Excellent use of alliteration in caterpillar/crawl, plumpest/peach, tree/tall, and spacious/sky. The creativity behind some lines such as "a woolly version of the worm" and "who navigates the spacious sky" are delightful in creation. The accompanying photo adds to the poem enhancing the writer's words even more so. The stanzas are neat, concise, well formatted and transition seamlessly into one another. The writer truly created a very cleverly written piece that offers educational information about the caterpillar yet approaches this subject matter in a fun way that both adults and children can enjoy. This piece deserves nothing short of six stars for the innovative way it teaches something to others. Eloquently written and designed!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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This poem is fantastic beyond words! I love the precisely calculated word choices and their arrangement in this poem. I love how you intricately detailed the movement of the caterpillar all the while keeping the upbeat, rhythmic pace of this poem consistently flowing as a result of the repetitive aabb meter format. This poem is very pleasing to the ear as it has a sing song type of quality to it.This would be an excellent poem to use with young children as the rhyming aspect would appeal greatly to them yet they would learn science from the subject matter in a fun way. Excellent use of alliteration in caterpillar/crawl, plumpest/peach, tree/tall, and spacious/sky. The creativity behind some lines such as "a woolly version of the worm" and "who navigates the spacious sky" are delightful in creation. The accompanying photo adds to the poem enhancing the writer's words even more so. The stanzas are neat, concise, well formatted and transition seamlessly into one another. The writer truly created a very cleverly written piece that offers educational information about the caterpillar yet approaches this subject matter in a fun way that both adults and children can enjoy. This piece deserves nothing short of six stars for the innovative way it teaches something to others. Eloquently written and designed!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Rainbows, thank you so much for your thorough analysis and kind words of encouragement. Brooke
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You are welcome! :-)
Comment from Dawny53
What a great poem! I couldn't find one single thing wrong with it. Flowed perfectly, made sense, and never sounded mushy or corny
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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What a great poem! I couldn't find one single thing wrong with it. Flowed perfectly, made sense, and never sounded mushy or corny
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Dawny, for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Quite the realist in this one.
Children are fascinated by all manner of things and caterpillers and creepy crawlies are high on the list. How lovely it is to read a poem which is educational and draws children to watch, obseve, and learn about the world around them.
Thoughtfully written and rhymed modified quatern poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Quite the realist in this one.
Children are fascinated by all manner of things and caterpillers and creepy crawlies are high on the list. How lovely it is to read a poem which is educational and draws children to watch, obseve, and learn about the world around them.
Thoughtfully written and rhymed modified quatern poem.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Seken, thank you so much. I appreciate your generous rating and thoughtful encouragement. Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
I like it, it rolls down the page with such ease, and tell the story of the caterpillar in lovely chosen words and rhymes. Great pic.
Well written
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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I like it, it rolls down the page with such ease, and tell the story of the caterpillar in lovely chosen words and rhymes. Great pic.
Well written
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Mary, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
